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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Peace of Mind"Daily poems for April 2018
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Comment from meeshu
I think this is a very good write, Christine. a good stream of thought and a 60's feel to it. a couple rhymes are a little bit of a reach (respite?). and a typo is in the last line (too). but I don't care about that, it's great to read.........meeshu
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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I think this is a very good write, Christine. a good stream of thought and a 60's feel to it. a couple rhymes are a little bit of a reach (respite?). and a typo is in the last line (too). but I don't care about that, it's great to read.........meeshu
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hi meeshu. Thank you and yes maybe they are LOL however I hope yu forgive me of this and have fixed the to Cheers Christine
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent social commentary, Christine. I don't think mankind will ever stop warring, and by mankind I mean femalians too. In many ways the "gentler" sex is even more war mongering than the men.
Still there's no reason why a person can't keep hoping. Good for you in keeping up with the NaPo. Just a few more to go.
Great job my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Excellent social commentary, Christine. I don't think mankind will ever stop warring, and by mankind I mean femalians too. In many ways the "gentler" sex is even more war mongering than the men.
Still there's no reason why a person can't keep hoping. Good for you in keeping up with the NaPo. Just a few more to go.
Great job my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hi Gloria, Thanks again and I thought a D&M may be the go for a change. getting there and determined to be there with my 30 Cheers Christine
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Chrissie, this is the hymn sung by each generation in their longing for peace. And now you're singing it in, in2018, and it's tragic that we've probably never had so much war. It is very rhymical and precise, your rhyming not jarring, and the picture reminds me of something from the sixties??!! Not sure, just the peace sign, I guess. Thanks for the lovely poem, I enjoyed reading, Ana :)
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hello Chrissie, this is the hymn sung by each generation in their longing for peace. And now you're singing it in, in2018, and it's tragic that we've probably never had so much war. It is very rhymical and precise, your rhyming not jarring, and the picture reminds me of something from the sixties??!! Not sure, just the peace sign, I guess. Thanks for the lovely poem, I enjoyed reading, Ana :)
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hi Ana, Yes I am sure many sing this and write about it perhaps our collective voice will make a difference. I have changed the image as I wasn't sure about it but appreciate your comments Cheers Christine
Comment from Katya
It's nice. My own reaction--and this is just me, don't feel offended-- is that the sing-song quality of the rhyme and meter tends to trivialize the content. That's too bad, because you are saying something important.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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It's nice. My own reaction--and this is just me, don't feel offended-- is that the sing-song quality of the rhyme and meter tends to trivialize the content. That's too bad, because you are saying something important.
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
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Hi Katya, Thank you for your review and no offence taken it is just the meter I use sometimes it was not meant to detract form my words and I do appreciate you review and honesty Cheers Christine