Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written heartfelt poem about your dream that comes to reality when you realize it is your wife who needs your help and attention as you told the girl in your dream.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thanks Sandra for the lovely review. Funny thing how this all only happened yesterday as well!

Comment from apky

Excellent

Hello sankey,

I didn't know you're also such a multi-talented writer.
I believe your poem is a good entry for the
'Share a Story in a Poem' writing prompt.
You have formulated it well to make a good story.
It#s also well rhymed.
Well done and good luck with this one in the ccontest.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thanks friend. Appreciate the lovely review. I don't normally enter contests but this happened this morning so I felt I should jump in.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Some of us over seventy are having to face aging and all the problems it is bringing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. I wish you and yours, the best of luck.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thanks Bro Charlie, I will be 67 in March so getting close to the seventy, hehe.

reply by c_lucas on 05-Feb-2018

74 and 1/2 Geoff.

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Yep Bro can't forget the "1/2" hehe God Bless you mate.

reply by c_lucas on 06-Feb-2018

You're welcome, Geoff. Charlie

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Share a Story in a Poem' writing prompt.
Well said, a good story. Well rhymed.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Sharon, I appreciate your lovely review. It was a thrill to get this done on the day it actually occurred.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your dreamy artwork selection and your storytelling with rhymes--all the more because the events actually happened. Best wishes in the competition and take good care of each other. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Joan, much appreciate ur lovely review.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Sometimes it's hard to tell what's real and what is the dream. You were having such a great dream, being on a lovely isle, when a girl distracted you. They you heard your wife tapping, a sign that she needed you. That's sweet. Sounds like your wife comes first with you. Excellent rhyme. It's so strange where our dreams take us, but reality can jolt us back. Best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Judi so appreciate the lovely review. Please pray for the review Louise is having on Wednesday (2 days for us) for her support. We have waited for this review for far too long.

reply by judiverse on 04-Feb-2018

You're welcome. All the best to you and Louse. judi

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting dream you had and it turned out your wife needed your help. You used very good wording and very interesting art work. Best wishes in the contest my friend! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Sis so appreciate your lovely review. This only happened this morning. Lord Bless.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Sankey, I understand your dream of escape. It must be so difficult to be a full time carer, Your beloved wife must feel so proud of you bing there 24/7/. I'm sure it's very hard work. It was a lovely poem. All best. Ulla;))

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Ulla you know I don't enter contests much on FS but I felt like it was time. Appreciate your review thanks.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Geoff,you do do good work in looking after Louise, and against great odds, you ate an inspiration to others my friend, I think your deftly written "story in a poem" is a good one. Wriitten in aabb rhymed quatrains, well done Bro. Good luck, Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Bro Roy. You know I don't usually enter contests in here, for a whole lot of reasons just felt like it was time as this only happened this morning our time.

reply by royowen on 04-Feb-2018

Well dine

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Pray for the review of her NDIS on Wednesday, Bro. She has a lot of needs one is approval for Conversion of a vehicle so she can drive it from her wheelchair. A lady at church has already offered to pay for the vehicle but no good getting it without approval of the conversion. Sorry if this is old news.

reply by royowen on 04-Feb-2018

Will do bro

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent free verse form that is light and has a dreamy feel to it. It is fun to write down our dreams in poetry, a wonderful way to remember them. Best wishes in caring for your wife, I care for my husband who is disabled.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks Mermaids I know we have met before. We are having a review for more Government support of my wife's needs on Wednesday. Please pray for us.

reply by mermaids on 04-Feb-2018

Absolutely. Prayers sent. Elaine

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Hi Elaine are you in Australia? Are you familiar with NDIS?