Terror of the Mind
Is it a waking nightmare or is it real...?22 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
So sad to find the sky turning dark and falling - a poem of sadness. Good job with the form . And good luck in the contest. We do face unknown terrors - in our mind - sends me to God in prayer - "help me trust."
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So sad to find the sky turning dark and falling - a poem of sadness. Good job with the form . And good luck in the contest. We do face unknown terrors - in our mind - sends me to God in prayer - "help me trust."
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the sky that turned grey and fall. I cannot say it us wrong because the rules are not specific but it is the first Kyrielle with a repeating line in different lines in each stanza.
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A very well-written poem about the sky that turned grey and fall. I cannot say it us wrong because the rules are not specific but it is the first Kyrielle with a repeating line in different lines in each stanza.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, Terror of the Mind, follows the formatting and brings the reader along into this haunting fog which is a scary dream or the spirit entering into the beckoning unknown. Eerie.
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This kyrielle, Terror of the Mind, follows the formatting and brings the reader along into this haunting fog which is a scary dream or the spirit entering into the beckoning unknown. Eerie.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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My first kyrielle, Bill. Glad I was able to successfully convey my meaning...
Comment from Therese Caron
Lovely and creepy at the same time! It takes a brave person to step into a shrouded haze. The sky turned grey and fell today is also very eerie. Good job on the Kyrielle and good luck in the contest!
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Lovely and creepy at the same time! It takes a brave person to step into a shrouded haze. The sky turned grey and fell today is also very eerie. Good job on the Kyrielle and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
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My first kyrielle, Therese. Glad I was able to successfully convey my meaning...
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done Kyrielle which seems to be about the end of a storm and birds coming out. It also seems the bird is a metaphor of hope the person is serching for to bring him/her out of depression.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Nicely done Kyrielle which seems to be about the end of a storm and birds coming out. It also seems the bird is a metaphor of hope the person is serching for to bring him/her out of depression.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your time and your review!
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You are most kindly welcome.
dp
Comment from Ricky1024
"Terror of the Mind's
This is a Kyrielle writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Complete Synopsis...
Yes the sky turn gray the day the darkest came to town.
This is a very good grieving poem to be used possibly as a dedication after an obituary.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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"Terror of the Mind's
This is a Kyrielle writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Complete Synopsis...
Yes the sky turn gray the day the darkest came to town.
This is a very good grieving poem to be used possibly as a dedication after an obituary.
Thanks and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for your time and your review!
Comment from tfawcus
Very atmospheric. The repeating lines act like a haunting echo. Most effective.
Just one thing to fix before the deadline and that's 'tuned' instead of 'turned' in the second stanza.
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Very atmospheric. The repeating lines act like a haunting echo. Most effective.
Just one thing to fix before the deadline and that's 'tuned' instead of 'turned' in the second stanza.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thanks for that catch, Tony -- all fixed! ;) This was my first kyrielle - Glad I was able to successfully convey my meaning...
Comment from May 1
I love the imagery that this poem creates in mind. Also, I feel like the repetitions work really well to get your message across. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this poem.
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I love the imagery that this poem creates in mind. Also, I feel like the repetitions work really well to get your message across. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Yeah, those repetitions are required by the form definition... A bit different, but I thought I'd give it a try! Thank you for your review!!
Comment from royowen
Well done with this Kyrielle, not the one I'm used to but nevertheless by the contests rules this is right on, but it's language is great, and looks like the very traditional poem with that slightly cryptic flavour that gives great interpretative flexibility, excellent interpretation, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Well done with this Kyrielle, not the one I'm used to but nevertheless by the contests rules this is right on, but it's language is great, and looks like the very traditional poem with that slightly cryptic flavour that gives great interpretative flexibility, excellent interpretation, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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I've never written one and the rules did say that it didn't matter which line repeated... sorry! I guess the committee will tell me if it's wrong... I do appreciate your review and your honesty, Roy!
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I think you?re fine dear friend, I?m not an absolute expert, as long as there is a repeated line. You did well. Roy
Comment from Fonda Little
I liked the colors you used for your poem! Powerful words you have used here as well! Great job! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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I liked the colors you used for your poem! Powerful words you have used here as well! Great job! God bless you In Jesus's Almighty, All Powerful, Divine, Holy, Majestic Name, The Name Above All Names I pray, amen, Amen, AMEN!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2020
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Thank you!