An Angel in the Meadow
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Comment from Ulla
Hi there, this was a great chapter and a lot was happening. Some had a good outcome and some did not. And then as usual you left us with a tremendous cliff hanger. All the best. Ulla:)))
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Hi there, this was a great chapter and a lot was happening. Some had a good outcome and some did not. And then as usual you left us with a tremendous cliff hanger. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This was funny and well done. I personally liked the dialect. You handled that well also, and that's not always easy to do. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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This was funny and well done. I personally liked the dialect. You handled that well also, and that's not always easy to do. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Well, you did it again, left us high and dry with only guessing what is going to happen next. I am extremely concerned about that big bolder. Maybe somehow it will go off to the side and just barely miss them. LOL Thank you for sharing this wonderful post. No sixes left, sorry.
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Well, you did it again, left us high and dry with only guessing what is going to happen next. I am extremely concerned about that big bolder. Maybe somehow it will go off to the side and just barely miss them. LOL Thank you for sharing this wonderful post. No sixes left, sorry.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What an exciting chapter, Bill and Cathy. I can picture everything you wrote--the imagery is fantastic. Your word choices are precise, whether they are 'Smoky Mountain' dialect, or words from, or to God.
Angel expresses her fear about the cave-in well. Her words reflect what she is thinking about whether they will make it or not. Bill tries to lighten the situation, but deep down I believe he is worried about the same thing. However, he starts immediately trying to find an answer to the issue of escaping the cave. I enjoyed his playful banter about the pink panties. Even in the face of danger, he is calm. His solution to spend the night seems plausible until . . .the growling is heard.
The sight of the grizzly and ensuing attack is riveting. The dialogue between Bill and Angel, at this point, is engaging and realistic. Of course, he wants to save Angel at all costs--even if he dies. He has foresight to remind Angel about the safest place for her to hide and what may happen. If worse comes to worse, he gives Angel his final thought of his love for her. The attack scene shows the fierceness of the grizzly and the devastating effect it has on Bill. Readers wonder if he is alive as does Angel. She blames herself for the attack. That is an endearing trait for her.
I like the part where Bill comes to after the attack and talks about the angel on the Christmas tree at home. Grandpa's explanation is AWESOME. Readers can feel his pride and love of his faith and of his family. As a young boy, this satisfies Bill's curiosity although it makes him think, too. Jesus is Love and that concept is written expertly and is an EXCELLENT inclusion in this chapter!.
The cliffhanger leaves much to be learned in the next chapter. I can hardly wait. The book cover is beautiful and gives readers a good image of Angel. The colors work well with the image.
Thank you, Bill and Cathy, for sharing this AWESOME chapter.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
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What an exciting chapter, Bill and Cathy. I can picture everything you wrote--the imagery is fantastic. Your word choices are precise, whether they are 'Smoky Mountain' dialect, or words from, or to God.
Angel expresses her fear about the cave-in well. Her words reflect what she is thinking about whether they will make it or not. Bill tries to lighten the situation, but deep down I believe he is worried about the same thing. However, he starts immediately trying to find an answer to the issue of escaping the cave. I enjoyed his playful banter about the pink panties. Even in the face of danger, he is calm. His solution to spend the night seems plausible until . . .the growling is heard.
The sight of the grizzly and ensuing attack is riveting. The dialogue between Bill and Angel, at this point, is engaging and realistic. Of course, he wants to save Angel at all costs--even if he dies. He has foresight to remind Angel about the safest place for her to hide and what may happen. If worse comes to worse, he gives Angel his final thought of his love for her. The attack scene shows the fierceness of the grizzly and the devastating effect it has on Bill. Readers wonder if he is alive as does Angel. She blames herself for the attack. That is an endearing trait for her.
I like the part where Bill comes to after the attack and talks about the angel on the Christmas tree at home. Grandpa's explanation is AWESOME. Readers can feel his pride and love of his faith and of his family. As a young boy, this satisfies Bill's curiosity although it makes him think, too. Jesus is Love and that concept is written expertly and is an EXCELLENT inclusion in this chapter!.
The cliffhanger leaves much to be learned in the next chapter. I can hardly wait. The book cover is beautiful and gives readers a good image of Angel. The colors work well with the image.
Thank you, Bill and Cathy, for sharing this AWESOME chapter.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Shirley McLain
This was a sad chapter overall because of the two deaths at the end by the boulder but left full of promise. You did a great job, as always. I didn't see any mistakes. Have a great day. Shirley
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This was a sad chapter overall because of the two deaths at the end by the boulder but left full of promise. You did a great job, as always. I didn't see any mistakes. Have a great day. Shirley
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from January L'Angelle
That was quite some ending to this chapter! How awful of you to leave me hanging like that. The writing was exceptionally good. I enjoyed the story very much. I like that you gave a good reason for them to stay in the cave overnight. (panties) If I had to change one thing that seemed unrealistic, it was that there was conveniently a broken picnic basket and conveniently blown in twigs. I know that you needed something to make a fire with but the twigs would have been enough. (I think the broken picnic basket would have possibly alerted an experience hiker that there was something wrong about that cave and gave them a sense of urgency to get out) Just me overthinking! This is a very exciting story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Well done. -January L.
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That was quite some ending to this chapter! How awful of you to leave me hanging like that. The writing was exceptionally good. I enjoyed the story very much. I like that you gave a good reason for them to stay in the cave overnight. (panties) If I had to change one thing that seemed unrealistic, it was that there was conveniently a broken picnic basket and conveniently blown in twigs. I know that you needed something to make a fire with but the twigs would have been enough. (I think the broken picnic basket would have possibly alerted an experience hiker that there was something wrong about that cave and gave them a sense of urgency to get out) Just me overthinking! This is a very exciting story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Wonderful! Both of you are doing excellent; I like this chapter also; I enjoyed the read, the use of words, nice taletelling with excellent use of feelings, emotions about the mishap, so realistically narrated, as I enjoyed the dialogues, climax and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
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Wonderful! Both of you are doing excellent; I like this chapter also; I enjoyed the read, the use of words, nice taletelling with excellent use of feelings, emotions about the mishap, so realistically narrated, as I enjoyed the dialogues, climax and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, that baby bear is going to die too. Without mummy bear to feed and look after him. lets hope she survived. :)) Now you've left us with a boulder crashing down on them, how on earth will they get out of the way of that! Lots happening in this part. Well done both of you. :)) Sandra xx
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Aw, that baby bear is going to die too. Without mummy bear to feed and look after him. lets hope she survived. :)) Now you've left us with a boulder crashing down on them, how on earth will they get out of the way of that! Lots happening in this part. Well done both of you. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Margaret Bednar
It's definitely goofy and the characters are almost over the top but it works. Gotta love pink panties - they have probably been the start of many "bad" endings. I hope their ending is somehow delayed - I look forward to the next chapter.
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It's definitely goofy and the characters are almost over the top but it works. Gotta love pink panties - they have probably been the start of many "bad" endings. I hope their ending is somehow delayed - I look forward to the next chapter.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2020