Eric's Epic Adventures Bk 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "More Questions - No Answers"Eric And The Lost City of Atlantis
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Blame it all on Plato and his wild imagination, which he seems to have transferred to Sandra Mitchell.
Six million aliens living in Atlantis, doesn't sound good for the survival of humans. I think we've all been konned by a clever writer.
Or maybe you're descended from the first Atlanteans.
I don't trust Kon, either. Somehow Eric needs to get the aliens to leave
earth of their own volition. Hmmmm.....
Herbie telling lies is probably defensive wiring to protect Eric from danger,
at least that's what Drozig told me.
The use of a different font works well, almost seems like an alien translation.
Great chapter, my friend.
Stay well.
Robert
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hello Sandra,
Blame it all on Plato and his wild imagination, which he seems to have transferred to Sandra Mitchell.
Six million aliens living in Atlantis, doesn't sound good for the survival of humans. I think we've all been konned by a clever writer.
Or maybe you're descended from the first Atlanteans.
I don't trust Kon, either. Somehow Eric needs to get the aliens to leave
earth of their own volition. Hmmmm.....
Herbie telling lies is probably defensive wiring to protect Eric from danger,
at least that's what Drozig told me.
The use of a different font works well, almost seems like an alien translation.
Great chapter, my friend.
Stay well.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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LOL! I'm thrilled that Drozig is keeping you informed, it's more than he's doing to me! Lol. Me? An Atlantean? How on earth did you find out? I'm going to be having words with Drozig, it's supposed to be a secret! Thank you so very much for this really encouraging review, my friend, I certainly needed it. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and liked the font. It's been driving me crazy trying to get it right. And a big thank you for the six stars, that was the clotted cream on top of the apple pie! lol. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
My opinion, for what it's worth would be to print the mind merging thoughts in e Italics but in and Aqua marine color. That would make it more real I believe. Can Eric trust these creatures? They are too secretive if you ask me.
Well done. Good save from Herbie. Will he be punished for telling a fib? Stay safe dear.LOL Nancy:)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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My opinion, for what it's worth would be to print the mind merging thoughts in e Italics but in and Aqua marine color. That would make it more real I believe. Can Eric trust these creatures? They are too secretive if you ask me.
Well done. Good save from Herbie. Will he be punished for telling a fib? Stay safe dear.LOL Nancy:)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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What a good idea, Nancy! Thank you so much for that. I'm going to do that in future. The Aqua marine colour is a touch of genius, my friend! I always knew there was more to you than you let on! :) Will Herbie be punished? No, he's doing a grand job. lol.
Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, that is a bonus on top of this fabulous review. You stay safe and well too, you really do need to take care. No gallivanting about down the disco halls! Big hugs, my friend and lot of love. :)) Sandra xxx
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Believe me if I get it my children will bring it in, but we have just discovered the drug store and Market are delivering what ever we need. The three of us are at risk at our age. There are no reported cases where we live and only 16 statewide yesterday. One death. Nevada is not densely populated except in Reno and Las Vegas. It will make it here no doubt, but everyone is hunkered down at home except those brave souls who are needed. You stay safe. Hugs Nancy
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Oh, I'm so glad you're ok, my friend. You've been through enough without this. I'll be keeping you in my prayers and your family. xx
Comment from aryr
Amazing, simply amazing, Sandra. Very well done and quite enjoyable. The more chapters I read, the more I grow suspicious of Kon and the Atlantians, perhaps Eric, Herbie and Gizmo are justified in their restlessness and unease. I eagerly await for more. Great job. Hugs and smiles, Alie.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Amazing, simply amazing, Sandra. Very well done and quite enjoyable. The more chapters I read, the more I grow suspicious of Kon and the Atlantians, perhaps Eric, Herbie and Gizmo are justified in their restlessness and unease. I eagerly await for more. Great job. Hugs and smiles, Alie.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Aw, thank you, Alie!! What a lovely review. Bless your heart. We'll soon see what the Atlantians are truly like. Sending you a big hug back, my friend. Stay safe and well. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am wondering about that myself. What could have happened to them and why hasn't anybody seen them It is obvious they do exist. LOL I enjoyed reading this post. I do really like this story.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I am wondering about that myself. What could have happened to them and why hasn't anybody seen them It is obvious they do exist. LOL I enjoyed reading this post. I do really like this story.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Of course they exist, Barbara. Eric and Herbie have met them!! LOL. Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, my friend. I hope you are staying well and safe. Have your schools shut down? All ours have now. Take care! :)) Sandra xxx
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We are out so far until April 3 and are doing on-line teaching. I have a feeling it will go longer.
