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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

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Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from Gloria ....
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An excellent free verse poem of contrasts, J. Yes gold is the metal that was assigned the glorious status of being the standard of wealth. But in truth mining the precious metal releases heavy amounts of mercury into the environment contributing heavily to man-made pollution. But such is the way of the market driven monetary system.

Great that you found the genuine "gold" behind the metal.

A lovely addition to the club. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Gloria, thank you, you have a solid knowledge of the environmental damage done by gold mining.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
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I enjoyed your lovely woven words that paint a very visual picture of the many aspects portrayed by gold. And thank you for emphasizing that its value is in the eye of the beholder.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    A. Louise Robertson, thank you for the review and comments.
Comment from Dancemom
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This is a well written free verse poem describing various things of gold. I enjoyed how you took these golden things and talked about the importance of the things that go along with it, such as Olympic dreams, love, and golden stairs. Great job and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Heather, thank you for the validation on this poetic free verse.
Comment from Drew Delaney
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A very well written free verse. Your topic is on gold that glitters. Free verse can be difficult to manoeuvre, but it seems to me, who is no expert, that this worked out well. I liked the content of your poem and your wording.
Drew

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Drew, thank you for your time invested inn reviewing and commenting.
Comment from Minglement
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I really enjoyed this free verse poem and your theme. The value of some things some things is based on other scales of value. I love your suggestion of the 'gold spun by the honey Bee. Beautiful imagery throughout. Great job.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Minglement, thankyou for the validation on this free verse topic.
reply by Minglement on 03-Feb-2020
    You are most welcome :)
Comment from lyenochka
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Great reflections about the gold in our lives - from the gold of honey, to the gold of athletes' honor, to the gold of a treasured covenant in marriage and finally the ultimate gold of a future in Heaven. Well done!

"And last but not least, the golden stair's," (stairs) simple plural.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments, I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Aussie
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Men have always put the getting of gold before all other things. In the Lord's time, the golden calf was worshiped.
Today is no different. For those who have empty hearts, perhaps empty heads, there is no better prize than money. We know better. Well done poet.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2020
    Aussie, thank you for the time invested to review and comment on my free verse.
Comment from Therese Caron
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This is a beautiful poem, truly describing which forms of gold are worth more. I have two small edits to suggest: the last two stanzas - stardust dream's. - stardust dreams,
And golden stair's - golden stairs.
This poem is lovely and thought provoking. The image is beautiful and complements your writing well. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Done while you were reading and commenting thank you as always my friend!
reply by Therese Caron on 02-Feb-2020
    I love your poetry!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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Very cool poem for our free verse club challenge. You convert many diverse things in this. Did you mean "bands of gold" though as I think you have a typo :).

Thanks for sharing!! xoxo

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Diana OH yikes, of course thanks ~
reply by Diana L Crawford on 02-Feb-2020
    You are so welcome! It was a pleasure to enjoy!
Comment from Sugarray77
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A great job on this free verse about gold. Your descriptions and examples were well chosen and handled superbly, J... I enjoyed reading it!

Melissa

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020


reply by the author on 02-Feb-2020
    Melissa, thank you from the bottom of my heart!