Tanka: mud sticks
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Comment from Gail Denham
An omen - a prediction? Perhaps we muddle into many situations or relationships, unaware. Or into events which might bring grief, but we dont' know it. Good poem
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An omen - a prediction? Perhaps we muddle into many situations or relationships, unaware. Or into events which might bring grief, but we dont' know it. Good poem
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I'm not to sure of the meaning here. The gist of what I see is that he is not what he claims to be. Mud sticks, meaning some unclean characteristics are yet to come.
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I'm not to sure of the meaning here. The gist of what I see is that he is not what he claims to be. Mud sticks, meaning some unclean characteristics are yet to come.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Pantygynt
I spent the year before last writing a tanka a day throughout the year but I never managed anything as deep and oriental as this. It is quite brilliant and the third line forms an interesting pivot as well as a clear satori line to the upper poem.
I wonder why he has been walking in someone else's mud. Take care!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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I spent the year before last writing a tanka a day throughout the year but I never managed anything as deep and oriental as this. It is quite brilliant and the third line forms an interesting pivot as well as a clear satori line to the upper poem.
I wonder why he has been walking in someone else's mud. Take care!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thanks for your uplifting comments. Being unfamiliar with tanka, I read what was different about them and saw that the pivot line is crucial in linking before and after. I was really pleased with the result but then my heart sank when a couple of reviewers (Americans) revealed that "mud sticks" is completely perplexing to them. I didn't realise it was a British saying, so have now had to explain it in my author's notes. The main point of that tanka is understanding the concept of 'mud sticking'!
Comment from patcelaw
Sadly there are many who have been armed by someone saying an untruth about them. Those untruths often do stick like mud.
Patricia
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Sadly there are many who have been armed by someone saying an untruth about them. Those untruths often do stick like mud.
Patricia
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and
presentation, Lisa.
-Your note is appreciated,
and I think that it can
apply to many different people.
-You have written a good
tanka with a good syllable count.
-I like the topic, and the opening
lines are good, as well as the pivot line.
-The ending lines make a very good
point about "mud sticks."
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Good image and
presentation, Lisa.
-Your note is appreciated,
and I think that it can
apply to many different people.
-You have written a good
tanka with a good syllable count.
-I like the topic, and the opening
lines are good, as well as the pivot line.
-The ending lines make a very good
point about "mud sticks."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Lisamay wishing you a terrific Thursday. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the Tanka poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Hello Lisamay wishing you a terrific Thursday. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed the Tanka poem quite well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
Comment from Sugarray77
Hi Lisa. Your entry for the Tanka sticks to the guidelines, but I am still trying to figure it out. What does the mud have to do with it? Just wondering?? :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Hi Lisa. Your entry for the Tanka sticks to the guidelines, but I am still trying to figure it out. What does the mud have to do with it? Just wondering?? :)
Melissa
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Ah, so this must be a British idiom, unfamiliar to Americans.
"Mud sticks" means that people are likely to believe something bad that is said about someone, even if it is not true. So in the context of this poem, the guy may or may not have done something to earn a bad reputation. The woman has put out the welcome mat to him, but maybe he doesn't deserve it.
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Hey Lisa. Thanks for the clarification. I have not heard that term before... :)
M
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine Tanka Lisa and I loved the last line, we never really know what another person is thinking and whether we have son their heart, few words here spoke volumes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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A fine Tanka Lisa and I loved the last line, we never really know what another person is thinking and whether we have son their heart, few words here spoke volumes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thanks Dolly. (I got a query about what the mud meant. I didn't realise that 'mud sticks' is a British idiom and I would have to explain it.)
Comment from June Sargent
Unfortunately, we are sometimes walked on like a doormat for quite awhile before we have a clue that we have boots, too, and they are made for walking - right out the door! This piece reminds me of Nancy Sinatra's song...
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Unfortunately, we are sometimes walked on like a doormat for quite awhile before we have a clue that we have boots, too, and they are made for walking - right out the door! This piece reminds me of Nancy Sinatra's song...
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. That was a terrific song - very empowering.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Author, this is a powerful poem to add to my personal library of FanStory posts. It carries the potential of every thing, from just infidelity, to . . .murder.
all the while, housed in the demands of a poetic genre.
You are truly a gifted poet. Do you write prose too?
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Dear Author, this is a powerful poem to add to my personal library of FanStory posts. It carries the potential of every thing, from just infidelity, to . . .murder.
all the while, housed in the demands of a poetic genre.
You are truly a gifted poet. Do you write prose too?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your uplifting review comments. In answer to your question - I write all sorts of things, from silly to serious. Check out my portfolio. I have been a member for the past year and am trying different forms, from tanka and haiku to rhyming longer poems; in prose - flash fiction and longer stories too, often humorous.
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Glad to make your acquaintance, thanks for your reply. can I see all you writings if I look in your portfolio?
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Hi Suzanne. If you click on my name, LisaMay, it will take you to my profile, then look at the list that appears on the left and you will see Portfolio. Everything I have posted over the past year since I joined will be there.
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Dear Lisa , Thank you so. much for showing me one more move around this web site. Wouldn?t it be great if FanStory just created a list that a newbie could print off! But then I guess we we would not make new friends. Thank you for being mine!