Football - A Novel
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Comment from nomi338
I picked up right away on the lawyer's statement that the only way for the in-laws to get more money was to have custody of the kids. That pretty much explains everything to me about their recent strange behavior. The fact that Katherine's boys do not seem to care for their grand parents spell a great deal of trouble for them should the grand parents gain custody. I pray that never happens.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I picked up right away on the lawyer's statement that the only way for the in-laws to get more money was to have custody of the kids. That pretty much explains everything to me about their recent strange behavior. The fact that Katherine's boys do not seem to care for their grand parents spell a great deal of trouble for them should the grand parents gain custody. I pray that never happens.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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We shall see how good the lawyers are. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
Katherine's in-laws have a lot of nerve. Like the lawyer said it would be unusual for the parents to get anything and for them to want to take money from that grandchildren doesn't speak well for them. I am enjoying your story and waiting to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Katherine's in-laws have a lot of nerve. Like the lawyer said it would be unusual for the parents to get anything and for them to want to take money from that grandchildren doesn't speak well for them. I am enjoying your story and waiting to see what happens next.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Gabriel doesn't need to worry about Katherine's boys. They already love him. Their own father didn't pay much attention to them, so Gabriel is making up for that. I think all his attention to them will help win Katherine over, eventually. It's no surprise that Katherine's in-laws are looking for the money, and the lawyer explains that. I think I'd make the lump sum their son left more than $150,000. That doesn't seem like much in today's terms, especially if he was rich. Great work with the characters. judi
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Gabriel doesn't need to worry about Katherine's boys. They already love him. Their own father didn't pay much attention to them, so Gabriel is making up for that. I think all his attention to them will help win Katherine over, eventually. It's no surprise that Katherine's in-laws are looking for the money, and the lawyer explains that. I think I'd make the lump sum their son left more than $150,000. That doesn't seem like much in today's terms, especially if he was rich. Great work with the characters. judi
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the suggestion. I will rethink that.
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You're welcome. Another great chapter. The situation with the in-laws is going to be a challenge for Katherine. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter and Gabriel is a good guy. I only noticed a couple of things:
Who the first was?" = Who was the first?" Sounds more natural.
yes, wills can be contested, and they can. = yes, ...., and they sometimes are. Just more coherent.
Great writing. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter and Gabriel is a good guy. I only noticed a couple of things:
Who the first was?" = Who was the first?" Sounds more natural.
yes, wills can be contested, and they can. = yes, ...., and they sometimes are. Just more coherent.
Great writing. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I like your suggestions. Thank you. I've made the changes.
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I'm glad. :)))
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter and continuation of the in-laws arc. Everything is proceeding according to how your Main Characters are crafted. They stay well within their expected lanes.
notes:
She laughed. "I don't know what you're talking about?["]
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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A well written chapter and continuation of the in-laws arc. Everything is proceeding according to how your Main Characters are crafted. They stay well within their expected lanes.
notes:
She laughed. "I don't know what you're talking about?["]
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I've added the wayward quotation mark.
Comment from Sanku
Katherine's in-laws are really weird .What would they not do to get hold of some money? hope having Gabriel on her side will help her to cross that bridges.I enjoyed the dialogues and the way the plot is moving.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Katherine's in-laws are really weird .What would they not do to get hold of some money? hope having Gabriel on her side will help her to cross that bridges.I enjoyed the dialogues and the way the plot is moving.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I am betting Gabriel will be a huge help. Let's hope. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--as always, you nailed the dialog--very sweet scene with slyly clever banter where Katherine and Gabriel refer to Katherine in the third person. Excellent!
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Gripping--as always, you nailed the dialog--very sweet scene with slyly clever banter where Katherine and Gabriel refer to Katherine in the third person. Excellent!
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
What do I need to do win this lady over?"
"I have couple of ideas."
Who the first was?"
, yes, wills can be contested, and they can.
A nice easy flowing chapter. It shows Katherine and Gabriel starting to work together and I love the banter they share. As always, a great story. I only stopped writing for your chapter and Sandra's.... My two favorite reads.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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What do I need to do win this lady over?"
"I have couple of ideas."
Who the first was?"
, yes, wills can be contested, and they can.
A nice easy flowing chapter. It shows Katherine and Gabriel starting to work together and I love the banter they share. As always, a great story. I only stopped writing for your chapter and Sandra's.... My two favorite reads.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and support. I appreciate both.