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Comment from judiverse
Excellent description of the feelings Mac and Logan are sharing. She often and it seems intentionally misinterprets Logan's actions. It's as if she doesn't expect to be happy. As the case wraps up, I must say I was a bit disappointed. Sidney Parks has been pointed to as the guy behind the criminal activities for quite some time, and now he's fingered as the main guy. I hope we're in for another surprise before it's over. He still hasn't been nailed for Megan's murder. judi
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Excellent description of the feelings Mac and Logan are sharing. She often and it seems intentionally misinterprets Logan's actions. It's as if she doesn't expect to be happy. As the case wraps up, I must say I was a bit disappointed. Sidney Parks has been pointed to as the guy behind the criminal activities for quite some time, and now he's fingered as the main guy. I hope we're in for another surprise before it's over. He still hasn't been nailed for Megan's murder. judi
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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True! Thank you for the kind review. Mac's past makes her feel unworthy.
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You're very welcome. Congratulations on reaching the finish line. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, so finally Logan has come out how he feels about Mac. But he still hasn't said the 'love' word. It will happen, I'm sure. I so like this story. Now we'll see how it goes. Ulla:)))
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Hi Barbara, so finally Logan has come out how he feels about Mac. But he still hasn't said the 'love' word. It will happen, I'm sure. I so like this story. Now we'll see how it goes. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
So, she loves him, too. Mac can't deny it anymore, no one cries like that just because of a miss interpretation of what Logan meant. Aww, I can hear those wedding bells already! Well Barbara, it looks like we'll be seeing the end of this story soon, and I will miss it. I enjoy your books because I can easily get to love your characters. Well done on this one, the ends were nicely tied up, just a couple more and that will be that. Excellent chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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So, she loves him, too. Mac can't deny it anymore, no one cries like that just because of a miss interpretation of what Logan meant. Aww, I can hear those wedding bells already! Well Barbara, it looks like we'll be seeing the end of this story soon, and I will miss it. I enjoy your books because I can easily get to love your characters. Well done on this one, the ends were nicely tied up, just a couple more and that will be that. Excellent chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Very nice. This has has all the natural signs of wrapping up loose ends as an adventure/ crime thriller comes to an end. The bad guys are arrested. hugs and tears all around and relationship questions resolved. Only a few posts left. Great job.
notes:
"You can leave now. You've passed me off to [you] friend."
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Very nice. This has has all the natural signs of wrapping up loose ends as an adventure/ crime thriller comes to an end. The bad guys are arrested. hugs and tears all around and relationship questions resolved. Only a few posts left. Great job.
notes:
"You can leave now. You've passed me off to [you] friend."
- should be: your
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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I made the correction. Thank you for the catch and the review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Oh, my. What a crazy way to start school. I know you are losing your mind. This was not how you imagined teaching kids, I suppose. Crazy, crazy. BUT -- this chapter continues the story well. I can tell you are wrapping things up.
I do have a few comments to make - the first of which is that this chapter seemed to transition a lot from the showing you've been doing a lot of to a great deal of TELLING. It really almost seemed like you were in a hurry to just get it done, maybe. It seemed - in reading - like it was a hurry-up chapter. Getting it down was the goal, more than getting the true flavor of the moment. Make sense?
Other notes:
1.) The way, you picked at your lunch didn't go unnoticed.
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2.) "We discover(ed) he has a secret apartment downtown.
That's it. Still worth a five. And you are welcome to ignore everything I say, of course. Hugs--
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Barb,
Oh, my. What a crazy way to start school. I know you are losing your mind. This was not how you imagined teaching kids, I suppose. Crazy, crazy. BUT -- this chapter continues the story well. I can tell you are wrapping things up.
I do have a few comments to make - the first of which is that this chapter seemed to transition a lot from the showing you've been doing a lot of to a great deal of TELLING. It really almost seemed like you were in a hurry to just get it done, maybe. It seemed - in reading - like it was a hurry-up chapter. Getting it down was the goal, more than getting the true flavor of the moment. Make sense?
Other notes:
1.) The way, you picked at your lunch didn't go unnoticed.
--> no comma
2.) "We discover(ed) he has a secret apartment downtown.
That's it. Still worth a five. And you are welcome to ignore everything I say, of course. Hugs--
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches. I will reread. I didn't notice the hurry up, but I will read with that in mind. Thank you.
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I know sometimes, when I'm getting to the end of a story, I will subconsciously start to hurry things through. I want to get it done. But that may be just me and my reading today, Barb - something to look at, but if you don't agree - just chuck it. No worries.
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I will look at it. If I don't change anything, I have two editors once I'm done posting and will bring that concern to their attention.
Comment from elchupakabra
This chapter is well done, the one thing that I enjoy is the way you include the little prologue from the previous chapter to remind me where I left off, no real notes as far as corrections/edits. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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This chapter is well done, the one thing that I enjoy is the way you include the little prologue from the previous chapter to remind me where I left off, no real notes as far as corrections/edits. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.