Comment from RodG

Excellent

This is a delightful Easter poem for children. It is so easy to visualize E bunny as he delivers the eggs. I especially like how he "rung out each ear" after the rain and how he used a mushroom as an umbrella. Rod

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 Comment Written 01-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021

Thank you for this nice review, I really appreciate it. :)

Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

This would be a delightful poem for children. I liked the bunny wringing out his ear. I do question the following line:


until his hearts desire -- this doesn't seem to make grammatical sense, I'd suggest an infinitive verb form to replace "until"

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 Comment Written 01-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021

Thank you for the advice...I changed it for the better. You are awesome! Are you a teacher? You should be. Thanks again.

reply by Susan Newell on 01-Apr-2021

I just took a look. Still not there. I was thinking of "to fill" or "to quell" or something similar. Not a legit teacher, but an uncertified coach to those who want to learn.

reply by the author on 01-Apr-2021

I changed it to...to fill. I like it now. :) I feel like I should pay you or something..you are great.

reply by Susan Newell on 01-Apr-2021

Your appreciation is payment enough.