Football - A Novel
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Comment from royowen
This Melton Ivory is causing a lot of angst, but the good thing was the friends took care of the situation so that Gabriel doesn't have, and the fears are that he might do a little more damage than he ought, but all's well that ends well, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
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This Melton Ivory is causing a lot of angst, but the good thing was the friends took care of the situation so that Gabriel doesn't have, and the fears are that he might do a little more damage than he ought, but all's well that ends well, beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Very nice continuation. Seems that Ivory plans to cause problems of SOME sort, though we will have to wait to see what he intends. The scary thing is that he is so patient and cunning. YIKES!
Notes:
1.) After the player(s') bus returned to the high school,
2.) "What (are) you doing here?"
--> What're you doing here?
3.) Gabriel hit the wall as on his way to the hallway.
--> delete 'as'
Thanks!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Barb,
Very nice continuation. Seems that Ivory plans to cause problems of SOME sort, though we will have to wait to see what he intends. The scary thing is that he is so patient and cunning. YIKES!
Notes:
1.) After the player(s') bus returned to the high school,
2.) "What (are) you doing here?"
--> What're you doing here?
3.) Gabriel hit the wall as on his way to the hallway.
--> delete 'as'
Thanks!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I have made the corrections. I was wondering about the first one. That's an honest mistake. The others carelessness. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Sankey
This was a dramatic, good read. This Ivory creep sounds like he doesn't give up easily. Is he backed by the inlaws? Glad to hear the wrist is improving. Well done, again.
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This was a dramatic, good read. This Ivory creep sounds like he doesn't give up easily. Is he backed by the inlaws? Glad to hear the wrist is improving. Well done, again.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful support.
Comment from amahra
Gabriel made me angry at first for not realizing they kept him from knowing about Ivory because they wanted to avoid a physical confrontation. But I'm glad he realized it at the end.
At his pick-up, he glanced at his phone, came back to [the]house,
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Gabriel made me angry at first for not realizing they kept him from knowing about Ivory because they wanted to avoid a physical confrontation. But I'm glad he realized it at the end.
At his pick-up, he glanced at his phone, came back to [the]house,
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Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
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I have a problem leaving those little words out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Gabriel is over-reacting extremely because he wasn't informed about Ivory showing up at the football game. Others were perfectly capable of handling the situation, so he should have been appreciative instead of going fighting mad. If this is going to be his usual pattern, not a good thing. I hope he learns to let Katherine handle her own life. I'll be curious to see just what part Ivory has in this, if he is perhaps acting on someone else's behalf? Great characterization of Gabriel, although I'm not approving of his behavior. judi
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Gabriel is over-reacting extremely because he wasn't informed about Ivory showing up at the football game. Others were perfectly capable of handling the situation, so he should have been appreciative instead of going fighting mad. If this is going to be his usual pattern, not a good thing. I hope he learns to let Katherine handle her own life. I'll be curious to see just what part Ivory has in this, if he is perhaps acting on someone else's behalf? Great characterization of Gabriel, although I'm not approving of his behavior. judi
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Gabriel knows he has a temper issue and has been working on it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
I liked this chapter. You really showed how much everybody care about Catherine. Gabriel tends to show his temper if he thinks she's in trouble.
One minor thing: came back to house = back to the house.
It's a great continuation, Barbara. Ulla:)))
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I liked this chapter. You really showed how much everybody care about Catherine. Gabriel tends to show his temper if he thinks she's in trouble.
One minor thing: came back to house = back to the house.
It's a great continuation, Barbara. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I have added the missing 'the' Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
By the way you show everyone reaction to Ivory lets us see how much people care about Katherine, reaction to not being told shows how hard is is for him to hold his temper when he feels Katherine might be in danger. I think they saved him from doing some stupid by waiting until the game was over to tell him. It is interesting that katherine got a feeling of fear and texted Gabriel.
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By the way you show everyone reaction to Ivory lets us see how much people care about Katherine, reaction to not being told shows how hard is is for him to hold his temper when he feels Katherine might be in danger. I think they saved him from doing some stupid by waiting until the game was over to tell him. It is interesting that katherine got a feeling of fear and texted Gabriel.
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Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from Begin Again
Good work, Barbara! I like Katherine's and Gabriel's connection... not only in general but subconsciously as well. they are taking all precautions and moving forward in their relationship. I just hope this crazy Ivory doesn't do something horrible.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Good work, Barbara! I like Katherine's and Gabriel's connection... not only in general but subconsciously as well. they are taking all precautions and moving forward in their relationship. I just hope this crazy Ivory doesn't do something horrible.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
