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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I enjoyed reading this latest chapter of your exciting book. The characters are great and I love the family relationships.
I caught some errors:
"I see 'em, Roy. Shoot low, men, 'cause their crawling. " Rat-tat-tat-tat!
--> they're crawling
(Also, delete space between period and quotation mark.)
Two unnecessary single quote marks:
>'walkin' or talkin' no>'more."
to make us all some Lipton Tea. --> Lipton tea (unless you're advertising it!)
"Hush, Grandpa" (needs punctuation before quotation mark)
And, Cathy, (needs quotation mark before "And")
as if to say, "Come on over and watch this "macho" display!"
-->
as if to say, "Come on over and watch this 'macho' display!"
Yes, you left us hanging again, but it makes me want to read the next chapter, even more. This is going to be a wonderful book!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I enjoyed reading this latest chapter of your exciting book. The characters are great and I love the family relationships.
I caught some errors:
"I see 'em, Roy. Shoot low, men, 'cause their crawling. " Rat-tat-tat-tat!
--> they're crawling
(Also, delete space between period and quotation mark.)
Two unnecessary single quote marks:
>'walkin' or talkin' no>'more."
to make us all some Lipton Tea. --> Lipton tea (unless you're advertising it!)
"Hush, Grandpa" (needs punctuation before quotation mark)
And, Cathy, (needs quotation mark before "And")
as if to say, "Come on over and watch this "macho" display!"
-->
as if to say, "Come on over and watch this 'macho' display!"
Yes, you left us hanging again, but it makes me want to read the next chapter, even more. This is going to be a wonderful book!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Mary Kay! Please forgive the delay. It's been so busy, and we've been writing, too. Thanks so much for reading this chapter. Also, for your edits. We've made the changes and really appreciate the help. So glad you are enjoying this book. Chapter 22 has been written and will be posted very soon. Wishing you the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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Dear Bill & Cathy, you're very welcome. It's my pleasure. Don't worry about any delay. Best wishes with your book, God bless you too! - Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Mistydawn
Again with the cliff hanger? lol. I feel like I did when I used to watch the soaps on Friday afternoon. General hospital, what a classic. My grandma and I used to watch it every day, then give our opinions on what we think will happen next. Your story is very well-written, interesting. I'm so glad Bill is alright, and do hope Grandma can be saved. I'm worried about the baby with Cathy falling and all. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Again with the cliff hanger? lol. I feel like I did when I used to watch the soaps on Friday afternoon. General hospital, what a classic. My grandma and I used to watch it every day, then give our opinions on what we think will happen next. Your story is very well-written, interesting. I'm so glad Bill is alright, and do hope Grandma can be saved. I'm worried about the baby with Cathy falling and all. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Misty Dawn! So sorry for the delay. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this. As we've said before, your continued support means so much to us! Great memories of General Hospital, huh? Thanks also for sharing yours. Glad you found this chapter well written and interesting. We've finished Chapter 22, and it will be posted very soon. Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Good grief!! Does anything good ever happen to these people? =] Every week someone is in a accident or sick and now grandma is in the well! I'm not going to live through this book! =] Guess I have to wait to find out what happens to grandma. ={ Rox
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Good grief!! Does anything good ever happen to these people? =] Every week someone is in a accident or sick and now grandma is in the well! I'm not going to live through this book! =] Guess I have to wait to find out what happens to grandma. ={ Rox
Comment Written 07-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Rox! Yes, good grief! Something's always happening with these folks. But, don't despair - they're made of strong chain! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this. So happy you are following along. Chapter 22 has been written and will be posted very soon. Stay tuned! Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from karenina
Love this! I was bored the other night and started looking up old GH clips on YouTube... Jessica Brewer the nurse! I remember her! Your writing is always infectious... Never boring. I don't even mind being left hanging! (As long as it's not a noose around my neck that is)---Smiles--Karenina
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Love this! I was bored the other night and started looking up old GH clips on YouTube... Jessica Brewer the nurse! I remember her! Your writing is always infectious... Never boring. I don't even mind being left hanging! (As long as it's not a noose around my neck that is)---Smiles--Karenina
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Karenina! So glad you loved this chapter. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. Also, thank you for reminding us what the nurse's name was! No noose around your neck :) - NEVER! However, we did leave you hanging...again! Chapter 22 has been written and will be posted soon. Wishing you all the best. Smiles! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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You always brighten my day when I see a new chapter arrive!--Karenina
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
AWESOME work on this chapter, Cathy and Commando. I loved reading it! The beautiful book cover alerts readers to what and where this novel takes place. You both are amping up the delivery of these chapters in a FANTASTIC way. There is little time between the end of one chapter before the next one is presented. Readers have a little time to think of the cliff hanger before diving in to learn its outcome. Keep 'em coming!
