Ballad o' da Bang
six 8686 quatrains16 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Without hope, what does one live for, Red? Good job with your poem. There is great flow, great rhymes, and message. It is your message that is loud and clear. You are right. No one really knows what lies above the 'Big Bang.' But without hope, one will never know or find out. Great job. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Without hope, what does one live for, Red? Good job with your poem. There is great flow, great rhymes, and message. It is your message that is loud and clear. You are right. No one really knows what lies above the 'Big Bang.' But without hope, one will never know or find out. Great job. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I would be glad if the creation story was true as I heard it in my childhood, but my small church, and parents, made more sense than caliphs and popes and priests...one could live by their teachings without burning a single heretic...thanks so much for reading and reviewing, and for the six. Love it.
Comment from damommy
As with the blind men and the elephant, we each see life in a different way, and take with us what we have gleaned of it. Good way of saying this in your usual good rhyme and meter.
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As with the blind men and the elephant, we each see life in a different way, and take with us what we have gleaned of it. Good way of saying this in your usual good rhyme and meter.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I let the logic of science lead me away from the simple doctrines of the tiny backwoods church I grew up attending. But humanity needs something with a heart, not the random doom of the Big Bang. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
There is much to say about this poem: deeply reflective on the meaning of (human) life; questions whose answers we will perhaps know hereafter... praise and gratitude to God, the Creator of all good; humility before the Grand Design, and prayer. I loved reading and reviewing it.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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There is much to say about this poem: deeply reflective on the meaning of (human) life; questions whose answers we will perhaps know hereafter... praise and gratitude to God, the Creator of all good; humility before the Grand Design, and prayer. I loved reading and reviewing it.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Many brilliant scientists have stopped talking about things outside of our universe, and before the Big Bang, and whether our galaxies are just quarks in another reality...some of them begin to think of a Great maker...thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I have been doing a lot of reviewing these last two days, and I am already out of six star ratings. That is unfortunate, for this poem deserves one. You cut to the chase. Your following lines say it all:
"There must be more to things than this
the worms and rot of death."
There must be more to things. It's sort of an priori proof of God's existence.
And I love the poignancy of your first line. Sun comes out. Grain grows. There is a cycle. People are born. People die. "There must be more to things than this"
Surely even atheists believe that "There must be more to things than this"
Outstanding poem.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I have been doing a lot of reviewing these last two days, and I am already out of six star ratings. That is unfortunate, for this poem deserves one. You cut to the chase. Your following lines say it all:
"There must be more to things than this
the worms and rot of death."
There must be more to things. It's sort of an priori proof of God's existence.
And I love the poignancy of your first line. Sun comes out. Grain grows. There is a cycle. People are born. People die. "There must be more to things than this"
Surely even atheists believe that "There must be more to things than this"
Outstanding poem.
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I am not concerned with rankings and ratings as much as a reader's enjoyment of my words. I am truly happy that you found this a worthwhile poem. Thank you for taking a look.
Comment from Pantygynt
It is encouraging to see that poetry in traditional forms such as this common metre offering is still alive and kicking violently. I thoroughly enjoyed this especially that last stanza about the elephant. As I remember there were several blind men who all formed different concepts of the elephant dependant on which part of the elephant they came up against. They were all right with their concepts, and they were all wrong because the elephant like all of us is greater than the sum of its parts.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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It is encouraging to see that poetry in traditional forms such as this common metre offering is still alive and kicking violently. I thoroughly enjoyed this especially that last stanza about the elephant. As I remember there were several blind men who all formed different concepts of the elephant dependant on which part of the elephant they came up against. They were all right with their concepts, and they were all wrong because the elephant like all of us is greater than the sum of its parts.
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
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Prating about elephants that none of them have seen...I will not agree that everything is poetry but a few grocery lists or that all is prose which has no meter and rhymes...but then I had Ms. Camp, senior English teacher, tearing her hair...thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the last stanza! Pure genius! A delightful write about the way the world began! I enjoyed your words very much, the rhymes, the flow and the sentiments, love Dolly x
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I adore the last stanza! Pure genius! A delightful write about the way the world began! I enjoyed your words very much, the rhymes, the flow and the sentiments, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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I had an old book and two stories from it stuck in my mind...the six blind men describing the elephant, and the horse that might learn to sing hymns...thanks very much for reading and reviewing, and for that heart-lifting exceptional rating!