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A Wartime Romance

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I am pretty sure Grandpa will survive this too. He's been in a lot worse situations. An angry husband is nothing. LOL This is another good write.
"It certainly can be," the Doctor replied. (no capital 'd' needed on doctor)

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
    Hi Barbara! Your continued support means so much to us! Thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. Good guess on Grandpa! Chapter 24 has just been posted. Glad you enjoyed this one! Take care and stay well. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, Tootie,

....The Shadow of Ol' Glory....is a well developed story and characters. I coauthered a book with Dean Kuch. It's a lot of fun. You guys are doing well.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi There! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Yes, co-authoring is fun. It's also a lot of work, but well worth it! Glad you enjoyed the story and characters. Chapter 24 is written and will be posted soon. HURRAH! Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Well, that was another exciting part, and what an ending!! I remember when my dad and brother had stones, they were both in hospital because they both had really large ones. Dad had them about two years before my brother. Poor Cathy, to go through that pain would automatically make her think it was her baby. I'm glad it wasn't. Now Bill has graduated he'll soon be off to war. That will be very hard on Cathy. So, I'm hoping this last part where Grampa in about to be thrown down a bottomless pit, is just a dream, but I bet it's not! I'll be watching out for the next part. Well done, both of you, another great chapter. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Sandra, What an AWESOME review coming for an AMAZING author, meaning YOU!! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, for your continued support and great comments. Chapter 24 is written and coming very soon! Stay well, our friend. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Teri7
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I am glad you two got back to writing again. This is another very good chapter with very good dialogue. And yes we have to wait to see the end result of Grandpa. I look forward to the next chapter. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Teri! Did we take too long to post this chapter? Please forgive us. We are writing constantly but have several books in process. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this. Also, for your continued support. You are AWESOME! Chapter 24 is written and coming very soon! Love and Blessings to you, too, our friend. Take care and stay well.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Ulla
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Hi you two. I liked this chapter and it has a lot going for it. It has suspense as we wait to see what Cathy's pains are about and then the bittersweet moments afterwards at the ceremony. I have one suggestion, though:
(Sorry, folks--we all love Grandpa, but he had it comin' to him.) Remove this, please. It's flippant and ruins the story. We all know you love him, and we all know what he's like. Leave it to our imagination, Don't spell it out.
Ulla:)))


 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Ulla, Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, for your continued support and suggestion. Good point, our friend! Hope you are doing fine. Please take care. Chapter 24 is already written and will be posted very soon. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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AWESOME chapter, Cathy and Bill! From the start, the title is a perfect fit for what is to come. The videos are enjoyable and ground the setting perfectly. I enjoyed viewing each one.

This chapter revolved around the family members individually and collectively. I liked how insights into each of the characters is skillfully woven into the words whether by dialogue or by actions.

Beginning where the last chapter ended and carrying that through the doctor's visit and diagnosis was riveting. You had readers (me) on edge wondering what was the cause of Cathy's pain and what would happen to the baby. I loved the way Grandpa and Grandma were always there for Cathy and how God was always at the forefront, too. It was a relief to find that Cathy was able recover from the kidney stone without possibly having to go to the hospital for further treatment, and the baby was unharmed. I know she would never miss Bill's graduation.

I loved how Grandma keeps Grandpa in line. The part about her grabbing the broom and whomping Grandpa was perfect for her character, and I could see this as it took place. Grandma sure has Grandpa's number. Her words and actions showed a deep love and trust between the two--awesome to include!

The use of occasional internal rhyme, such as candlelight/night; quest/southwest; life/wife; room/broom, and hog-slop/stop add great feeling to the story. Those made it sound like real spontaneous speech and are fun to read. I could hear each character speaking these words.

Readers are treated to more of Bill's character with several incidents and comments. The graduation day found him thinking back of what his team has trained to do and what lies ahead after graduation. Readers feel a sense of family, tradition, patriotism, and tenseness about his being deployed. His thoughts about actual fighting with the 'might. . . not. . .' really grabbed readers' (my heart) hearts. The graduation ceremony was well-described. I felt as if I was in the audience. I loved Bill's thoughts he whispered to his baby.

