Football - A Novel
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Comment from royowen
Isn't it funny? The whole school now knows that Gabriel and Katherine are an item, but they're trying so hard to hide, so even Jordan knows that something's got to give, and all boys need a hero, and that's what Gabriel is, much to the realisation of Katherine. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : most (of) my team will be intelligible 2: (I) think Mr Edwards.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Isn't it funny? The whole school now knows that Gabriel and Katherine are an item, but they're trying so hard to hide, so even Jordan knows that something's got to give, and all boys need a hero, and that's what Gabriel is, much to the realisation of Katherine. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : most (of) my team will be intelligible 2: (I) think Mr Edwards.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I made the changes.
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter, not a dot out of place. Again with Melton, Kate being a victim and Gabe to the rescue (in a non-violent way).
Your story is moving along the path you chose. The dialogue and scenes are neat and concise. Your characters stay within their attributes and roles.
Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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A well written chapter, not a dot out of place. Again with Melton, Kate being a victim and Gabe to the rescue (in a non-violent way).
Your story is moving along the path you chose. The dialogue and scenes are neat and concise. Your characters stay within their attributes and roles.
Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm wondering what Melton's playing at. He knows Katherine isn't interested, yet he still perseveres. Is there something else going on with him? Hmm. I think Katherine's sons are all in favour of Gabriel, and will give their mum their blessing when the time comes. This was another lovely chapter, Barbara. I'll be away for two weeks. I'm off on a cruise around the Canary Islands, so I'll catch up when I get back. Well done, my friend, great chapter. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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I'm wondering what Melton's playing at. He knows Katherine isn't interested, yet he still perseveres. Is there something else going on with him? Hmm. I think Katherine's sons are all in favour of Gabriel, and will give their mum their blessing when the time comes. This was another lovely chapter, Barbara. I'll be away for two weeks. I'm off on a cruise around the Canary Islands, so I'll catch up when I get back. Well done, my friend, great chapter. :) Sandra
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Have fun on your cruise. I'm jealous.
Comment from amahra
There's a lot going on in this chapter. Cool. I don't think Melton will get the message unless he's punched in the nose. But that's just me. Another good post, Barbara. Just one thing below:
"He pecked her [check."] I'm sure you meant He pecked her [cheek.]
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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There's a lot going on in this chapter. Cool. I don't think Melton will get the message unless he's punched in the nose. But that's just me. Another good post, Barbara. Just one thing below:
"He pecked her [check."] I'm sure you meant He pecked her [cheek.]
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and I've corrected that silly mistake.
Comment from Sankey
Once again, another great read. I liked how Gabriel handled the "stalker." Just one teeny, weeny possible miss, this time if you like. Most (of)my team will be ineligible.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Once again, another great read. I liked how Gabriel handled the "stalker." Just one teeny, weeny possible miss, this time if you like. Most (of)my team will be ineligible.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was a great continuation to the story. That coffee shop incident caused quite a stir. And then the kiss in the car park, but I think Gabriel handled it very well. Now, what is next? Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Hi Barbara, this was a great continuation to the story. That coffee shop incident caused quite a stir. And then the kiss in the car park, but I think Gabriel handled it very well. Now, what is next? Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
People are so quick to make something out of nothing. I once worked as a security guard at a medical college one of the staff secretaries and I struck a platonic friendship. After Summer vacation, she unthinkingly hugged me and kissed me on the cheek. I was threatened with being fired and told that my wife would be informed of our affair. We had never done anything with each other than that friendly kiss on the cheek. She was eventually fired on some trumped up charges. Sometimes there is just no fairness from some people.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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People are so quick to make something out of nothing. I once worked as a security guard at a medical college one of the staff secretaries and I struck a platonic friendship. After Summer vacation, she unthinkingly hugged me and kissed me on the cheek. I was threatened with being fired and told that my wife would be informed of our affair. We had never done anything with each other than that friendly kiss on the cheek. She was eventually fired on some trumped up charges. Sometimes there is just no fairness from some people.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. So true. Once I wanted to show my AP, something in the staff bathroom that the janitors hadn't fixed in weeks. I told him to follow me. He said, "I can't go in there with you." I was shocked. I just wanted to show him something.
Comment from Begin Again
Gabriel has a soft side that comes out when he's around Katherine and the boys, but no one else better cross him. I think he would defend them regardless of the outcome to himself. Great story! I hope the storm doesn't sink the boat!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Gabriel has a soft side that comes out when he's around Katherine and the boys, but no one else better cross him. I think he would defend them regardless of the outcome to himself. Great story! I hope the storm doesn't sink the boat!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I think you're correct about Gabriel.
Comment from Ben Colder
I think you have captured the modern days of a typical family of this order and shared the feeling of good and bad situations with us, your audience. Of course, I have been a fan from the start, and knowing your style of writing; I stay a jump ahead. I hope you find a publishing company that will take an interest as your fans here have. Nature will heal that wrist in time. My best to you. Another good post.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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I think you have captured the modern days of a typical family of this order and shared the feeling of good and bad situations with us, your audience. Of course, I have been a fan from the start, and knowing your style of writing; I stay a jump ahead. I hope you find a publishing company that will take an interest as your fans here have. Nature will heal that wrist in time. My best to you. Another good post.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a fun chapter. I like the fact that Katherine has Gabriel, Melton, the lawyer and the whole high school football team as suitors.
It will be fun to read more.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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This is a fun chapter. I like the fact that Katherine has Gabriel, Melton, the lawyer and the whole high school football team as suitors.
It will be fun to read more.
Well done.
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.