Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Bill,

Of course! Don't you hate those moments? I mean, sure, you wanna kill yourself -- but you hadn't really planned to leave the whole family homeless or out in the cold. I mean, you're already leaving them without life insurance, you bum.

Thanks!

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020

Herb worried about that too.

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Alright, Bill. Good job on this double flash job. It is well written and humorous at the same time it strikes a sad chord somehow. I wish you good luck, but mark my words, you have the winner here, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020

Thank you, Bob

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I got a good laugh out of this one. I wouldn't be surprised if some people wouldn't think like that. No wonder the poor guy wanted to end it all. It is apparent the he worries about everything. LOL

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020

Thanks, Beth

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

I think that was the least of his problems, but one thinks about strange on the way to their demise. What a wonderfully written little story.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

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 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020

Thanks, Mike, for giving this a look.

Comment from John Carey

Excellent

Really like the abstract art that you have matched with your writing. So glad this is fiction, because I couldnt help but laugh at the last line! Good character and scene development for so few words. Thanks for the read.

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 Comment Written 27-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020

Thanks, John