Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Walking the Strand"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello JLR!
I enjoyed your Spencerian sonnet. The rhyme scheme is "spot on" as is your meter. Alas! Your "short-lived romance" bombed ... So it goes with life and romance.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Hello JLR!
I enjoyed your Spencerian sonnet. The rhyme scheme is "spot on" as is your meter. Alas! Your "short-lived romance" bombed ... So it goes with life and romance.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Diane, thank you! I appreciate the acknowledgement.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, If this is an example of what you can turn out with a little coaching in your writing class, you are going to turn out to be a premier poet. I loved your last two lines, it was a wonderful way, to start my fanstory day.
( with a giggle and a laugh)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Dear JLR, If this is an example of what you can turn out with a little coaching in your writing class, you are going to turn out to be a premier poet. I loved your last two lines, it was a wonderful way, to start my fanstory day.
( with a giggle and a laugh)
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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My dear friend, I so value your appreciation of the effort. JB certainly has helped.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and well written Spenserian sonnet you have penned with very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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This is a very nice and well written Spenserian sonnet you have penned with very good descriptive words and very nice imagery to go with your words. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Teri, I am honored that you enjoyed this poem😉
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Excellent poem with a rather complicated structure that you masterfully followed. it is an eloquent description of a beautiful new romance that ends up on the rocks before it has gone far. And interesting way to approach a romance.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Excellent poem with a rather complicated structure that you masterfully followed. it is an eloquent description of a beautiful new romance that ends up on the rocks before it has gone far. And interesting way to approach a romance.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Susan, smiling back in appreciation, thank you.
Comment from June Sargent
You know what they say about best laid plans. You can't blame a guy for trying. Tomorrow is another day. The strand is still there with waves rolling back and forth. The ebb and flow of life - and love.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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You know what they say about best laid plans. You can't blame a guy for trying. Tomorrow is another day. The strand is still there with waves rolling back and forth. The ebb and flow of life - and love.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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June, smiling back in appreciation for your words, thank you.
Comment from Harley Dayman Rayne Quinn
It was cute and the love the picture that goes with it.
Sonnets are not my favorable but this one was cool to read.
Very good job on what you wrote from your heart
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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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It was cute and the love the picture that goes with it.
Sonnets are not my favorable but this one was cool to read.
Very good job on what you wrote from your heart
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Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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I am very appreciative of your comments, thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love these lines - Love's thoughts abate the noise as waves roll hard
upon large rocks, capriciousness could sway
flirtations grasp reserved, too fast; safeguard
distinct fond times our swoon constrained, has calmed,
thus this short-lived romance, at last, has bombed - Love thoughts as waves roll what a beautiful metaphor. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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I love these lines - Love's thoughts abate the noise as waves roll hard
upon large rocks, capriciousness could sway
flirtations grasp reserved, too fast; safeguard
distinct fond times our swoon constrained, has calmed,
thus this short-lived romance, at last, has bombed - Love thoughts as waves roll what a beautiful metaphor. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you Iza 🙏
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I am not a poet and hence not competent to comment on the technicalities of the poem. But I find it so well-written and words that flow smoothly. An ideal world inhabited by carefree people would be ideal to live and love. No matter what others think. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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I am not a poet and hence not competent to comment on the technicalities of the poem. But I find it so well-written and words that flow smoothly. An ideal world inhabited by carefree people would be ideal to live and love. No matter what others think. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you Seshardi, be well🙏
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Jim.
-You did a good job
with the sonnet.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
meter, and topic.
-Everything seems to be
going well in this relationship
as the poem opens.
-I like the image "wild bloom bouquet."
-You also give a good hit that
all may not be well as the couple is introduced,
and confirm it with the last line!
-Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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-Nice image, Jim.
-You did a good job
with the sonnet.
-Effective imagery, rhyme,
meter, and topic.
-Everything seems to be
going well in this relationship
as the poem opens.
-I like the image "wild bloom bouquet."
-You also give a good hit that
all may not be well as the couple is introduced,
and confirm it with the last line!
-Well done!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you Pam 🙏
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You are very welcome, Jim. Go to the head of the class:)
Comment from Susan Larson
While I am not familiar enough with the Spencerian sonnet to offer any intelligent comments on the structure, I must say the once more you enticed me with your command of words, especially the way you threw that bomb at the end. ; )
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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While I am not familiar enough with the Spencerian sonnet to offer any intelligent comments on the structure, I must say the once more you enticed me with your command of words, especially the way you threw that bomb at the end. ; )
Comment Written 18-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your review and comments.