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Comment from Ric Myworld
Heavy duty. Dark background for Mckenzie and her mother, and kidnappers from a gang and maybe even someone on the police force. As in your previous stories I've read, you are still slinging the mud to hit just about everywhere. LOL. Great chapter, and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Heavy duty. Dark background for Mckenzie and her mother, and kidnappers from a gang and maybe even someone on the police force. As in your previous stories I've read, you are still slinging the mud to hit just about everywhere. LOL. Great chapter, and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ben Colder
Well you sure have spun this thing into several avenues but I am deafened by wedding bells. What a story. You and Sally Law have the floor with mysteries. Good one Barb. Always a pleasure reading your work.
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Well you sure have spun this thing into several avenues but I am deafened by wedding bells. What a story. You and Sally Law have the floor with mysteries. Good one Barb. Always a pleasure reading your work.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now we know why Mac has been upset about drinking. I'm wondering if the person who had whisky poured down her throat knew it, too. I'm glad it's all out, she will be able to move on now. Good for her mother, too!! I'd have killed the blighter a lot more painfully than that!
Now to get some proof about this policeman that's involved. I'm hoping it's not Samuel Conley. Well done, an excellent chapter. I like that name, too! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Now we know why Mac has been upset about drinking. I'm wondering if the person who had whisky poured down her throat knew it, too. I'm glad it's all out, she will be able to move on now. Good for her mother, too!! I'd have killed the blighter a lot more painfully than that!
Now to get some proof about this policeman that's involved. I'm hoping it's not Samuel Conley. Well done, an excellent chapter. I like that name, too! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I hope not too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
It's good continuation. This is a another good chapter with Mac waking up. I'm not sure about missing pieces. Perhaps, that reader was worried about hings slowing down.
notes:
A Sidney's name has come up but there's [no] proof they're the same person.
- i think a missing word here.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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It's good continuation. This is a another good chapter with Mac waking up. I'm not sure about missing pieces. Perhaps, that reader was worried about hings slowing down.
notes:
A Sidney's name has come up but there's [no] proof they're the same person.
- i think a missing word here.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I have added the word. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from judiverse
I like the title "missing pieces." That's something they could work with for a book cover. This is bringing things to a conclusion very nicely. I had suspected something like that in Mac's background. There must have been a coverup, understandably, of what her mother did. The abuse has been something she can't let go of. Now if they can get the goods on Parks, if he's the ringleader. Now I'm beginning to think he's not the one after all. the tattoo Mac remembers should be of help. Logan's team did a great job of rescuing Mac and the other women. Excellent dialogue.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I like the title "missing pieces." That's something they could work with for a book cover. This is bringing things to a conclusion very nicely. I had suspected something like that in Mac's background. There must have been a coverup, understandably, of what her mother did. The abuse has been something she can't let go of. Now if they can get the goods on Parks, if he's the ringleader. Now I'm beginning to think he's not the one after all. the tattoo Mac remembers should be of help. Logan's team did a great job of rescuing Mac and the other women. Excellent dialogue.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome. You're doing a great job of keeping the suspense going. You chose a great time for your reveal about grandfather. judi
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup, I like the idea of the chapter's name because it looks exactly like a puzzle that she tries to put it back together. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Yup, I like the idea of the chapter's name because it looks exactly like a puzzle that she tries to put it back together. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the title support and the kind review.
Comment from Sally Law
Best chapter ever. Sad, deep, and suspenseful. This really painted a good picture of Mackenzie and all she has been through. What a sweetheart. Logan, too. I hope they form a tight case against this guy. It sounds like it's a human trafficking ring they got going here. Superb. Sending you my best day as always,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Best chapter ever. Sad, deep, and suspenseful. This really painted a good picture of Mackenzie and all she has been through. What a sweetheart. Logan, too. I hope they form a tight case against this guy. It sounds like it's a human trafficking ring they got going here. Superb. Sending you my best day as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Always....:))
Comment from AJ McCall
I love this. especially how the characters interact with each other. Mac and Logan are so cute together. This could definitely be a TV show one day. A title suggestion... The Maze of Puzzles (maybe)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I love this. especially how the characters interact with each other. Mac and Logan are so cute together. This could definitely be a TV show one day. A title suggestion... The Maze of Puzzles (maybe)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I like the twist on the title. It sums up the book a little better. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a very exciting story to read, and I look forward to more chapters. McKenzie is a tough character and really knows her mind. Logan is a good match for her.
Typos:
A Sidney's name has come up but there's (no) proof they're the same person.
He used this (his) thumb to dry a tear. "It's okay. Nobody expected you to."
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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This is a very exciting story to read, and I look forward to more chapters. McKenzie is a tough character and really knows her mind. Logan is a good match for her.
Typos:
A Sidney's name has come up but there's (no) proof they're the same person.
He used this (his) thumb to dry a tear. "It's okay. Nobody expected you to."
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful catches. I appreciate the help. I've made the changes.
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Great! Glad to help.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a very captivating story that held our attention throughout, our eyes and brains were eagerly pursuing every line. We were so disappointed to get to the end. We can't wait for the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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This is a very captivating story that held our attention throughout, our eyes and brains were eagerly pursuing every line. We were so disappointed to get to the end. We can't wait for the next chapter.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
