Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

JLR,

This is really fun. I like the way you speak so sweetly to your true love and romance her with your words. How could anyone resist? *smile*

Thanks for sharing this unique poetry style!

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Thanks Robyn!

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

Very well done. This loving request would be hard to say 'no' to, With such captivating imagery in a proposal, it is quite attractive and reveals a dedicated heart.

'I will cherish the day we wed
on your heart I will not dare tred.' ... Who could refuse?

Ralf

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Thank you.

Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson

Excellent

I like the photo you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match. you captured my attention from the first line to the last I found your poem to b a sweet love poem with beautiful meaning. thank you for sharing
Cookie

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Cookie thank you.

reply by Miss Cookie Atkinson on 02-Jan-2021

I was m pleasure
Take care
Cookie

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

A beautifully written romance poem. Nice flow and rhyme scheme. Come live with me and be my love. My wife you'd be come now my dove. Beautiful photo to go with your words as well. Nicely done.

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Joanne thank you.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image, Jim.
-A well written poem with
a good topic, imagery, and rhyme.
-I like the line about the waves
rolling in and out.
-A nice concluding verse, too.
-Well done.

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Thanks Pam

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Jan-2021

You are welcome, Jim.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hello JLR, a well met challenge. A lovely love story full of promises. Quite an inviting poem that SHE will not be able to resist I would think. 'to fit you like a hand to glove' good use of metaphor and an all round lovely poem.
Come live with me (did that include marriage LOL?) Happy New Year to you and yours - regards Dorothy x

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Thank you!

Comment from Nowae20

Exceptional

"That 'tis your sweet ripe lips I see
so make me glad, my plea to thee!" I'm falling in love. This poem is so sweet, I love it. The way it flows so naturally, to how lovely the words are. It makes you feel like it's written to you.

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Smiling back! Thank you for this six-star validation!

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written poem for the potlatch challenge. I like the flow and the format, May you have a blessed new year.
Patricia

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Patricia, thank you

Comment from dragonpoet

Good

This man is really setting out their married life in this poetic wedding proposal. I hoped they talked about having chilidren before he brought them up.
You forgot the couplet at the end of the poem as stated in the form definition.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy New Year
Joan

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 Comment Written 02-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021

Joan, thanks I did miss the paste in the last couplet and it is corrected.

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reply by dragonpoet on 02-Jan-2021

I am glad I could help. The couplet adds to the feeling fo the poem. Again, good luck
Joan