The "previously" was well-worded and, a great synopsis of the last chapter. It should entice anyone who hasn't been following this story to hurry and catch up.
Beginning this chapter with God speaking to Bill is a fascinating way to set the scene. What follows adds more information as to his thoughts, those of Cathy, and more of God speaking. I love the use of cross rhyming, like old/cold; singing/ringing; back/tracks; shot/got; around/found; and others sprinkled throughout the story. Their use adds 'flavor' to the lines.
The scene about the train crash was superbly written. From the cliff hanger in the last chapter, readers (and me) were eagerly awaiting the outcome. To have it as a dream was a stroke of genius. The idea of it being a premonition is a little scary, though.
I'm thrilled Bill made it back to his training in one piece. The dialogue in this section read natural among military buddies. Tension builds when Grandpa cannot find Grandma. That section had me wondering what could have happened to her as she is such a strong woman. Now to find out she's trapped in the well makes me shudder. Grandma's screaming for help 'blowing in the wind' that Cathy heard was an awesome way to write that part. However as a cliff hanger it will draw readers back to find out how she is rescued.
The research done is evident. The Lipton tea was a great choice to include; and, the General Hospital soap opera was perfect--so popular and long-lasting. Those additions help ground the time period of the novel. The videos were a great addition, too.
Thanks for sharing, Cathy and Commando.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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AWESOME work on this chapter, Cathy and Commando. I loved reading it! The beautiful book cover alerts readers to what and where this novel takes place. You both are amping up the delivery of these chapters in a FANTASTIC way. There is little time between the end of one chapter before the next one is presented. Readers have a little time to think of the cliff hanger before diving in to learn its outcome. Keep 'em coming!
The "previously" was well-worded and, a great synopsis of the last chapter. It should entice anyone who hasn't been following this story to hurry and catch up.
Beginning this chapter with God speaking to Bill is a fascinating way to set the scene. What follows adds more information as to his thoughts, those of Cathy, and more of God speaking. I love the use of cross rhyming, like old/cold; singing/ringing; back/tracks; shot/got; around/found; and others sprinkled throughout the story. Their use adds 'flavor' to the lines.
The scene about the train crash was superbly written. From the cliff hanger in the last chapter, readers (and me) were eagerly awaiting the outcome. To have it as a dream was a stroke of genius. The idea of it being a premonition is a little scary, though.
I'm thrilled Bill made it back to his training in one piece. The dialogue in this section read natural among military buddies. Tension builds when Grandpa cannot find Grandma. That section had me wondering what could have happened to her as she is such a strong woman. Now to find out she's trapped in the well makes me shudder. Grandma's screaming for help 'blowing in the wind' that Cathy heard was an awesome way to write that part. However as a cliff hanger it will draw readers back to find out how she is rescued.
The research done is evident. The Lipton tea was a great choice to include; and, the General Hospital soap opera was perfect--so popular and long-lasting. Those additions help ground the time period of the novel. The videos were a great addition, too.
Thanks for sharing, Cathy and Commando.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Jan! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME six star rating and review. HURRAH! Both of us "SALUTE" you! Your reviews are always a pleasure to read. They help and encourage us in our writing. God Bless You! We're so glad you are enjoying this book. Chapter 22 has been written and will be posted very soon. Thank you also for mentioning the research and videos. Wishing you all the best.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration,
Bill and Cathy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Short and sweet ; drop a few suspense points to keep us on the edge until the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Short and sweet ; drop a few suspense points to keep us on the edge until the next chapter. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Hi Iza! Your continued support means so much to both of us. Thank you for reading and reviewing this. You won't have to stay on the edge for long. Chapter 22 is finished and will be posted soon. Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
