The Inn at Blackpool
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Bubbins and the Easter Bunny"These are free-verse poems.
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Comment from bhogg
Well done and very cute. I could actually see this as a children's book with illustrations. Just a thought. My grandkids are too old now, but this is the sort of thing I used to love to read aloud to them.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Well done and very cute. I could actually see this as a children's book with illustrations. Just a thought. My grandkids are too old now, but this is the sort of thing I used to love to read aloud to them.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thanks so very much......I read the same sort of kid verses to the little ones near by.....Godspeed and Happy Easter to you and yours....
Comment from Leann DS
This is an adorable Easter rhyme with a fun story and cute characters. The rhymes are perfect. If I were to modify anything, I would try to make the lines have the same amount of syllables to improve the flow. This would be a sweet little Easter book and I could imagine some really fun art to go along with it. Well done. Happy Easter. Hugs.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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This is an adorable Easter rhyme with a fun story and cute characters. The rhymes are perfect. If I were to modify anything, I would try to make the lines have the same amount of syllables to improve the flow. This would be a sweet little Easter book and I could imagine some really fun art to go along with it. Well done. Happy Easter. Hugs.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much.........you are right......I am sometimes a little sloppy and rushy?...is that a word?......Godspeed and Happy Easter tp you and yours
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Yes, "rushy" is definitely a word because I say it all the time! :-)
Comment from Chris Fruge
This was a great poem. I'm glad to see Bubbins got his Easter gift and enjoyed how his friends rallied to support him. I loved the rhymes, especially Chanticleer with dear. Nice job!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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This was a great poem. I'm glad to see Bubbins got his Easter gift and enjoyed how his friends rallied to support him. I loved the rhymes, especially Chanticleer with dear. Nice job!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thanks so very much.....Happy Easter to you and yours....
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Happy Easter to you and yours as well!
Comment from rindy ryan
Such a cute little story! Very clever! I do think stanza four could be reworked a bit to make it come easier off the tongue. Good job! Happy Easter!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Such a cute little story! Very clever! I do think stanza four could be reworked a bit to make it come easier off the tongue. Good job! Happy Easter!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much....you are right.....my little verses could always use a little polish....Godspeed and Happy Easter..... to you and yours
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I think you have a winner here, your poem is so easy to read and it's quite an easy one for kids to remember. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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I think you have a winner here, your poem is so easy to read and it's quite an easy one for kids to remember. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
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Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thanks so very much and a very Happy Easter to you and yours....
