Comment from Margaret Bednar

Good

Oh, my mother's heart soared when I saw the photo and set the mood for the poem - whimsical and sweet. Simple words, but not boring. Has a nice meter.

 Comment Written 07-May-2020

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reply by the author on 09-May-2020

Thank you for your precious words. They are greatly appreciated! xo

reply by Margaret Bednar on 09-May-2020

Comment from Lucy de Welles

Good

This is a simple, lovely, poem that is good medicine for everyone. Happy, hopeful, joyful and giving. Photo and U Tube are really lovely touch.
Suggestions:
Line 2: take out "and" to read: "seize this fine day"
Line 10: take out "your" to read: "let joy unfold"

Prunes off a tiny bit of trifle and makes line tighter.
Well done!
Thank you for the opportunity to review this delightful work!

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 Comment Written 07-May-2020

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reply by the author on 09-May-2020

Thank you so much for your suggestions. I was trying to keep at a 5 syllable count for each line, so it would be ok then to make those changes? Appreciate your help very much!

reply by Lucy de Welles on 09-May-2020

Dont' know...was there a rule to keep each line at 5 syllables? If so, sorry to intrude on that. If there is NOT any syllable requirement, then changes would freshen in up :)
Cheers!

reply by the author on 09-May-2020

Ok, and no requirement except that it rhyme I believe! Thanks so much!