The few days of vacation were great to read. I liked each individual part. Grandpa, Grandma, and Momma seem to leave on a high note with much excitement in the air. Everything was going great until. . .we'll find out in next chapter. Cathy and Bill's vacation together was a great sendoff for him. I'm thrilled they got to share that time together and made memories.

The leadup to the cliff hanger was well done. It will surely make for an exciting chapter 24. The dialogue associated with it is super. Readers get caught up in the action just as Grandpa did.

Thanks, Cathy and Bill, for sharing this AWESOME chapter. This is one of the best so far. I LOVE the title.

Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Jan! What an AWESOME review! Thank you SO MUCH for the SPECTACULAR six stars! HURRAH! A double "SALUTE!" Your support, and YOU, mean so much to both of us. Another thank you for all you do! Chapter 24 is already written and will be posted soon. Take care, our friend. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Love and Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Mistydawn
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Ornery old cuss, got himself in a heap of trouble this time. I do hope he's alright. I'm glad the pain was only a kidney stone and that she and the baby are alright. Your story is well-written, very interesing of course. The way it rhymed I felt like I was reading a poem. That was interesting about Mcdonalds how it began.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Mistydawn! LOL--We love your comments here! Thanks again, our friend, for following along and for all your support. Awesome review! Glad you enjoyed reading this chapter and also enjoyed the info about McDonald's. Chapter 24 has been written and will be posted soon. Stay well and take care. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Loved the pictures. Thank you for sharing them. You did leave me hanging on by my fingernails once again. Poor Grandpa is he a victim or not. Great job. Shirley

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Shirley! Hanging on by your fingernails? Ouch! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this. Also, for your continued support. It means so much to us! Oh, don't worry about Grandpa. He's used to being between by Grandma's broom. It doesn't stop him, though, from acting up! Chapter 24 is already written and coming soon, so stay tuned. Be well and take care. God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from samandlancelot
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Cathy & Bill,

There's a lot going on with Cathy's pregnancy, kidney stone, Bill's graduation and upcoming deployment. I like a lot of your interactions. I think there are places where there's more itinerary-like telling. Perhaps slowing down the procession of activities and adding in more dialogue might help liven those sections.

When Cathy asked the doctor what was wrong with her, it seems logical he would answer her question immediately. That answer doesn't come until several paragraphs later.

It was for Cathy, Grandpa, (change to Grandma) Grandpa, Momma, and myself.

"C'mon y'all! Climb aboard the ol' truck, put the picnic basket in my lap, and let's move out." Grandpa said to Grandma and Momma.

"Yakety Yak! Don't you ever hush your mouth, Ol' Man?" Grandma was quick to reply.

"I can't, Ol' Woman, 'cause you're biting my tongue--yummy, yummy!"

"Aww, hog-slop! Will you never stop? Don't 'cha know Billy's momma is looking and listening?"

"That's swell! Because next time you're out in the field a pickin' peas, we'll get naked, then go for a swim in the well."

"Oh, my God! Why me, Lord? I go to church on Sunday, pray day after day that he'll change his way; yet, the only thing he changes is his drawers on Saturday." (I love this exchange. It reveals personality and brings your scene to life.

With the graduation ceremony, you give a bit about Billy, but what's going on with Cathy and the rest of the family as they watch, perhaps feeling the same joy and concern as Billy.

the only thing he changes is his drawers on Saturday." (funny)

Patricia

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Patricia, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We do appreciate your comments. We assure you that although parts are fast-paced, it will all come together. There are three parts to our book and we're about to enter the last section when Bill is at war. This section will be much for intense. Chapter 24 is written and will be posted soon, so stay tuned. Take care and God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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Your writing is very spontaneous, lively, and natural. The story line is well developed and moves along quickly. The characters draw your readers back for each new chapter.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2020
    Hi Rebecca, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We're so glad you enjoyed this chapter and are now following along. Chapter 24 is already written and coming soon, so stay tuned. Wishing you all the best. Stay well and God Bless.
    Respectfully with Admiration,
    Bill and Cathy