Updraft
Making things right -32 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. You're correct, we are not perfect. Nobody is, the only person being was hung on a cross. Yes, we must make amends and move on. I enjoyed reading, the flow was good.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. You're correct, we are not perfect. Nobody is, the only person being was hung on a cross. Yes, we must make amends and move on. I enjoyed reading, the flow was good.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Hi Barbara,
Thanks for a great review and encouraging thoughts. Yes, only Christ was perfect in all his pipes and timbrels? I really appreciate your input. Means so much.
Comment from sarawill28
I really loved your poem. It was such a nice read! I particularly like the Mistakes made in haste section. I think that is very beautiful...it's so true. The updraft is a perfect title and you portray that in the poem...it builds up to a feeling of being uplifted. You did a very nice job with this!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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I really loved your poem. It was such a nice read! I particularly like the Mistakes made in haste section. I think that is very beautiful...it's so true. The updraft is a perfect title and you portray that in the poem...it builds up to a feeling of being uplifted. You did a very nice job with this!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Hi Sarawill,
Your review is such an amazing one with encouragement and warm thoughts on my work! I am beyond pleased you felt it worthy. I value your input, means so much. So thank you again.
Have a great weekend :))
Comment from Artasylum
Loved reading a couplet... I always enjoy succinct and clear thoughts... it was a perfect read for an in-perfect writer to write... good luck in your contest... thanks dianaxo
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Loved reading a couplet... I always enjoy succinct and clear thoughts... it was a perfect read for an in-perfect writer to write... good luck in your contest... thanks dianaxo
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Hi Diane,
Really appreciate such a supportive review on my poem. Your input is always welcomed so thank you. Means so much :))
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Glorious picture to go with a poem that touches the heart. I know this is secret stuff for the contest, but I believe I feel the artist in my air. Best wishes for the contest. Lovely work here!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Glorious picture to go with a poem that touches the heart. I know this is secret stuff for the contest, but I believe I feel the artist in my air. Best wishes for the contest. Lovely work here!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Hi Sherry,
Thank you for a delightful and complimentary review! Bless you!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
For a lot of us, the thought of being perfect takes confidence from us and leaves us doubting every step we take. In situations like these, the responsibility falls on your shoulder to bring confidence back. I enjoyed this thought-provoking poem.Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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For a lot of us, the thought of being perfect takes confidence from us and leaves us doubting every step we take. In situations like these, the responsibility falls on your shoulder to bring confidence back. I enjoyed this thought-provoking poem.Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Seshadri,
Your words are well taken and your review beautiful as well as encouraging.
Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It is a lovely painting
and a good presentation.
-You wrote a good poem
with a good topic.
-I like the rhyming couplets, too.
-Effective use of dialogue between
your conscience and yourself.
-You have good examples
with very good imagery, like
"plans...with dodgy decisions have sunk"
and "a silver streak of yearning."
-An excellent concluding couplet.
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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-It is a lovely painting
and a good presentation.
-You wrote a good poem
with a good topic.
-I like the rhyming couplets, too.
-Effective use of dialogue between
your conscience and yourself.
-You have good examples
with very good imagery, like
"plans...with dodgy decisions have sunk"
and "a silver streak of yearning."
-An excellent concluding couplet.
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Pam, I fixed the first couplet? hoping it is better rhyming and smooth enough.
Thanks for the nudge :))
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Pam, I fixed the first couplet? hoping it is better rhyming and smooth enough.
Thanks for the nudge :))
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You did a good job. You are welcome for the review, and the nudge! I took the suggestion out of the review.
Comment from chocoletdrop052
Live your best life in Christ Jesus, Understand that you are perfectly made in the image of the LORD. Sin is over-rated, satan is not a mystery or someone who does not know the LORD. Heaven is the LORD's throne and Earth is His footstool, On the sixth day of the week, the Holies was asked a very special request,let us make man in our image.Amen, The Son of Man came to his footstool, revealed facts unknown, He ascended back to his origin because he finished the works that was started at the beginning.keep it going, Today's is only calendared there is no promise for tomorrow
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Live your best life in Christ Jesus, Understand that you are perfectly made in the image of the LORD. Sin is over-rated, satan is not a mystery or someone who does not know the LORD. Heaven is the LORD's throne and Earth is His footstool, On the sixth day of the week, the Holies was asked a very special request,let us make man in our image.Amen, The Son of Man came to his footstool, revealed facts unknown, He ascended back to his origin because he finished the works that was started at the beginning.keep it going, Today's is only calendared there is no promise for tomorrow
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, ChocolateDrop! Yes, I am a believer and greatly appreciate your kind words and good news! :))
All the best to you.
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Thank you so much, ChocolateDrop! Yes, I am a believer and greatly appreciate your kind words and good news! :))
All the best to you.
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My sheep know my voice and will follow me where ever I go....The LORD departing message to us, do read this in memory of Him: John 17:11-14
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I'm the toe nail of the LORD, with no importance to the world. As the LORD cares for his feet, remember the foot washing he did for the disciples and for Moses he told to take of those sandals. We are grafted in his body.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very good. After running into the good rhyming in the last half, I found myself wishing the first half was better rhymed. That last couplet is really nice.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Very good. After running into the good rhyming in the last half, I found myself wishing the first half was better rhymed. That last couplet is really nice.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thanks, Paul. I took your suggestion to heart.
Thank you for your great review.
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Thanks, Paul. I took your suggestion to heart.
Thank you for your great review.
Comment from Mary Shifman
Wow. This beautiful and a little sad. I really like the poem and relate to it. I it has gorgeous imagery and the rhyme is excellent. My favorite line is, "Hope raises its phoenix wings, in the updraft I am caught" The image is splendid. Good luck in the contest. I'm out of sixes or I would give you one.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Wow. This beautiful and a little sad. I really like the poem and relate to it. I it has gorgeous imagery and the rhyme is excellent. My favorite line is, "Hope raises its phoenix wings, in the updraft I am caught" The image is splendid. Good luck in the contest. I'm out of sixes or I would give you one.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Mary,
Thank you for such a wonderful and encouraging review with generous comments. You are very kind to mention a virtual six?they are just as meaningful :)). Much appreciated.
All the best to you.
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Mary,
Thank you for such a wonderful and encouraging review with generous comments. You are very kind to mention a virtual six?they are just as meaningful :)). Much appreciated.
All the best to you.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent poem. Your presentation has also been carefully and thoughtfully chosen. I like the realism throughout, but the positive note of optimism at the end. Very best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Excellent poem. Your presentation has also been carefully and thoughtfully chosen. I like the realism throughout, but the positive note of optimism at the end. Very best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Wendy,
Thank you so much. Your comments touched me deeply. Thank you.