Football - A Novel
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Comment from Begin Again
Good job, Barbara... I am feeling so sentimental today and your story just smeared a big thick layer of icing over the top. Of course, there are always a few "nuts" in the group like the in-laws lol. Wonderful read! Gabriel really did a nice job in backing down those people...
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Good job, Barbara... I am feeling so sentimental today and your story just smeared a big thick layer of icing over the top. Of course, there are always a few "nuts" in the group like the in-laws lol. Wonderful read! Gabriel really did a nice job in backing down those people...
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
I'm no book or story critic Barbara but one thing I know is that you know how to move a storyline well!
The pace is perfect, the characters engaging and the storyline inventive.
Thank you for the pre-chaper summation and character list.
I've written plays and skits before. Some short stories but I hope reading your work will help me along.
Take care
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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I'm no book or story critic Barbara but one thing I know is that you know how to move a storyline well!
The pace is perfect, the characters engaging and the storyline inventive.
Thank you for the pre-chaper summation and character list.
I've written plays and skits before. Some short stories but I hope reading your work will help me along.
Take care
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb
its really good of how you wrote about bringing Kate and the boys out for the day. We'll stop somewhere and bring lunch."getting to know Katherine's boys. I like the dialog , it was good how you wrote about how bringing Kate and her boys out for the day. It sounds like to me that as time goes on there will be a a question asked about a date for a for a a wedding.
Gert
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Barb
its really good of how you wrote about bringing Kate and the boys out for the day. We'll stop somewhere and bring lunch."getting to know Katherine's boys. I like the dialog , it was good how you wrote about how bringing Kate and her boys out for the day. It sounds like to me that as time goes on there will be a a question asked about a date for a for a a wedding.
Gert
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Maybe. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from nomi338
I am feeling like a physic right now. Something in my gut told me that Katherine's in laws might be suspects in her recent harassment incidents. I do not know why they are doing it, but it just struck me as odd that she was being spied on by PIs. Teachers do not usually make enough money to employ an investigator to spy on a rival for a teaching position.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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I am feeling like a physic right now. Something in my gut told me that Katherine's in laws might be suspects in her recent harassment incidents. I do not know why they are doing it, but it just struck me as odd that she was being spied on by PIs. Teachers do not usually make enough money to employ an investigator to spy on a rival for a teaching position.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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You're correct and on the right track. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, it all seems to be working out quite nicely. Gabriel is a good guy, and he's taking care of things.
I love this story and I'm looking forward to what is happening next. All best, Ulla::)))
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Hi Barbara, it all seems to be working out quite nicely. Gabriel is a good guy, and he's taking care of things.
I love this story and I'm looking forward to what is happening next. All best, Ulla::)))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Another masterpiece of dialog. Stunning interaction between G and K and brilliant response to the in-laws. Now we see who's behind the spying!
sugg: [His gaze averted=>he turned] to Jackson. (avert=turn away from)
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Another masterpiece of dialog. Stunning interaction between G and K and brilliant response to the in-laws. Now we see who's behind the spying!
sugg: [His gaze averted=>he turned] to Jackson. (avert=turn away from)
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I've made the change.