My Life with You
In Your name28 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
God has kept you here on earth to continue on in life to share with others how wonderful God really is protecting them and giving them forgiveness never asking for anything in return.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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God has kept you here on earth to continue on in life to share with others how wonderful God really is protecting them and giving them forgiveness never asking for anything in return.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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You are so right my friend:)
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Comment from Aiona
This is a lovely letter. I saw a few typos:
1. "Dora the explorer"
"Explorer" should be capitalized as it's a trademarked proper noun.
2. There are a few places where you accidentally tense-hopped.
"why you choose me for this big Adventure called Life."
I think you meant past-tense "chose" since most of that section is written in past tense.
3. Another tense-hop:
"But you send me back, my trial was not done!"
I think you meant past-tense "sent."
4. "the mountain started to crush under me."
I wonder if maybe you meant to use the verb "crash"?
5. "He love you and prays to you."
I think you meant "loves" which is the singular third person conjugation of "to love."
6. "He love you and prays to you."
There are a number of sentences where references to God as "you" are not capitalized. I don't know if you consciously left off the capitalization as a style choice, but I believe that the traditional way of addressing God is with capitalized pronouns. (Ex. "He" instead of "he," "You" instead of "you.")
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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This is a lovely letter. I saw a few typos:
1. "Dora the explorer"
"Explorer" should be capitalized as it's a trademarked proper noun.
2. There are a few places where you accidentally tense-hopped.
"why you choose me for this big Adventure called Life."
I think you meant past-tense "chose" since most of that section is written in past tense.
3. Another tense-hop:
"But you send me back, my trial was not done!"
I think you meant past-tense "sent."
4. "the mountain started to crush under me."
I wonder if maybe you meant to use the verb "crash"?
5. "He love you and prays to you."
I think you meant "loves" which is the singular third person conjugation of "to love."
6. "He love you and prays to you."
There are a number of sentences where references to God as "you" are not capitalized. I don't know if you consciously left off the capitalization as a style choice, but I believe that the traditional way of addressing God is with capitalized pronouns. (Ex. "He" instead of "he," "You" instead of "you.")
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Hi Aiona, thank you so much for your wonderful review and the grammar correctios.
Comment from JRaeVaughn
For believers there is no question that god has a plan. We ponder that plan throughout personal struggle, life threatening moments and all the trials and tribulation that life has to offer while examining the rationale, only to be revealed in the great beyond.
I very much enjoyed the read, particularly "I am your faithful fish in this exciting realm."
Thanks for sharing, JR
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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For believers there is no question that god has a plan. We ponder that plan throughout personal struggle, life threatening moments and all the trials and tribulation that life has to offer while examining the rationale, only to be revealed in the great beyond.
I very much enjoyed the read, particularly "I am your faithful fish in this exciting realm."
Thanks for sharing, JR
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you so Much JR:) I wish you a blessed day:)
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It was a pleasure.
Comment from RetroStarfish
What a lovely and moving letter to God. I enjoyed reading it, and especially the quirky, let beautiful turns of phrase, such as this one:
"I am your faithful fish in this exciting realm."
There is a small typo in the fourth paragraph: "He love you and prays..."
I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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What a lovely and moving letter to God. I enjoyed reading it, and especially the quirky, let beautiful turns of phrase, such as this one:
"I am your faithful fish in this exciting realm."
There is a small typo in the fourth paragraph: "He love you and prays..."
I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Wendy G
I like this heart-felt writing expressing your innermost yearnings before God with complete honesty. Your testimony to His protection is amazing. Good wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I like this heart-felt writing expressing your innermost yearnings before God with complete honesty. Your testimony to His protection is amazing. Good wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the good wishes
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this story of having faith in God and take a positive approach to deal with disasters.
Life has ups and downs. People who are positive and would not give up will win in the end.
Very good story.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I like this story of having faith in God and take a positive approach to deal with disasters.
Life has ups and downs. People who are positive and would not give up will win in the end.
Very good story.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this story of having faith in God and take a positive approach to deal with disasters.
Life has ups and downs. People who are positive and would not give up will win in the end.
Very good story.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I like this story of having faith in God and take a positive approach to deal with disasters.
Life has ups and downs. People who are positive and would not give up will win in the end.
Very good story.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Anissha Blackwell1
"My Life With You" is a great read the adventure and intrigue of the next thrill or life saving venture had me on edge. Each near death moment seemed to give you strength and faith after each challenge. As a Christian whether in life or death being a believer in Christ Jesus saving grace by faith gives peace.
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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"My Life With You" is a great read the adventure and intrigue of the next thrill or life saving venture had me on edge. Each near death moment seemed to give you strength and faith after each challenge. As a Christian whether in life or death being a believer in Christ Jesus saving grace by faith gives peace.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much