Sands of Time
30 syllable poem15 total reviews
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the 30 syllables contest. All syllables are in check to relay a message about time that never returns once it slips away. A reminder of not to waste time but it is one that we are all guilty of at one point or other. Good job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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This is a good entry for the 30 syllables contest. All syllables are in check to relay a message about time that never returns once it slips away. A reminder of not to waste time but it is one that we are all guilty of at one point or other. Good job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good poem for the 30 Syllables writing prompt.
Your message of the sands of time ebbing away is clear and very true.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good poem for the 30 Syllables writing prompt.
Your message of the sands of time ebbing away is clear and very true.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Wabigoon
I think time is more complex than you let on in your poem. Ozymandias does it better, perhaps. But that poem strikes me as for those who believe time linear. I don't think it is. We experience it that way.
How do you really experience it?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I think time is more complex than you let on in your poem. Ozymandias does it better, perhaps. But that poem strikes me as for those who believe time linear. I don't think it is. We experience it that way.
How do you really experience it?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thanks for reading and the interesting comments zanya
Comment from Sugarray77
I really like your sands of Time verse. The phrase 'ad naseum' lends the impression of wasting ones time as our life moves forward. Modern communication can be a good tool if used prop. You did a great job.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I really like your sands of Time verse. The phrase 'ad naseum' lends the impression of wasting ones time as our life moves forward. Modern communication can be a good tool if used prop. You did a great job.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Great review zanya
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Excellent topic for readers to consider. A thirty syllables poem is not an easy task, but you've done a great job in providing a reader a thought-provoking message. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Excellent topic for readers to consider. A thirty syllables poem is not an easy task, but you've done a great job in providing a reader a thought-provoking message. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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And thanks for those encouraging words zanya