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I think so too. Take care, my friend.
Comment from Pantygynt
I love the way you have worked yourself into this story through Eric's own words. The explanations here all seem perfectly plausible. There really is no disbelief to suspend. I am hooked.
I think I spotted one tiny illogicality here:
'They'd crash-landed on this planet and couldn't return to our own planet without a Gizmo.' -- Should this not read:
'... and couldn't return to (our) their own planet without a Gizmo'?
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I love the way you have worked yourself into this story through Eric's own words. The explanations here all seem perfectly plausible. There really is no disbelief to suspend. I am hooked.
I think I spotted one tiny illogicality here:
'They'd crash-landed on this planet and couldn't return to our own planet without a Gizmo.' -- Should this not read:
'... and couldn't return to (our) their own planet without a Gizmo'?
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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What a lovely review, Jim, thank you so much! Thanks also for spotting that nit, I've made the correction. You were absolutely correct. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
How are you coping with all the shutdowns, and being a prisoner in your own home? Two week in and I've had enough! lol.
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It's not much different from my normal life. I had to take the cat to the vet the other day and I stayed in the car in the car park and the vet came out to me, took the cat in treated him and brought him back. I was impressed.
Living in the middle of nowhere I can walk the dog across the fields without a problem.
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That was impressive. I think there are the sensible ones, and the others who think it's a game and don't listen to what's being told them. Stupid!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Sandra, another fine chapter full of twists and turns. Just the kind of story children like, exciting and stimulates the imagination. About your font - I think it is confusing, especially in a children's book. I don't think it works - children will tire, reading italics in small, pale print. This is a font that is used in technical journals etc. To be honest I am confused LOL! For example Eric's dialogue font changes according to who he is talking to. The content of this chapter is very good but the dialogue for the characters needs consistent, easy to read font. My thoughts are with you on this one - not easy at all. The following are just my thoughts on getting rid of Eric's thoughts in italics. Your paragraph which has a mixed font and the following is just my idea. I haven't used the mixed font in your paragraph but you will follow the change I'm sure.
Again there was silence. This time it was for a much longer time. Eric stayed quiet, and tried not to think of anything. That was hard. He decided to think about his essay for his teacher. What could I write? He really wanted to tell them all what he'd found, but he knew they'd never believe him. I'll have to go the way I decided. I'll write it all down and pretend it's just my idea of what it could have been like if Atlantis had existed.
Again there was silence. This time it was for a much longer time. Eric stayed quiet and tried not to think of anything. In the end he decided to think about his essay for his teacher. What could he write? He really wanted to tell them all that he had found, but knew they would never believe him. He would write it all down instead and pretend it was just his idea of what it could have been like if Atlantis had existed.
(Not a criticism just hope it helps - if not just dump LOL)
Good Luck Sandra - Love Dorothy xxx
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hello Sandra, another fine chapter full of twists and turns. Just the kind of story children like, exciting and stimulates the imagination. About your font - I think it is confusing, especially in a children's book. I don't think it works - children will tire, reading italics in small, pale print. This is a font that is used in technical journals etc. To be honest I am confused LOL! For example Eric's dialogue font changes according to who he is talking to. The content of this chapter is very good but the dialogue for the characters needs consistent, easy to read font. My thoughts are with you on this one - not easy at all. The following are just my thoughts on getting rid of Eric's thoughts in italics. Your paragraph which has a mixed font and the following is just my idea. I haven't used the mixed font in your paragraph but you will follow the change I'm sure.
Again there was silence. This time it was for a much longer time. Eric stayed quiet, and tried not to think of anything. That was hard. He decided to think about his essay for his teacher. What could I write? He really wanted to tell them all what he'd found, but he knew they'd never believe him. I'll have to go the way I decided. I'll write it all down and pretend it's just my idea of what it could have been like if Atlantis had existed.
