Hold It In
75 word story contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This word portrait of the oh so dedicated Fanstorian who has his priorities so right/totally back to front I found quite amusing/appalling. So I decided to cover my back in any eventuality.
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This word portrait of the oh so dedicated Fanstorian who has his priorities so right/totally back to front I found quite amusing/appalling. So I decided to cover my back in any eventuality.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hahaha. That's too funny. Thank you for the great/degrading review. Lol. Have yourself a fantastic New Year, Panygynt. I really appreciate the review and stars, friend.
Ron
Comment from LyndaS
I'm impressed with how you told this complete little story in 75 words. There's a few things a man should never do in his life. Near the top is never mess with a woman in labor! Which is what this guy does just to get something posted on Fanstory in time. HAHA! You did a great job with a great picture to go with it. Well done. Lynda
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I'm impressed with how you told this complete little story in 75 words. There's a few things a man should never do in his life. Near the top is never mess with a woman in labor! Which is what this guy does just to get something posted on Fanstory in time. HAHA! You did a great job with a great picture to go with it. Well done. Lynda
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Lol. Oh, yes, I'm sure that's at the top of the list. Haha. Plus, telling her to keep it down so he can concentrate while she's screaming in pain. Lol. Wow, thank you so much for the great review and sixer, Lynda. I sure didn't plan on seeing one of those for this piece. You made my day, L. Thank you again. I hope you have a fantastic rest of your weekend and a wonderful New Year.
Ron
Comment from Wils
For your sake I'm glad this is fiction. A tightly written piece that hides a lesson to all expectant fathers. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Geoff
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For your sake I'm glad this is fiction. A tightly written piece that hides a lesson to all expectant fathers. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Geoff
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Geoff. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is funny. I'm very glad that this is not a true story. I know that there is a lot of pressure to get that story in on time for a contest deadline. I share your pain.
Bill
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That is funny. I'm very glad that this is not a true story. I know that there is a lot of pressure to get that story in on time for a contest deadline. I share your pain.
Bill
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Bill. Yeah, I like to take these silly contests to the extreme sometimes. Lol. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from sweet2002
that's really a piece...i read it thrice to get exactly what you wanted to say...and
finally finishing it a perfect smile exposed my teeth...
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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that's really a piece...i read it thrice to get exactly what you wanted to say...and
finally finishing it a perfect smile exposed my teeth...
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Sweet. I appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from Sally Law
Priorities of the FanStory obsessed. This is a scream, literally. I have a small suggestion. You have a large white space at the top. I would bring your text up closer to the photo for a better overall appearance.
A fine contest entry.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Priorities of the FanStory obsessed. This is a scream, literally. I have a small suggestion. You have a large white space at the top. I would bring your text up closer to the photo for a better overall appearance.
A fine contest entry.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review, Sally. Are you looking at it on a phone or computer? It does that (the big space thing) with whatever I'm reading when I'm reading it on my phone. There is a couple spaces there to play with so I'll go see if I can get it closer. I'm glad you liked this silly piece, Sally. Thank you again. Have a great rest of your weekend and a fantastic New Year.
Ron
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iPad pro. Maybe that's it. As I can't see a phone at all. I have low vision.
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That might be it. My phone always makes the picture a lot smaller for some reason, and then there's that big space in there. I took out a couple more lines so it's right under the picture now but it might still look a few spaces away on the iPad. Now real sure, Sally. Thank you again.