Soulmates
For a departed loved one39 total reviews
Comment from Air Spirit
This is an awesome poem.... the picture is phenomenal... it is so perfectly befitting for your poem... how the person who has departed, is as much a part of you, as that perfectly fitting piece to the puzzle -- as it connects, fits in and completes its counterpart.... lovely!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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This is an awesome poem.... the picture is phenomenal... it is so perfectly befitting for your poem... how the person who has departed, is as much a part of you, as that perfectly fitting piece to the puzzle -- as it connects, fits in and completes its counterpart.... lovely!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for an awesome review****kahpot
Comment from Swampfox1
I like the artwork, it goes well with the poem. Wishing you luck in the contest, it is most certainly a deserving entry. I like this part, "knowing your soul is my mate
From me, you shall never leave" Thanks for sharing. Have a blessed day
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I like the artwork, it goes well with the poem. Wishing you luck in the contest, it is most certainly a deserving entry. I like this part, "knowing your soul is my mate
From me, you shall never leave" Thanks for sharing. Have a blessed day
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for your excellent review****kahpot
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you're welcoome
Comment from Hitcher
I will search for you in a thousand worlds, through ten thousand lifetimes : ) From the movie 47 Ronin(great movie). Your Tanka made me remember that classic line.
Well done on your first one, they can become addictive and a lot of fun. The third line(pivot line) is crucial to a good Tanka, it has to work in both the upper and lower part of the poem... yours does ; )
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I will search for you in a thousand worlds, through ten thousand lifetimes : ) From the movie 47 Ronin(great movie). Your Tanka made me remember that classic line.
Well done on your first one, they can become addictive and a lot of fun. The third line(pivot line) is crucial to a good Tanka, it has to work in both the upper and lower part of the poem... yours does ; )
Comment Written 25-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much my Freind you have just answered a question I could not find out, a few of the reviews have mentioned the "Pivot" and said it was right, I obviously got lucky there, I have been trying to find out why, and along you came, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from country ranch writer
SOME LOOK FOREVER TO FIND THEIR SOUL MATE AND SOME ALREADY KNOW FROM WHEN THEY WERE VERY YOUNG WHO THEIRS WILL BE SO NEVER GIVE UP.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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SOME LOOK FOREVER TO FIND THEIR SOUL MATE AND SOME ALREADY KNOW FROM WHEN THEY WERE VERY YOUNG WHO THEIRS WILL BE SO NEVER GIVE UP.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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Comment from TPAC
Bang that drum. Wonderful thought, views captivating to its reader, embedded notes flourishing with desires. I did slip up projected a view ahead: my blessing
I'll say. All in my opinion.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Bang that drum. Wonderful thought, views captivating to its reader, embedded notes flourishing with desires. I did slip up projected a view ahead: my blessing
I'll say. All in my opinion.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for your excellent review****kahpot
Comment from Artasylum
God is always with us and as you say we are never alone... great job and good luck in the contest. perfect syllable count... thanks so much for the read and looking forward... Yours, diana
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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God is always with us and as you say we are never alone... great job and good luck in the contest. perfect syllable count... thanks so much for the read and looking forward... Yours, diana
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry writing prompt.
Your well written verse tells a lovely story.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Tanka Poetry writing prompt.
Your well written verse tells a lovely story.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from phill doran
Hello to you
Yes, you 'have it right'. A very poignant piece and well constructed.
In passing, as you have used a couple of commas, you may wish to consider the balance of the punctuation? Just a thought - it reads well as it stands.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Hello to you
Yes, you 'have it right'. A very poignant piece and well constructed.
In passing, as you have used a couple of commas, you may wish to consider the balance of the punctuation? Just a thought - it reads well as it stands.
I wish you well with your writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much and I shall go and have a look, many thanks for your help****kahpot
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nicely composed tanka poem, kahpot.
You used the correct syllable count and your topic pertains to love, or lost love as the case were.
It looks as if you got it right to me.
Good work for a first try.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Nicely composed tanka poem, kahpot.
You used the correct syllable count and your topic pertains to love, or lost love as the case were.
It looks as if you got it right to me.
Good work for a first try.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much, I did get some reviewer help early****kahpot
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I was thinking this morning how lucky I am to have my husband, so when I read this, I actually cried. Who cares if you got the Tanka right? This is a beautiful poem and you should reach up and pat yourself on the back. What a lovely tribute poem. I can only assume you have a lovely soul. Keep writing. Good luck.
Wendy
(If I could remember the rules of Tanka, I would advise. The poem stands as lovely in my opinion, Tanka rules or not!)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I was thinking this morning how lucky I am to have my husband, so when I read this, I actually cried. Who cares if you got the Tanka right? This is a beautiful poem and you should reach up and pat yourself on the back. What a lovely tribute poem. I can only assume you have a lovely soul. Keep writing. Good luck.
Wendy
(If I could remember the rules of Tanka, I would advise. The poem stands as lovely in my opinion, Tanka rules or not!)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much it is reviews like this one (Yours) that help us try new things****kahpot