The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I love all the magical action in your story! It's very captivating and entertaining, and I'm sure it will be very delightful to a young audience, as well. You have such a great imagination and I appreciate the way you've given it free reign in here, with these wonderful characters. The waving tendrils are a lovely touch!
And I must also say that as much as I enjoy helping to proofread stories from some of our friends, that sometimes it's also a pleasure to read a clean copy, straight through.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I love all the magical action in your story! It's very captivating and entertaining, and I'm sure it will be very delightful to a young audience, as well. You have such a great imagination and I appreciate the way you've given it free reign in here, with these wonderful characters. The waving tendrils are a lovely touch!
And I must also say that as much as I enjoy helping to proofread stories from some of our friends, that sometimes it's also a pleasure to read a clean copy, straight through.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Hooray!! A fan of the crazy blonde's imagination - LOL!! ;) Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed, Mary Kay, and am looking forward to having you on-board, my lady!! ;) Yvette
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You're very welcome, my "crazy blonde" lady! Not crazy at all, just oodles of fun, and if you publish, it will be a real treat for some youngsters. I know that the kid in me really loves it -- she's not hard to find ;-) Love and blessings, Mary Kay
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I love the luminescence vine whose tendrils can wave. It is like "Alice in Wonderland". I wrote about something like this in my "A Surrealistic Writing Class", too. The armadillo and the gnome are fun, too.
I want to read more now.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I love the luminescence vine whose tendrils can wave. It is like "Alice in Wonderland". I wrote about something like this in my "A Surrealistic Writing Class", too. The armadillo and the gnome are fun, too.
I want to read more now.
Well done.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thanx for checking in on Nicholas and his crew, Lisa -- I do so appreciate you! ;) Be sure to have a great day over there! :) Yvette
Comment from RShipp
'...iridescent ripple that ran from their point of contact along all the arms and shoots of the vine that covered the wall...' (What a great way to 'turn-on-the-overhead-lamp'.)
Another plant 'DeVine' character for the story. Fun.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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'...iridescent ripple that ran from their point of contact along all the arms and shoots of the vine that covered the wall...' (What a great way to 'turn-on-the-overhead-lamp'.)
Another plant 'DeVine' character for the story. Fun.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for the catch up and hopping on board, R -- look forward to more toward the middle/end of next week! ;) Yvette
Comment from juliaSjames
Yvette, reading this is good for the soul and I can't begin to imagine what pleasure you got from penning the latest chapter in this delightful saga.
Even the title made me chuckle.
Now my dear friend I have a favour to ask. Our garden is a hot mess, badly in need of landscaping. Can you please send Nicholas and the crew over ASAP? I'm already visualizing that luminous vine on the garden wall. :+))
Stay safe and creative
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Yvette, reading this is good for the soul and I can't begin to imagine what pleasure you got from penning the latest chapter in this delightful saga.
Even the title made me chuckle.
Now my dear friend I have a favour to ask. Our garden is a hot mess, badly in need of landscaping. Can you please send Nicholas and the crew over ASAP? I'm already visualizing that luminous vine on the garden wall. :+))
Stay safe and creative
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you think Nick and his crew could help out... I guess the first question would be: do you have a map of your gardens for Valentin to De-vine? ;) ;) ;) Thanx for keeping up with Nicholas and his crew, my lady -- I do so appreciate you! ;) Be sure to have a great day over there! :) Yvette
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
C10-An Enlightening Introduction
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
Wonderful chapter....very descriptive. I like Valantin introduction to Nicholas. The story is engaging throughout and especially the end makes one want more about the Devining. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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C10-An Enlightening Introduction
by Y. M. Roger
Hello, Yvette,
Wonderful chapter....very descriptive. I like Valantin introduction to Nicholas. The story is engaging throughout and especially the end makes one want more about the Devining. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thanx for keeping up with Nicholas and his crew, Gypsy -- I do so appreciate you! ;) Be sure to have a great day over there! :) Yvette
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
Nice work! I thought we had already met a lot of the gang, but you keep adding wonderfully fascinating characters.
Notes:
1.) Archie clambered up (o)nto the rickety desk chair
2.) Archie clambered up into the rickety desk chair that made some very uneasy creaks and groans as he did so.
--> the 'as he did so' seems superfluous = edit?
