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Seaworthy Dhow

Petrarchan Sonnet.

24 total reviews 
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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As you said interesting reading, that starts with some intriguing elements introduction the location, nature and means and transportations and then you have the majestic hunt with the people. I really liked these lines - An orange orb we call the sun arose.
The fishing fleet set out against the tide.
Waves swamped their wood decks, abating their glide.
The gale rose fast, the seaman's rides insane- Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
    Iza, I thank you so much!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This Petrarchan Sonnet, Seaworthy Dhow, has the proper formatting and describes the boat and crew with whom success at sea is assured. The rhyme scheme is nonstandard.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
    Thank you!
Comment from Rosalie Lawrence
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I love the smoothness of the sonnet and you have captured it in your dhow and taken it out for a sail. I love the line "Luck comes to the best trained crews it is plain" - although I would add a few more commas throughout, it is plain and I Might have started "The orange orb as opposed to "An orange orb" - the sun being universal. I know sure whether I understand "The seaman's rides insane" line... The seaman rides insane? or the seamen ride insane? I do think, anyone who would go out in one of this must be insane. Quite lovely, on the whole. Keep sailing and write on!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
    Rosalie, thank you for the review and comments.
Comment from royowen
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I see you've written a Petrarchan sonnet, one of the most unconventional styles, a drift away from Shakespearean sonnet, but nonetheless, beautifully written Jim, you've written a very good one here, with such great functional sails, this boat, and a superb job you've done Sir, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 21-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
    Thank you Roy, I would love to take the credit for the addition of the Petrarchan sonnet, but it was the assignment by Jim Bartlett in the sonnet writing class, He is really putting the test on this old "free verser!" LOL
reply by royowen on 21-Jan-2021
    He?s a good teacher Jim. But you?re a good student too. Well done,