Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Learning Our Roles in Marriage"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this personal story of your life in the early days of your marriage. Everyone has problems they need to work through, and I'm glad you were able to push through them. Bill
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thanks for sharing this personal story of your life in the early days of your marriage. Everyone has problems they need to work through, and I'm glad you were able to push through them. Bill
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you Bill, I really appreciate the review. I'm anxious to read more of your story. I need to make sure I your fan so I want miss anything.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Sweet dreams of married life disturbed by minor reality such as cooking and dealing with other "predators" that wants a piece of your youth. Thank you for sharing and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Sweet dreams of married life disturbed by minor reality such as cooking and dealing with other "predators" that wants a piece of your youth. Thank you for sharing and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you again Iza for continuing to review and comment on my story.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
-First paragraph demonstrates although you did not consider yourself a cook you found ways to make do.
-Cooking Tupperware would be a unique way to flavor food. Good thing nosy landlady appeared on the scene.
-Paragraph 3 "he visits" should be The visits
-Someone who wants to check your laundry needs to be carefully watched.
-Paragraph 4 "firghtened" should be frightened
-Paragraph 5 would read better if you changed from passive voice and began the paragraph with "Another couple lived"
-Also in Paragraph 5 "we don't need get involved" should be we don't need to get involved
-A doctor like that should lose his license.
-Paragraph 9 "I'm didn't question" should be I didn't question
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that offers assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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-First paragraph demonstrates although you did not consider yourself a cook you found ways to make do.
-Cooking Tupperware would be a unique way to flavor food. Good thing nosy landlady appeared on the scene.
-Paragraph 3 "he visits" should be The visits
-Someone who wants to check your laundry needs to be carefully watched.
-Paragraph 4 "firghtened" should be frightened
-Paragraph 5 would read better if you changed from passive voice and began the paragraph with "Another couple lived"
-Also in Paragraph 5 "we don't need get involved" should be we don't need to get involved
-A doctor like that should lose his license.
-Paragraph 9 "I'm didn't question" should be I didn't question
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that offers assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Your review are great. I need that kind of review. I've made the changes you suggest Thank so much. I enjoy your comment too.
