Innocence Defiled
Second Place Winner: 5/7/5 rhymed poem26 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is a very well written three line poem that has a definite impact. The image speaks volumes as does your words, and it's time that something is done to protect our schools from this happening again. A very timely subject that you express well, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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This is a very well written three line poem that has a definite impact. The image speaks volumes as does your words, and it's time that something is done to protect our schools from this happening again. A very timely subject that you express well, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Hi Boogienights!
So pleased you appreciate my verse.
Thank you ever so much!
diane
Comment from trumby
It's such a waste when those people decide to hold a school to ransom by having a massacre there. I'm a big believer in looking after the weak and innocent.
The only reason that those "brave" terrorists etc go after schools is because they're easy targets.
The bastards should try it on a Martial Arts tournament. We'd welcome the challenge.
I give up my seat to elderly people and ladies all the time.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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It's such a waste when those people decide to hold a school to ransom by having a massacre there. I'm a big believer in looking after the weak and innocent.
The only reason that those "brave" terrorists etc go after schools is because they're easy targets.
The bastards should try it on a Martial Arts tournament. We'd welcome the challenge.
I give up my seat to elderly people and ladies all the time.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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Hello trumby!
Honored that my words have resonated an exceptional review from you.
Thank you ever so much!
diane
Comment from doggymad
Wonderful statement made in such few words. It sums up the recent tragedy and all those that went before.
I do hope that the gun laws will be changed very soon.
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Wonderful statement made in such few words. It sums up the recent tragedy and all those that went before.
I do hope that the gun laws will be changed very soon.
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello Freda,
So pleased you appreciate my verse.
Hugs back,
diane
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the '3 Line Poetry' writing prompt.
Your story is well told in so few words and it is nicely rhymed.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the '3 Line Poetry' writing prompt.
Your story is well told in so few words and it is nicely rhymed.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hi Sharon,
These are challenging times...
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello my friend,
This contest entry really packs a punch about the news issues we're hearing about all too often lately. You followed the 5-7-5 syllable requirement well. For me, your descriptive message partnered with that picture bring chills. I wish it weren't our reality, but it is. I hope somebody can find a way to stop the violence.
Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello my friend,
This contest entry really packs a punch about the news issues we're hearing about all too often lately. You followed the 5-7-5 syllable requirement well. For me, your descriptive message partnered with that picture bring chills. I wish it weren't our reality, but it is. I hope somebody can find a way to stop the violence.
Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello Joy!
Challenging and chilling times; that is for certain.
Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
diane
Comment from TPAC
About the size of things, when these aspects of violence explodes taking innocent lives, threatening our children at school. Perhaps, the answer is more guns. See who's left. Good shout, in my opinion.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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About the size of things, when these aspects of violence explodes taking innocent lives, threatening our children at school. Perhaps, the answer is more guns. See who's left. Good shout, in my opinion.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hey TPAC,
I appreciate your words and review!
I have no answers; I just keep writing...
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and thought-provoking poem about how easy our lives can be destroyed by one person who decided to do a horror deed and take away our dreams and hopes in a moment.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt and thought-provoking poem about how easy our lives can be destroyed by one person who decided to do a horror deed and take away our dreams and hopes in a moment.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello Sandra,
Frightening.
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from lyenochka
Great job using such multi-syllabic words in this very short format. And all three lines actually rhyme. Then the message with the picture gives us a very sobering message especially in the light of the recent tragedy in Florida.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Great job using such multi-syllabic words in this very short format. And all three lines actually rhyme. Then the message with the picture gives us a very sobering message especially in the light of the recent tragedy in Florida.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello lynochka,
Sobering, indeed.
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Spitfire
Good use of paradox with 'shared' and 'mixed'. Consonance in last word of each line and then again in the first letter of each line.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Good use of paradox with 'shared' and 'mixed'. Consonance in last word of each line and then again in the first letter of each line.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hi Spitfire,
Glad you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from The kurlman
You have another winner Mrs. KT, words that are pertinent to what America is now all about. Good job. I wish everyone could read your poem. The kurlman
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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You have another winner Mrs. KT, words that are pertinent to what America is now all about. Good job. I wish everyone could read your poem. The kurlman
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your complimentary review! I very much appreciate it!
Best always,
diane
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You are most welcome Mrs. KT. The kurlman
