Football - A Novel
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Comment from rama devi
Curious about those mysteries! Sounds interesting, potentially!
As this is an overview, I'm unsure if you want 'corrections' on spag, but I did notice a few. Let me know if you want to bother with them (minor stuff) and I'll return to edit it.
Looking forward to reading soon!
Glad you had something worthwhile to occupy yourself during lock down!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Curious about those mysteries! Sounds interesting, potentially!
As this is an overview, I'm unsure if you want 'corrections' on spag, but I did notice a few. Let me know if you want to bother with them (minor stuff) and I'll return to edit it.
Looking forward to reading soon!
Glad you had something worthwhile to occupy yourself during lock down!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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This isn't worthy of edits. Just the novel, I will start the first partial chapter next week. Please edit it heavily. LOL Thank you.
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Comment from equestrik
This certainly sounds like a good premise for a romance book. I like that you give this introduction and a revealing of your characters and a bit of what they may be up to.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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This certainly sounds like a good premise for a romance book. I like that you give this introduction and a revealing of your characters and a bit of what they may be up to.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dena Brenner
I think you have a solid outline here and Katherine presents as a sympathetic and believable heroine. With that, I think the novel could be relatable for a lot of women. Very interesting that there is no indication about how football plays into this, but I know in small Texas towns, football is king!
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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I think you have a solid outline here and Katherine presents as a sympathetic and believable heroine. With that, I think the novel could be relatable for a lot of women. Very interesting that there is no indication about how football plays into this, but I know in small Texas towns, football is king!
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Justin Chopin
The story sounds very compelling Barbara. I was thinking that you call the novel " A Widow's Worries" since your main protagonist Katherine is having to cope with life as a widow. I'd be very interested to read this. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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The story sounds very compelling Barbara. I was thinking that you call the novel " A Widow's Worries" since your main protagonist Katherine is having to cope with life as a widow. I'd be very interested to read this. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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It's a very good title. I will keep it in mind as I wonder through the novel. I also like th aliteration.
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You're welcome.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Well, if you wanted to intrigue your readers and get them ready to start a new novel immediately, you've done that. *smile*
So many things beg to be revealed! hahaha I'm ready!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Barbara,
Well, if you wanted to intrigue your readers and get them ready to start a new novel immediately, you've done that. *smile*
So many things beg to be revealed! hahaha I'm ready!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Well, I guess we will see. I suppose after so many novels within the romance field you have a pretty good formula to follow, and your others were good, so trust yourself. And you're right, characters often tell the author where the story will go.
Take us to Texas.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Well, I guess we will see. I suppose after so many novels within the romance field you have a pretty good formula to follow, and your others were good, so trust yourself. And you're right, characters often tell the author where the story will go.
Take us to Texas.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. You know High School footbal in king in Texas.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yeah, looks like I might get to join this story from the beginning, rather than jumping in to catch a few chapters at the end. I'm excite, ready for some popcorn and the entertainment.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Yeah, looks like I might get to join this story from the beginning, rather than jumping in to catch a few chapters at the end. I'm excite, ready for some popcorn and the entertainment.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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I hope I don't disappoint.
Comment from eliz100
This is a great introduction. It does make mw want to read the story. It is always nice to start at the beginning. I do not see any errors. I look forward to what follows.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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This is a great introduction. It does make mw want to read the story. It is always nice to start at the beginning. I do not see any errors. I look forward to what follows.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm so glad you have a new novel for us. This one sound very interesting and I doubt if you have anything to worry about. I found the back story very interesting and I'm looking forward to reading more. I can imagine why it is about football unless she starts dating a coach but I can't wait to find out.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I'm so glad you have a new novel for us. This one sound very interesting and I doubt if you have anything to worry about. I found the back story very interesting and I'm looking forward to reading more. I can imagine why it is about football unless she starts dating a coach but I can't wait to find out.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Thank you for the great preview of your novel. It certainly explains a lot about the characters and players and gets the reader familiar.
Katherine sounds like a wonderful woman with a strong character. We certainly want to get to know better.
The only thing I disagree with is the title. "Football - a Novel" won't rise a reader's interest. Many people including myself, don't even like football, and the title will be turn-off. You have to think of the novel as a while and pick a title which would kind of describe the book in a nutshell. I am sure, you will come up with something that will intrigue the reader and make them want to read your book.
Thank you so much for sharing this.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the great preview of your novel. It certainly explains a lot about the characters and players and gets the reader familiar.
Katherine sounds like a wonderful woman with a strong character. We certainly want to get to know better.
The only thing I disagree with is the title. "Football - a Novel" won't rise a reader's interest. Many people including myself, don't even like football, and the title will be turn-off. You have to think of the novel as a while and pick a title which would kind of describe the book in a nutshell. I am sure, you will come up with something that will intrigue the reader and make them want to read your book.
Thank you so much for sharing this.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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It's not the title. I'm still working on that. I just needed something to call it. LOL
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Oh, I see. I was surprised to see "Football - a Novel" for a name (lol)