Football - A Novel
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Comment from Sankey
I loved this. Gabriel is trying so hard. He loves her boys and I know they are growing to love him too. The dad they never had. This is such a good story (you make it very real) and no spags this time around.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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I loved this. Gabriel is trying so hard. He loves her boys and I know they are growing to love him too. The dad they never had. This is such a good story (you make it very real) and no spags this time around.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Football Chapter 21 part2
I like how you made the conversation between
Gabriel and Katherine, it was told and both Gabriel and Katherine were calm disusing Gabriel's behavior during his pro-career still haunts him and he trying to make it right. then Gabriel saying, I Praayed that before we take our relationship to the next level, I have put my past where it belongs and I'm worthy of you. Again, I've done most of the talking."
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Football Chapter 21 part2
I like how you made the conversation between
Gabriel and Katherine, it was told and both Gabriel and Katherine were calm disusing Gabriel's behavior during his pro-career still haunts him and he trying to make it right. then Gabriel saying, I Praayed that before we take our relationship to the next level, I have put my past where it belongs and I'm worthy of you. Again, I've done most of the talking."
Gert
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for understanding.
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Barb you are most welcome
Gert
Comment from royowen
What a lovely conversation they just had. We all have a past, but should never have to keep paying for it! It's what we are right now that counts, that's why Jesus keeps erasing our past, so the next moment is a new dawn, beautifully written my friend Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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What a lovely conversation they just had. We all have a past, but should never have to keep paying for it! It's what we are right now that counts, that's why Jesus keeps erasing our past, so the next moment is a new dawn, beautifully written my friend Barbara, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from BethShelby
Well, that talk certainly should be the jealousy out of the picture, but I'm sure any woman who cared about a man would feel the same wayl Katherine did when seeing a young sexy girl kissing the man she cared about. It is pretty obvious that Gabrial is a decent guy who is trying to put his past behind him. I really enjoyed this chapter. I love the picture of the two love birds mending a broken heart.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Well, that talk certainly should be the jealousy out of the picture, but I'm sure any woman who cared about a man would feel the same wayl Katherine did when seeing a young sexy girl kissing the man she cared about. It is pretty obvious that Gabrial is a decent guy who is trying to put his past behind him. I really enjoyed this chapter. I love the picture of the two love birds mending a broken heart.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
I love this story, I love the way it is progressing. I am not disturbed by the setbacks, good relationships sometimes experience them. In my opinion, overcoming them helps to make the relationship stronger. I look forward to the day when the two of them become an official couple.
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I love this story, I love the way it is progressing. I am not disturbed by the setbacks, good relationships sometimes experience them. In my opinion, overcoming them helps to make the relationship stronger. I look forward to the day when the two of them become an official couple.
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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I agree. I think all relationships have set backs. I think it should happen here too. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome. Just keep on writing.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
High time for a series bonussssss! SSSSSStunning dialog--so real given the circumstances and personalities--brilliantly rendered, to the point, in real words, none trite or insipid. SSSSSSuperb. Cheerssssss. LIZ
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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High time for a series bonussssss! SSSSSStunning dialog--so real given the circumstances and personalities--brilliantly rendered, to the point, in real words, none trite or insipid. SSSSSSuperb. Cheerssssss. LIZ
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a great chapter, Barbara! The dialogue is so natural and finally the things that need to be said have been. I get frustrated with stories that continually have one or both people analyzing the others words and actions without listening to explanations or sharing their feelings. I'm glad that Gabriel took the reins on this one.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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This is a great chapter, Barbara! The dialogue is so natural and finally the things that need to be said have been. I get frustrated with stories that continually have one or both people analyzing the others words and actions without listening to explanations or sharing their feelings. I'm glad that Gabriel took the reins on this one.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Gabe will usually take the reins. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
A well crafted chapter. The conversation made a lot of things clear to the reader. The readers always knew they were in a relationship, even if it is an
unconventional one. We actually don't see much baggage either. It is referred to. A professional athlete with model girlfriends. Wouldn't that be considered, normal?
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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A well crafted chapter. The conversation made a lot of things clear to the reader. The readers always knew they were in a relationship, even if it is an
unconventional one. We actually don't see much baggage either. It is referred to. A professional athlete with model girlfriends. Wouldn't that be considered, normal?
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Yes, but not is small town America. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Wonderful job with this chapter. This convo could have gone wrong in SOOO many ways. I like this guy and I think he's proved himself to be legit and worthy in a thousand different ways. And now - they're finally exclusive! HUZZAH! This one is well worth the six. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Barb,
Wonderful job with this chapter. This convo could have gone wrong in SOOO many ways. I like this guy and I think he's proved himself to be legit and worthy in a thousand different ways. And now - they're finally exclusive! HUZZAH! This one is well worth the six. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. It means a lot to me.
