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18 total reviews
Comment from damommy
This is true. I can remember what it was like to be a child and not have any say, just having to obey.
You pointed this out in lovely rhyme and meter. I think every new parent should read this.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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This is true. I can remember what it was like to be a child and not have any say, just having to obey.
You pointed this out in lovely rhyme and meter. I think every new parent should read this.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Yvonne, Thank you and maybe many need to read this just to remember we don't own our kids we are a guide only. My kids are all strong but fair minded and respectful adults so hopefully I did something right Cheers Christine
Comment from meeshu
great work Christine. a subject that doesn't get as much discussion as it should.
yours is thoughtful and well expressed. a great poet said it this way:
(as a child) "I was ordered to listen before I could talk." see a typo on last line "you(r)............meeshu
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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great work Christine. a subject that doesn't get as much discussion as it should.
yours is thoughtful and well expressed. a great poet said it this way:
(as a child) "I was ordered to listen before I could talk." see a typo on last line "you(r)............meeshu
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi meeshu, . Thank you great quote and listening is important in all aspects Have fixed typo Cheers Christine
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Chrissy, a good, well written poem with both rhyme and rhythm, 8/6/8/6 syllables maintained throughout. Only the penultimate stanza 'Not to make you mad' 5 syllables - perhaps 'feel mad' or similar would help rhythm. This is not a criticism of a good poem. Last line of poem I think you meant Your where you have You. Very well done and a good read. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Chrissy, a good, well written poem with both rhyme and rhythm, 8/6/8/6 syllables maintained throughout. Only the penultimate stanza 'Not to make you mad' 5 syllables - perhaps 'feel mad' or similar would help rhythm. This is not a criticism of a good poem. Last line of poem I think you meant Your where you have You. Very well done and a good read. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Dorothy, Thanks and have fixed that line so thanks for picking it up. I thought this needed to be written thanks for reading. Cheers Christine
Comment from aryr
Very well done Christine. This is so true, children really want a chance to be heard and in fact be respected for their thoughts-they may be wrong but at least by being heard they can be corrected. Good reading flow and nice rhyme pattern. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Very well done Christine. This is so true, children really want a chance to be heard and in fact be respected for their thoughts-they may be wrong but at least by being heard they can be corrected. Good reading flow and nice rhyme pattern. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Ary, Thanks for always reviewing my work with such nice words and pleased to have your comments Cheers Christine
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You are so welcome Christine. You produce such great writings.
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Ph Ary you are so kind I neede this today, I have had a rough day at work and your comment has cheered me up Christine
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Christine. This may be your best this month. I write a lot about children. Sometimes their ideas are better than ours. They have a fresh and non trite view of life. I will post one soon. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi, Christine. This may be your best this month. I write a lot about children. Sometimes their ideas are better than ours. They have a fresh and non trite view of life. I will post one soon. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Pam, Thank you so much I felt this needed to be aired and I think kids have so much to teach us if we listen to them. Look forward to your post. Cheers Christine
Comment from JanPerry
Thanks for explaining your thoughts on children. I think the poem should suffice on explaining your thoughts.
Last line, "your time is all I seek." typo.
Though simple it's true. We take children for granted as many of us work hard to provide a living for them.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Thanks for explaining your thoughts on children. I think the poem should suffice on explaining your thoughts.
Last line, "your time is all I seek." typo.
Though simple it's true. We take children for granted as many of us work hard to provide a living for them.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Jan, Thank for ypur review and yes we sometimes take them for granted but I like to share with kids and have fun fixed typo Cheers Christine
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is this poem that is full of emotions and imagery. The picture selection for this poem is excellent. The reader enjoyed.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Beautifully written is this poem that is full of emotions and imagery. The picture selection for this poem is excellent. The reader enjoyed.
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Harry, Thank you so much you have been so supportive of my work and this is much appreciated. Cheers Christine
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem It is a Just looking into that child's eyes you see a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem It is a Just looking into that child's eyes you see a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi Cookie Thanks for reading my poem and yes once I saw this image I knew it was the one to go with my words Thanks for picking this up Cheers Christine
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You're very welcome.
Have a nice day
Cookie