She won't be right, Mate!
The world in turmoil22 total reviews
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very well written poem. It is nicely presented, the flow is good and the words are deep and very profound. I especially like this part (Far too many humans and less productive land
The downward spiral with the earth stressed to its limits)
very succinctly put!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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This is a very well written poem. It is nicely presented, the flow is good and the words are deep and very profound. I especially like this part (Far too many humans and less productive land
The downward spiral with the earth stressed to its limits)
very succinctly put!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thank-you Sarah for your review and kind comments. Cheers and have a good day. Kev
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the state of the earth and the people who are livign on our earth. Most are needy and are unable to do anything to safe themselves, the ones who are able to do anything only do it for themselves.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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A very well-written poem about the state of the earth and the people who are livign on our earth. Most are needy and are unable to do anything to safe themselves, the ones who are able to do anything only do it for themselves.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thank-you Sandra for your review and comments. Have a lovely day, cheers, Kev
Comment from lyenochka
Very good reflection on all the problems on Earth today and the difficulties which the future generations have to face. You make a good case for us to change our behavior.
One suggestion:
I would change "mother of this earth" to either Mother Earth or Mother Nature like you have in your notes. Poetry needs to be tightened and more condensed than prose. But it's always up to you!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Very good reflection on all the problems on Earth today and the difficulties which the future generations have to face. You make a good case for us to change our behavior.
One suggestion:
I would change "mother of this earth" to either Mother Earth or Mother Nature like you have in your notes. Poetry needs to be tightened and more condensed than prose. But it's always up to you!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my work, much obliged and thanks for the suggestion. Cheers kev
Comment from meeshu
This is a very good piece, Kevin. consistent reasoning, good phrasing with great passion. This really is a crummy place to live..........................meeshu
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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This is a very good piece, Kevin. consistent reasoning, good phrasing with great passion. This really is a crummy place to live..........................meeshu
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks Mate, for your review and yes the world we know is under threat and sadly getting worse.
Cheers, Kev
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is VERY well-done. It is more than just a list; it gives details,
and it is poetic. God said we were to take care of our earth. We simply
are not doing this--not in many areas. We shouldn't be surprised when
water comes from the faucet tan and when we see wild animals foraging
for food in our YARDS.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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This is VERY well-done. It is more than just a list; it gives details,
and it is poetic. God said we were to take care of our earth. We simply
are not doing this--not in many areas. We shouldn't be surprised when
water comes from the faucet tan and when we see wild animals foraging
for food in our YARDS.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks Janice for your kind review. We have not learned the lessons from the past. Cheers, Kev
Comment from Earl Corp
I agree with every thing you said. I'm not normally a free verse fan but this poem makes sense and invokes emotions within the reader. This should be a contest entry, or at least a recognized piece. Very good job!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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I agree with every thing you said. I'm not normally a free verse fan but this poem makes sense and invokes emotions within the reader. This should be a contest entry, or at least a recognized piece. Very good job!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thank-you so much Earl, for your kind words and comments.
Cheers, Kev
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a global call and request to save our Mother Nature, avoid misusing natural and other resources and stop causing destruction to our Nature and make this world a better place for living; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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This speaks a global call and request to save our Mother Nature, avoid misusing natural and other resources and stop causing destruction to our Nature and make this world a better place for living; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Keep Inspiring -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks heaps for your review. Words can be powerful and words can be useless, depends who reads or listens.
Cheers, Kev
Comment from royowen
Well, you've got me convinced, now we'll have to convince 1.4 billion others. I once asked an environmentalist, (I've known her since she was a baby) who was holding forth ahout environmental concerns, just how she got to Adelaide, she said "by plane" the biggest air polluters of all, I don't hold much hope, people's hearts need to change, then their ways might. You've made a great job with this passionate poem, an appeal to writers of fanstory, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Well, you've got me convinced, now we'll have to convince 1.4 billion others. I once asked an environmentalist, (I've known her since she was a baby) who was holding forth ahout environmental concerns, just how she got to Adelaide, she said "by plane" the biggest air polluters of all, I don't hold much hope, people's hearts need to change, then their ways might. You've made a great job with this passionate poem, an appeal to writers of fanstory, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thank-you for your review and kind comments.
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Most welcome
Comment from M. R. Kelly
Love the passion and message, could benefit from some more assonance and consonance, close rhymes, alliteration, etc. This is a lovely free verse poem.
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Love the passion and message, could benefit from some more assonance and consonance, close rhymes, alliteration, etc. This is a lovely free verse poem.
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks Mate for your review. could you please explain with your comments what these words mean. I'm just a working farmer who occasionally puts words to paper.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant and powerful write and I agree with your words, man is responsible for looking after the planet, but I am far more worried about man blowing up the planet than anything else, your words are much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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A poignant and powerful write and I agree with your words, man is responsible for looking after the planet, but I am far more worried about man blowing up the planet than anything else, your words are much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much Dolly for your review. Lets hope Trump, doesn't get his hands on the button.
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It?s not Trump I?m worried about! He he he, love Dolly x