3.) It increased with its clasping motions that were exaggerated
--> delete 'with'?
Great writing, as always~ Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Yvette,
Nice work! I thought we had already met a lot of the gang, but you keep adding wonderfully fascinating characters.
Notes:
1.) Archie clambered up (o)nto the rickety desk chair
2.) Archie clambered up into the rickety desk chair that made some very uneasy creaks and groans as he did so.
--> the 'as he did so' seems superfluous = edit?
3.) It increased with its clasping motions that were exaggerated
--> delete 'with'?
Great writing, as always~ Thanks so much!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much, Robyn, for those catches... always so appreciative of a second set of eyes! ;) Being the nut that I am, I think I just might be enjoying writing this one as much as I?m hoping young minds will enjoy reading it ? LOL!! ;) As always, thanx for keeping up with Nicholas & crew... :) You be sure to take care over there and stay dry today! ;) Yvette
P.S. Soooo.... you're looking for a single piece (like Lee's -- that's for example 'like' not written 'like') about dialogue... is that right?
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No, I have no ideas in mind - just an instructional
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yevette.
There seems to be a lot of stuff going on inside in this chapter. The most unusual thing to me was the vine waved to Nicholas.
I have to say, if a vine waves to me, I'm leaving. Maintaining my sanity is hard enough these days without foliage waving to me.
As Nicholas is introduced to all of the other "characters" in the garden I'm guessing we will see much more interaction.
Z :-)))
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hello Yevette.
There seems to be a lot of stuff going on inside in this chapter. The most unusual thing to me was the vine waved to Nicholas.
I have to say, if a vine waves to me, I'm leaving. Maintaining my sanity is hard enough these days without foliage waving to me.
As Nicholas is introduced to all of the other "characters" in the garden I'm guessing we will see much more interaction.
Z :-)))
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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LOL! Gotta agree with you on the vine sentiment there, Z. ;) ;)Thanx for keeping up with Nicholas and Crew - much appreciated, sir!! ;) Take care and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
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Hey Yvette.
You're welcome. I hope you escape the latest hurricane with no issues.
Z 😁
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was a very nice, descriptive piece. The imagery that you describe throughout makes it very easy for one to feel as though they are there with the characters. I especially liked it in the first paragraph when the flight trail of the imps was described.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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This was a very nice, descriptive piece. The imagery that you describe throughout makes it very easy for one to feel as though they are there with the characters. I especially liked it in the first paragraph when the flight trail of the imps was described.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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So glad to have you on-board, Monica -- this is a fun easy-to-follow story that provides a complete 'escape-from-reality' for the reader (notice it's written for the pre-teen age group)... but PLEASE just drift on back a few chapters and catch up cuz we're loaded with fun here with Nicholas and his crew (and perhaps you may enjoy the distraction...? wink, wink)!! ;) You be sure to take care out there in your hotel corner of the universe and be careful of this latest mess headed y'all's way! ;) Yvette
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this. Waving vine leaves and all the others in attendance with Constantine leading the way, it sounds like Nicholas is now officially the new Groundskeeper. I think younger readers will have to look up "iteration."
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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I liked reading this. Waving vine leaves and all the others in attendance with Constantine leading the way, it sounds like Nicholas is now officially the new Groundskeeper. I think younger readers will have to look up "iteration."
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Think it's best that they have to look up a word or two her and there, don't you? :) ;) I'm guessing that's the teacher (and mom!) in me - lol! ;) :) As always, thanx for keeping up with Nicholas & crew... :) You be sure to take care out there in your corner of the universe and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from aryr
An absolutely great continuation chapter Yvette. You described the introduction of Valantin to Nicholas very well. You provided anticipation and eagerness throughout and especially the last paragraph making one want more information about the Devining. Very well done and very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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An absolutely great continuation chapter Yvette. You described the introduction of Valantin to Nicholas very well. You provided anticipation and eagerness throughout and especially the last paragraph making one want more information about the Devining. Very well done and very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much, Alie ? glad Valentin caught your attention!! ;) I think I just might be enjoying writing this one as much as I?m hoping young minds will enjoy reading it ? LOL!! ;) As always, thanx for keeping up with Nicholas & crew... :) You be sure to take care out there in your corner of the universe, my lady, and enjoy the weekend! ;) Yvette
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You did a wonderful job Yvette and you are most welcome.
