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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, poor Mac, how embarrassing, I'd be the same as her. Mind you, you can't see much through my warm thermal pyjamas. (UK spelling, lol) This was quite a revealing part, what Mac is looking for in a possible husband. I think Logan ticked all the boxes. I enjoyed this part, well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Aww, poor Mac, how embarrassing, I'd be the same as her. Mind you, you can't see much through my warm thermal pyjamas. (UK spelling, lol) This was quite a revealing part, what Mac is looking for in a possible husband. I think Logan ticked all the boxes. I enjoyed this part, well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I think the kind review. Mac has lived by herself for so long she never considered the night T-shirt.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter and I liked their conversation. Romance is definitely coming on. But now real life is taking over again.
A couple of things:
I want be the only woman he desires.= I want to be the only woman he desires.
McKenzie shared out the passenger window. = McKenzie stared out the passenger window.
Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Hi Barbara, this is another great chapter and I liked their conversation. Romance is definitely coming on. But now real life is taking over again.
A couple of things:
I want be the only woman he desires.= I want to be the only woman he desires.
McKenzie shared out the passenger window. = McKenzie stared out the passenger window.
Looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for bringing them to my attention.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Well I suppose after reading through a few chapters it seems like a lot of time has passed so the reader can sometimes forget the whole 9 days thing and that it too early in fact!
The conversation in the middle was really steamy and getting erotic by the end and I liked how you wrote if I could feel the tension hanging in the air around them!
Overall, this was another well written chapter! Good job :-)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Well I suppose after reading through a few chapters it seems like a lot of time has passed so the reader can sometimes forget the whole 9 days thing and that it too early in fact!
The conversation in the middle was really steamy and getting erotic by the end and I liked how you wrote if I could feel the tension hanging in the air around them!
Overall, this was another well written chapter! Good job :-)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Mackenzie answers all the questions that She wants in a man, all those qualities that would suggest the perfect man for her. Of course everyone knows it's not as simple as that, those conditions are only important after one is is genuinely attracted to that person, but it can be difficult if they're not afterwards. Whitmore spent three hours, nursing a beer, watching pole dancers perform, well done, blessings Roy
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Mackenzie answers all the questions that She wants in a man, all those qualities that would suggest the perfect man for her. Of course everyone knows it's not as simple as that, those conditions are only important after one is is genuinely attracted to that person, but it can be difficult if they're not afterwards. Whitmore spent three hours, nursing a beer, watching pole dancers perform, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : I know(,) stay put.
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Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I have inserted the comma. Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Sankey
No SIXES today for some reason sorry about that! This was a lovely intimate detailed read. I feel like things are on the move in the romance area. No spags anywhere either! Do you remember Beth Shelby from way back? She has returned. You would enjoy reading about her and her late husband meeting and so on.
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No SIXES today for some reason sorry about that! This was a lovely intimate detailed read. I feel like things are on the move in the romance area. No spags anywhere either! Do you remember Beth Shelby from way back? She has returned. You would enjoy reading about her and her late husband meeting and so on.
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Comment Written 09-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2020
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I have been reading Beth's work and am enjoying it. Thank you for the kind review.
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Check out Brett West if you aren't already. We prose writers must support each other. The poet's don't knoet hehe😞
