Weed Them Out
12 word poem30 total reviews
Comment from Possummagic
Your poem reminds me of what we having in Australia called "winter grass". As soon as we see it in our lawn of Sir Walter Raleigh, we spray it with Winter grass remedy. If not it takes hold and is ridiculously difficult to remove. So pulling out the roots of bitterness makes sense, lest it affects our grief and makes it linger. Nicely written. PM
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Your poem reminds me of what we having in Australia called "winter grass". As soon as we see it in our lawn of Sir Walter Raleigh, we spray it with Winter grass remedy. If not it takes hold and is ridiculously difficult to remove. So pulling out the roots of bitterness makes sense, lest it affects our grief and makes it linger. Nicely written. PM
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for informative review.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-For some reason your
artwork is not showing up.
You might want to check if
it is still available; sometimes
artists will remove it from
their portfolio.
-You have used your 12 words well
with a good topic and description.
-I like the comparison of bitterness
to weeds, followed by the good
message and root reference in
the concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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-For some reason your
artwork is not showing up.
You might want to check if
it is still available; sometimes
artists will remove it from
their portfolio.
-You have used your 12 words well
with a good topic and description.
-I like the comparison of bitterness
to weeds, followed by the good
message and root reference in
the concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I think as you said it could have been removed ..I changed it .Thanks for reading my tiny poem and thanks for the wishes
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You are welcome. I just saw your poem in the contest listing and saw the picture. It looked good.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
very well said. I like this short poem for its positivity. Bitterness is how we punish ourselves for other people's sins.
One suggestion. Please check and insert the picture. It has not appeared and the small letters make the reading difficult.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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very well said. I like this short poem for its positivity. Bitterness is how we punish ourselves for other people's sins.
One suggestion. Please check and insert the picture. It has not appeared and the small letters make the reading difficult.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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thanks for pointing it out. I changed the picture .My original choice somehow was not appearing.Thanks for dropping by and reading this tiny poem.
Comment from Senyai
Hi Anon,
This is quite good! Carefully chosen, your words speak with vivid imagery that conveys strong emotion. Bitterness will taint everything one perceives in life. It will, as weeds do, crowd out the beautiful moments and makes them indistinguishable from the bad.
A strong poem in so few words :-)
Did you mean to leave your great poem illustrated with a solid green picture?
Good luck in the writing prompt contest!
Senyai
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Hi Anon,
This is quite good! Carefully chosen, your words speak with vivid imagery that conveys strong emotion. Bitterness will taint everything one perceives in life. It will, as weeds do, crowd out the beautiful moments and makes them indistinguishable from the bad.
A strong poem in so few words :-)
Did you mean to leave your great poem illustrated with a solid green picture?
Good luck in the writing prompt contest!
Senyai
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much for Your kind words. I had chosen an art work ,but it suddenly disappeared!. So I changed the picture.
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Oh good,Anon,
I have looked at your good poem with the new picture and like it for a great match!
Comment from royowen
Yes indeed, we really shoud deal with a root of bitterness when it first manifests, not allowing it to grow into something much more difficult to deal with. Well done great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Yes indeed, we really shoud deal with a root of bitterness when it first manifests, not allowing it to grow into something much more difficult to deal with. Well done great entry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much . Bless you .
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Bless you
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Good job
Comment from Jill McCauslin
This is great. You manage to say a lot in only 12 words. That's a tough challenge. I have one small suggestion. I think the word "let" should be "lets" to match the tense of grows.
Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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This is great. You manage to say a lot in only 12 words. That's a tough challenge. I have one small suggestion. I think the word "let" should be "lets" to match the tense of grows.
Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This twelve-word poem, Weed Them Out, has the proper word count and reminds the readers that forgiveness and calm will serve more than lingering grief.
Note: Since you have a comma after Biterness, one would be appropriate after weeds.
...grows and (lets) grief ...
Happy day.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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This twelve-word poem, Weed Them Out, has the proper word count and reminds the readers that forgiveness and calm will serve more than lingering grief.
Note: Since you have a comma after Biterness, one would be appropriate after weeds.
...grows and (lets) grief ...
Happy day.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much.Thank you for the suggestion.
Comment from AliMom
Very nice. Very clear. Very deep, like the roots of bitterness. If I may make a suggestion? "let grief linger" should read lets grief linger to agree with the noun bitterness. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Very nice. Very clear. Very deep, like the roots of bitterness. If I may make a suggestion? "let grief linger" should read lets grief linger to agree with the noun bitterness. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you ery much for stopping by to read this tiny poem. Thanks very much for the correction..I have changed it.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"Bitterness,like weeds
grows and let grief linger.
Pull out ruinous roots."
Great entry for this contest. Your words are so true, when we let bitterness grow in our hearts, it can destroy us.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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"Bitterness,like weeds
grows and let grief linger.
Pull out ruinous roots."
Great entry for this contest. Your words are so true, when we let bitterness grow in our hearts, it can destroy us.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much
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You are welcome
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
Wise words well said.
The simile between bitterness and weeds is apt. And I concur, that the best thing to do is "pull out ruinous roots!"
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Hello Mystery Writer!
Wise words well said.
The simile between bitterness and weeds is apt. And I concur, that the best thing to do is "pull out ruinous roots!"
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much.
