Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Elaine Chiodi
A very powerful poem that hits on many areas of contention in our country now. Which side of the line one stands depends so much on what comes from inside oneself, not just on facts taught in schools. History is shaded by the group you, your family, your community grew up in. It takes a brave heart to open up this box and see what's real... ...ec
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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A very powerful poem that hits on many areas of contention in our country now. Which side of the line one stands depends so much on what comes from inside oneself, not just on facts taught in schools. History is shaded by the group you, your family, your community grew up in. It takes a brave heart to open up this box and see what's real... ...ec
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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EC,Right you are, thank you for this wonderful six-star review. I am grateful.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a brilliant 20 line poem with its strong message and presentation. The world is in chaos and it's all deliberately controlled by darkness, including greedy and power hungry mentalities. Goodness, however, is going will be having the last say. Meanwhile, innocent people are terrorized, and the youth of nations are being brainwashed. It is so sad.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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This is a brilliant 20 line poem with its strong message and presentation. The world is in chaos and it's all deliberately controlled by darkness, including greedy and power hungry mentalities. Goodness, however, is going will be having the last say. Meanwhile, innocent people are terrorized, and the youth of nations are being brainwashed. It is so sad.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Spangle, I am right there with tight emotions....how come we do not have leaders who seem to give a darn! Ugh....
Comment from DeboraDyess
This is a beautiful cry for tolerance of a different kind, isn't it.
I am all for protests - -wholeheartedly behind our right to express our dissatisfaction with the status quo. But to rewrite history ... what are they thinking? Do they realize that if they set this precident, their offspring's offspring may decide to delete THEM? I want equal equality -- no 'blacks only' days on university campuses, no whites only days, either. No blacks only writing contests, no whites only, either.
When did 'equal' return to 'separate but equal'? What a step backwards we are fixing to take. It saddens me.
Ranting over. Great poem!
Good luck in the contest. :)
Deb
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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This is a beautiful cry for tolerance of a different kind, isn't it.
I am all for protests - -wholeheartedly behind our right to express our dissatisfaction with the status quo. But to rewrite history ... what are they thinking? Do they realize that if they set this precident, their offspring's offspring may decide to delete THEM? I want equal equality -- no 'blacks only' days on university campuses, no whites only days, either. No blacks only writing contests, no whites only, either.
When did 'equal' return to 'separate but equal'? What a step backwards we are fixing to take. It saddens me.
Ranting over. Great poem!
Good luck in the contest. :)
Deb
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Debora, yes as atennager fo the 60's I too am all for peaceful protests. But when protests turn anything but peaceful and lawlessness is the main goal with these splinter groups they are not doing social justice and social reform any good,
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 20 Line poem you have penned for the contest. I like the way you have broken down the lines in syllable count. Very good descriptive and very true words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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This is a very well written 20 Line poem you have penned for the contest. I like the way you have broken down the lines in syllable count. Very good descriptive and very true words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Teri thank you!
Comment from karenina
Your count above is 1, 2, 3, 5, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
My point being you skipped the four word line and gave us two five word lines instead. Easily corrected by changing "It is time to write" to "It's time to write."
I checked the count twice but even I can't be sure I got it all right! (I do enjoy counting word or syllable poems myself!)
As for your theme... This is a difficult time for America. COVID-19, political divide, racial tension... We've been here before. I have faith we'll emerge stronger than ever.
Nice job! Passionate patriot!--Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Your count above is 1, 2, 3, 5, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.
My point being you skipped the four word line and gave us two five word lines instead. Easily corrected by changing "It is time to write" to "It's time to write."
I checked the count twice but even I can't be sure I got it all right! (I do enjoy counting word or syllable poems myself!)
As for your theme... This is a difficult time for America. COVID-19, political divide, racial tension... We've been here before. I have faith we'll emerge stronger than ever.
Nice job! Passionate patriot!--Karenina
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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karenian, very good catch! thanks for the kind comments
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If I had a penny for every Etheree I've written with a line count off I'd be the owner of this site! (smile)---Karenina
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smiling back!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem carries an important message for all. The lines read well with great detail. I like the way you formatted this message. The image is a perfect accompaniment. I like the way this draws to a close, too. It is important for all Americans to realize and support the fact that we cannot allow our flag and country to be stomped on by those that don't know her history and/or don't care. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Your poem carries an important message for all. The lines read well with great detail. I like the way you formatted this message. The image is a perfect accompaniment. I like the way this draws to a close, too. It is important for all Americans to realize and support the fact that we cannot allow our flag and country to be stomped on by those that don't know her history and/or don't care. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Jan, thank you
Comment from royowen
All country's glory days are assured of one day failing Jim, if the dream of the people fails, you know why, I'm a non-nationalist, because with faith in my country will one day, because they have people living in them, nationalism has caused all wars. One person blamed religion, but that doesn't hold water, God tore down the iron curtain, they are no less nationalistic than America, I'm British born, but they are not as great anymore either, but nationalistic, but I still love my country, and would defend her shores, I'd rather be patriotic to a land that cannot fail. Sorry, but it's the truth. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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All country's glory days are assured of one day failing Jim, if the dream of the people fails, you know why, I'm a non-nationalist, because with faith in my country will one day, because they have people living in them, nationalism has caused all wars. One person blamed religion, but that doesn't hold water, God tore down the iron curtain, they are no less nationalistic than America, I'm British born, but they are not as great anymore either, but nationalistic, but I still love my country, and would defend her shores, I'd rather be patriotic to a land that cannot fail. Sorry, but it's the truth. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Roy, I my good Aussie friend, I served in the military for GOD, Country and Flag, I would do it again because America still is, although tainted, one nation under God. Not fifty fiefdoms,not white America or Black America just America, we are seeing Marxist tyranny run amok right now, I believe it will be stopped.
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?We fight not against flesh and blood, but against principalities and powers, against the the rulers of the darkness of this age, against the spiritual hosts of wickedness in high places. Ephesians 6.? You need to hold to scripture not worldly wisdom, or pride. Bless you Roy
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Well written. Good luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Well written. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Raul thank you.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Earl Corp
I don't imagine this poem would be popular with a lot of people because it seems you're against tearing down statues and defunding the police. But you're absolutely correct, freedom ain't free and it doesn't come cheap. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I don't imagine this poem would be popular with a lot of people because it seems you're against tearing down statues and defunding the police. But you're absolutely correct, freedom ain't free and it doesn't come cheap. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Earl, thank very much, my rant is about the lack of "voices heard" from leaders of all colors and all backgrounds, not standing up to Marxist people who hate America represents with all of our shortcomings, the USA still beats living under a different flag.
Comment from Mastery
Very power packed writing here my friend. Once again you touch a nerve that should be within us all.
These words cover things best:
"Burn it Down, we say."
"We know you are
angry, so are
we! America"
Bless you patriot. : ) Bob
Stand!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Very power packed writing here my friend. Once again you touch a nerve that should be within us all.
These words cover things best:
"Burn it Down, we say."
"We know you are
angry, so are
we! America"
Bless you patriot. : ) Bob
Stand!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Bob, my friend, I am sick and tired of being sick and tired....my rant is about the lack of "voices heard" from leaders of all colors and all backgrounds, not standing up to Marxist people who hate America represents with all of our shortcomings, the USA still beats living under a different flag.
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Amen Amen! :)
Amen! amen! my friend. : ) Bob