Again there was silence. This time it was for a much longer time. Eric stayed quiet and tried not to think of anything. In the end he decided to think about his essay for his teacher. What could he write? He really wanted to tell them all that he had found, but knew they would never believe him. He would write it all down instead and pretend it was just his idea of what it could have been like if Atlantis had existed.
(Not a criticism just hope it helps - if not just dump LOL)
Good Luck Sandra - Love Dorothy xxx
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Hi Dorothy, thank you so very much for the six stars and for this really helpful review. Having thought about what you've said, I had to agree and have used your paragraph. It's still trial and error with this font. I've just read another review and she suggested I use a colour instead of what I've done here. That would save me a lot of time! lol. I'll try that next time and see how that works. But, once schools are open again, I'll ask Eric's head teacher. He's invited me to read the first book to the children, so that will be interesting. :))
Thank you so much for taking the time to do this, I really appreciated it. I'm glad you picked up on that, it did make me see it through different eyes. Stay safe and well, my friend. Big hugs, and lots of love. Sandra xxx
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Going on to be an interesting story, questioning many things about our existence.
It stays simple though, on a child's level, so everybody can understand, and it is a relief to me that not all is scientifically explained. There is room for fantasy and speculation.
About the new form for the thoughts: It almost works. Maybe it could be even more so if you used a blacker letter type. Right now there is only a small difference, it does not stand out enough. (my thought)
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Going on to be an interesting story, questioning many things about our existence.
It stays simple though, on a child's level, so everybody can understand, and it is a relief to me that not all is scientifically explained. There is room for fantasy and speculation.
About the new form for the thoughts: It almost works. Maybe it could be even more so if you used a blacker letter type. Right now there is only a small difference, it does not stand out enough. (my thought)
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for this brilliant review, Marjon, I really appreciate those words. Someone mentioned I use a colour for the thoughts, so I'll try that next. I'm going to check with Eric's head teacher when the school is opened again. Whenever that might be! Thanks for your thoughts, my friend, I really appreciated them. :)) Sandra xxx
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Very good idea (to use a color).
Schools...yes, a big problem, but needed. Here in Spain they have prolonged the period with another two weeks until the 12th of April. But it could be longer...
Comment from Bichon
I really loved this chapter. It established many personalities and possibly unanswered questions, so great job with that. The italics worked fine too! A great read my friend.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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I really loved this chapter. It established many personalities and possibly unanswered questions, so great job with that. The italics worked fine too! A great read my friend.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Chloe, for this lovely review. I'm delighted you are enjoying this story. And thank you for the thumbs up on the font! Take care, and stay safe. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from damommy
The different font works for me. I'm afraid Eric and Herbie are facing some big trouble. I don't think these aqua-beings are being honest, and I fear what may come next.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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The different font works for me. I'm afraid Eric and Herbie are facing some big trouble. I don't think these aqua-beings are being honest, and I fear what may come next.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Yes, Herbie has been suspicious from the start. Eric is catching on now, though. Thank you so very much for your lovely review, Yvonne, and for giving me your thoughts on the font. Big hugs, my friend, and please, stay well and stay safe!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh dear, now the Atlanteans know they don't exist in the future, just in stories his grandmother writes =]. That could change things in the future. Great writing. I saw no errors. Hope you are doing well and taking care. My nephew has bad asthma and is worried, but staying home and washing your hands is the best thing you can do. You be careful. Rox
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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Oh dear, now the Atlanteans know they don't exist in the future, just in stories his grandmother writes =]. That could change things in the future. Great writing. I saw no errors. Hope you are doing well and taking care. My nephew has bad asthma and is worried, but staying home and washing your hands is the best thing you can do. You be careful. Rox
Comment Written 23-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
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LOL, I had to put that in, about grandmother writing! Thank you so much for your lovely review, my friend.
I have asthma too, and I hope your nephew will be alright. Is he a grown-up, or a child. Whatever, you're right, he must stay away from other people. You take care too, my friend.This is not a friendly virus. Sending you one of my magical protection hugs! :)) Sandra xxx