Wilderness Redemption Road
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
I am enjoying your story very much Earl. I know I read one chapter but must have missed one. I will try to be more observant.
Any story of early America always gets my attention. Well done. I like your characters very much . Write on my friend I am with you. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I am enjoying your story very much Earl. I know I read one chapter but must have missed one. I will try to be more observant.
Any story of early America always gets my attention. Well done. I like your characters very much . Write on my friend I am with you. Nancy:)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you Nancy for your kind words. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Wait until you see the character development in the next few chapters. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work
Comment from Rob Caudle
Earl by gum son you dang sure got this here dialogue I loved it your colorful characters the setting the scene all top nocth you slid from one to other seemlesly it was not like I was reading someone elses writing it was like beeing there great job.
Rob
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Earl by gum son you dang sure got this here dialogue I loved it your colorful characters the setting the scene all top nocth you slid from one to other seemlesly it was not like I was reading someone elses writing it was like beeing there great job.
Rob
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks Rob, I appreciate that. Thanks for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
If a story is worth reading the length won't matter to the reviewers on here who are serious about what they read. We learn as much by reviewing as the person being reviewed.This was another excellent part, I'm really enjoying the story. I love Janie, she has a lot of gumption and Mighty Beaver. Well done, my friend, can't wait for the next part. :)) Sandra xx
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If a story is worth reading the length won't matter to the reviewers on here who are serious about what they read. We learn as much by reviewing as the person being reviewed.This was another excellent part, I'm really enjoying the story. I love Janie, she has a lot of gumption and Mighty Beaver. Well done, my friend, can't wait for the next part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your kind words Sandra. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from royowen
An excellent story Earl, great characters and plot, and the right mix of characters, good conversation between the Indians, discussing things, it would probably help giving the ages of the characters, in the character line up. particularly Janie, (I thought she was a child, obviously much older, well done Earl, great job, blessings, Roy
Typo "Excuse me(,) where are my manners." . 2: The horse was putting up enough of a fuss(,) Lonesome deer...3: build respect and get(s) it. "I'm obliged Mighty Beaver(,)...4 I think he is losing it(,) 5 "(Shore,) as long as...sure,? 6: "Miss(,) if you'll wait...
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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An excellent story Earl, great characters and plot, and the right mix of characters, good conversation between the Indians, discussing things, it would probably help giving the ages of the characters, in the character line up. particularly Janie, (I thought she was a child, obviously much older, well done Earl, great job, blessings, Roy
Typo "Excuse me(,) where are my manners." . 2: The horse was putting up enough of a fuss(,) Lonesome deer...3: build respect and get(s) it. "I'm obliged Mighty Beaver(,)...4 I think he is losing it(,) 5 "(Shore,) as long as...sure,? 6: "Miss(,) if you'll wait...
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Roy this was the best I've received for this piece so far. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Well done, Earl, you're welcome
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job, Earl. I like your colorful characters and the rollicking humor of Doolittle... until he got riled and tore into ferret face... It will be interesting to see how you develop the interaction between the dark haired lady and Doo...
Good job.
Melissa
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Great job, Earl. I like your colorful characters and the rollicking humor of Doolittle... until he got riled and tore into ferret face... It will be interesting to see how you develop the interaction between the dark haired lady and Doo...
Good job.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Stay tuned for further developments in that direction. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from aryr
This was an enjoyable chapter to read. I liked the way you switched from the four of them -Doo, Janie, Clancy and Mighty Beaver to the two Indians- Swooping Eagle and Lonesome Owl, then back to the four of them and Smythe and Doo's pa. You made the switch very smoothly and provided lots of information and details. It was great the way you had Mighty Beaver make the poultice for Janie's feet and offered a brief description of the contents and their purpose. Very enjoyable, well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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This was an enjoyable chapter to read. I liked the way you switched from the four of them -Doo, Janie, Clancy and Mighty Beaver to the two Indians- Swooping Eagle and Lonesome Owl, then back to the four of them and Smythe and Doo's pa. You made the switch very smoothly and provided lots of information and details. It was great the way you had Mighty Beaver make the poultice for Janie's feet and offered a brief description of the contents and their purpose. Very enjoyable, well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I'm glad you're enjoying this story and the characters. That's why i do this. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Artasylum
I wish I had six stars left... Your writing is exceptional. I am enjoying your style... Been gone a while and always love discovering those that I haven's had the pleasure to read for the coming year...
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I wish I had six stars left... Your writing is exceptional. I am enjoying your style... Been gone a while and always love discovering those that I haven's had the pleasure to read for the coming year...
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I appreciate the virtual six, it's just as good as a real one knowing you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your kind words.
Comment from lyenochka
Whew. This is long and may be better as two posts. I like the interaction between the people and that you've bookended with the grandmother's storytelling. My favorite part was the use of willow and elderberry poultice.
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Whew. This is long and may be better as two posts. I like the interaction between the people and that you've bookended with the grandmother's storytelling. My favorite part was the use of willow and elderberry poultice.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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I wondered if it was too long but i wanted them to get to Pittsburgh in this chapter. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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It probably looked bigger to me on my phone's screen. Lol. I was improvising while my power was out.