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Love Long Distance

Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Grandpa's Genes - Chapter 8"
A Wartime Romance

33 total reviews 
Comment from Sylvia Page
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Hello Tootie and Bill,
This is a light-hearted chapter and complete with a bit or was it a lot of jealousy? Ending in a catfight, my, my, was it that bad? I can imagine you fighting tooth and nail for your Bill and Bill and Grandpa would definitely have enjoyed it all.
It is a fun read and I did enjoy it all.
Best wishes
Sylvia

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
    Hi Sylvia! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. Yes, lots of jealousy! Cathy will, indeed, fight tooth and nail for Bill! We're happy you found it an enjoyable & fun read. Be sure to come back for Chapter 9. It's in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful weekend!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from LaFrance
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That was a fun and entertaining chapter, but I kinda curious what would have happened if they would have left. I have been in the hospital quite a lot and that fantasy always came up, but never happened to me.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
    Hi LaFrance! We really appreciate you stopping by to read and review Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. Thank you! Glad you found it fun and entertaining. Sorry to hear you've been in the hospital quite a lot. As for what would have happened if Cathy & Grandpa would've left? Well, Cathy really hopes Bill would've behaved himself. We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional
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A six star baptism it is! I loved this chapter and that hussy of a nurse was too much! I was howling with laughter. Another fine chapter and hook in my jaw!

Sending you both my best today as always,
Sally xo

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi Sally! Thank you SO MUCH for the SHINY 6-star rating and awesome review. We are HONORED. It makes us smile knowing we mad you laugh. We really appreciate your continued support. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon. Sending you our best, too!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy xo
reply by Sally Law on 07-Aug-2019
    You both are welcome! Xo
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
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You combine great storytelling with high camp. There's a Crimes of the Heart Feel and the language is so smart and crisp. Delightful and unique and bold! You are a master at the rise and fall of conflict.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi Shauna! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. So glad you enjoyed it. Awesome comments! We checked your profile page. Quite impressive! We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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Oh my. That Bill. I do hope Cathy gives it to him good. =} This is a fun chapter. I saw just one error the 6th par from the top, Just breath deep, needs quote marks, other than that, good job. I've have nurses use those ammonia smelling salts on me when they wanted me up and gone so they could go home after an out patient procedure. They were so tired and my surgery had been delayed hours. They were rather grumpy. =}

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi Roxanna! We really appreciate you stopping by to read and review Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. Also, for your continued support. Thank You, Thank You!! We'll see what happens to the nurse and Bill in the next chapter. It is already in the works and coming soon. Much appreciate you pointing out the missing quote marks, and, also, for sharing about the grumpy nurses you've encountered.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Cats fight in a hospital for a flamboyant flirty guy. Is this chapter about insecurity ... normal human emotions and boundaries. Good luck with your novel writing

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi Iza! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this. Also, thank you for the good luck with our novel writing. This chapter is less about insecurity, and more about Cathy claiming her man! We hope you enjoyed it. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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This is a humorous story/chapter and a slice of life style with some Southern dialect that shines through. I have never heard of a cat fight in a hospital, but it sounds worthy of attention here. I think there is an alternate way to punctuate the following: But I'm going to be so sad to see you go. So why don't we tell your girlfriend and grandpa that visiting hours end early tonight? Then I can come and read you a bedtime story and tuck you in later.
That is the way I would do it, anyway. I was going to say that the grandpa is not the nurse's grandpa, so it would be lower-case. Are you switching from first person to third person point of view very often? Nice post!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi There! Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. We will be switching back and forth between first and third person on some chapters, while other chapters are just first person (Bill and Cathy corresponding). Glad you enjoyed this. We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon. Thank you also for your editing suggestions.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Well Tootie. You Bill through the war injury and now he is back on the battlefield in his hospital room. The dialogue revealed where Bill's flirting came from. I am enjoying the story. Robert

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi Robert! We really appreciate your continued support. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We are so glad you are enjoying the story. As for Bill, he seems to always be dealing with one battle or another! Let's see how he gets out of this one! Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 07-Aug-2019
    Hi Tootie. I have found the story enjoyable and well-written and that is why I continue to follow it.
Comment from Tpa
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. I enjoy every single aspect of the item. I must leave that particular item and feel like I would tell someone about it, think about it or refer to it with confidence later during the day. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and words were chosen.

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi There! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 8 of Love Long Distance. We are glad you enjoyed it. We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 9 is in the works and coming soon!
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy
Comment from M Milles
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Sounds like a cat fight! Had me laughing at parts. Well written. From your bio, looks like you've come a long way. I hope to be there someday. Best wishes!

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
    Hi There! Hey, we had you laughing! That's great! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. So glad you enjoyed it and found it well written. As for the bio, yes, have been fortunate. Believe in yourself and never give up. You can do it, too! We hope you will come back for the next chapter. It is in the works and coming soon.
    God Bless,
    Bill & Cathy