Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Will my legacy be undone?"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from K.A. McRae
Very straight forward and aggressive, in the best way. It pulls you in, you want to hear the story behind the poem, while also causing you to question your own legacy.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Very straight forward and aggressive, in the best way. It pulls you in, you want to hear the story behind the poem, while also causing you to question your own legacy.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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I am humbled by your generous six-star review. Thank you!
Comment from Mastery
Good job here author. These poems are not that easy to construct.
I do have one suggestion for you however...(a small typo here: "What's said can neverbe unspoke!"
Good luck in the contest my friend. :) Bob
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Good job here author. These poems are not that easy to construct.
I do have one suggestion for you however...(a small typo here: "What's said can neverbe unspoke!"
Good luck in the contest my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Caught ...thanks Bob!
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: ) Bob
Comment from TPAC
I love the ring detailed in this write, rendered views finding them fiery in given declared viewpoint, filled with many delighting aspects. All stated in my opinion.
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I love the ring detailed in this write, rendered views finding them fiery in given declared viewpoint, filled with many delighting aspects. All stated in my opinion.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
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TPAC, thank you very much!
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, I really like your poem and I like what it says. I'm not sure you can call it a Kyrielle though. It has no rhyme scheme... none that I could find anyway... I don't think you can 'free verse' a Kyrielle.
I really do like the sentiment behind the poem though, perhaps you can rework the rhyme in time for the contest? :)
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Hello Author, I really like your poem and I like what it says. I'm not sure you can call it a Kyrielle though. It has no rhyme scheme... none that I could find anyway... I don't think you can 'free verse' a Kyrielle.
I really do like the sentiment behind the poem though, perhaps you can rework the rhyme in time for the contest? :)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Susan thanks
Comment from Patty Palmer
The truth be told, once you've said it you can't take it back. Especially, the way the world is today. With the internet, it might as well be caring gold because that never goes away.
Patty
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The truth be told, once you've said it you can't take it back. Especially, the way the world is today. With the internet, it might as well be caring gold because that never goes away.
Patty
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
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Patty, no truer words written!
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Agreed!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments here but a Kyrielle is written in iambic tetrameter which is clearly missing here. A few adjustments would bring it into line for the contest, love Dolly x
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I enjoyed the sentiments here but a Kyrielle is written in iambic tetrameter which is clearly missing here. A few adjustments would bring it into line for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Okay I will give it a go.
Comment from royowen
This is a fine Kyrielle my friend, I taken the liberty of changing the wording of the the repeated refrain, today the language of unspoke is incorrect syntax, but I've gone for the arcane version, it sometimes makes a difference, excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : What('s) spoke, can never be unspoke.
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This is a fine Kyrielle my friend, I taken the liberty of changing the wording of the the repeated refrain, today the language of unspoke is incorrect syntax, but I've gone for the arcane version, it sometimes makes a difference, excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : What('s) spoke, can never be unspoke.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Roy, I like the arcane version so done, thanks for the thoughtful suggestion.
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Bless you
Comment from Gloria ....
I've never written a Kyrielle so I'm going with this is great. And yes, when one is in positions at the top, sadly you don't really get to work out of the system for about five yearsr.
But yes one does or should know they did their best with conviction.
Best of luck to you in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
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I've never written a Kyrielle so I'm going with this is great. And yes, when one is in positions at the top, sadly you don't really get to work out of the system for about five yearsr.
But yes one does or should know they did their best with conviction.
Best of luck to you in the voting booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Gloria, thank you, you have been ther and know this to be true.
Comment from Tina Crute
You packed much wisdom into this. Your prominent phrase is a great one to remember always. Near the end of stanza 4, there is an extra 'r.' Great poem about leadership!
All the best,
Tina
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You packed much wisdom into this. Your prominent phrase is a great one to remember always. Near the end of stanza 4, there is an extra 'r.' Great poem about leadership!
All the best,
Tina
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Tina, thanks fr the sharp eyes on the poem and the heads-up.
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Youre very welcome:)
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows the power of words and that one should be careful of how they are used. Truth is sometimes hard to hear.
This does have the repeating line but in does not have the correct
rhyme scheme for a kyrielle.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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This poem shows the power of words and that one should be careful of how they are used. Truth is sometimes hard to hear.
This does have the repeating line but in does not have the correct
rhyme scheme for a kyrielle.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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?? I will dig into this. thank you for the heads-up
