Football - A Novel
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
thank you for the update. Your story keeps getting exciting with each chapter you write. Sure glad that they made the tire change quickly after getting some help. Scary when they have no phone, no tire either!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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thank you for the update. Your story keeps getting exciting with each chapter you write. Sure glad that they made the tire change quickly after getting some help. Scary when they have no phone, no tire either!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Often the newer cars don't have spares. It hpaaened to me. Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. I'm surprised that play was legal too. I don't think you need the growling dogs anymore. The readers should all know they are being watched and will not do anything about it. We get they are incredibly passive people. Their conversations and actions have enforced that.
Notes:
Harold â?" "Son, what were you thinking?"
Gabriel â?" "I had nothing to do with it.
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He chuckled. ["]Who would've thunk it?"
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Gabriel checked {it} text. "Dad, we have a live mic."
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Very interesting. I'm surprised that play was legal too. I don't think you need the growling dogs anymore. The readers should all know they are being watched and will not do anything about it. We get they are incredibly passive people. Their conversations and actions have enforced that.
Notes:
Harold â?" "Son, what were you thinking?"
Gabriel â?" "I had nothing to do with it.
- requires editing
He chuckled. ["]Who would've thunk it?"
- add
Gabriel checked {it} text. "Dad, we have a live mic."
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I have slowed down on the growling dogs. I'm afraid it will get forgotten. I sometimes get some interesting reviews that seem perfectly clear to me. I have no clue how those weird characters got there. I've fixed them.
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Yeah, I get those characters too. I think something is wrong with the editor.
Comment from BethShelby
This chapter was expecially fun to read. I enjoyed the kisses and the game and he open mike. It can't be easy trying to type with one hand, I hope the wrist improves and you don't need surgery.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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This chapter was expecially fun to read. I enjoyed the kisses and the game and he open mike. It can't be easy trying to type with one hand, I hope the wrist improves and you don't need surgery.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
It'll take a while for your wrist to heal Barbara. I will pray. Things are "hotting" up between Katherine and Gabriel. Interesting tussle between the rival coach and Gabe. (Must have missed it) but it looks like they'll need to marry! Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy. (You'll probably need to go over this episode again Barbara)
Typo : Katherine sent a (texted) Gabriel. Text to? 2: Who would've (thunk) it. Thought? 3: Gabriel checked (it) text. The? 4: As she bit(e) her lower lip,
5 : Katherine stared at (him) her? 6: Good(,) your emergency blinkers are on.
Information, Barbara: Gabriel's spare tyre would be a different size Barbara, they'd need a tow!
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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It'll take a while for your wrist to heal Barbara. I will pray. Things are "hotting" up between Katherine and Gabriel. Interesting tussle between the rival coach and Gabe. (Must have missed it) but it looks like they'll need to marry! Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy. (You'll probably need to go over this episode again Barbara)
Typo : Katherine sent a (texted) Gabriel. Text to? 2: Who would've (thunk) it. Thought? 3: Gabriel checked (it) text. The? 4: As she bit(e) her lower lip,
5 : Katherine stared at (him) her? 6: Good(,) your emergency blinkers are on.
Information, Barbara: Gabriel's spare tyre would be a different size Barbara, they'd need a tow!
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I have made the corrections. The guys brought the tire from home. It wasn't Gabriel's. I might need to make that clearer. Gabriel and Bill were on the bus with the players. They would have known which tire would fit.
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Of course they would, it wasn?t clear.
Comment from nomi338
Please do not give it a second thought. Your writing skills are such that we, your readers understand what you intended to say, and we are very forgiving. You need not worry about anything other than healing up and being more careful in the future. :)
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Please do not give it a second thought. Your writing skills are such that we, your readers understand what you intended to say, and we are very forgiving. You need not worry about anything other than healing up and being more careful in the future. :)
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. You're very sweet.
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Reading this wonderful story is a very real treat to my romantic heart.