This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Emergency Meeting"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Sandramitchell,
It's a nice piece of General Fiction having smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Matching the theme phraseology - A good quality.
Ann and Mildred Episode is very interesting, and likewise noteworthy is its end - ..."Joe?"
Laudable!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Hello Sandramitchell,
It's a nice piece of General Fiction having smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Matching the theme phraseology - A good quality.
Ann and Mildred Episode is very interesting, and likewise noteworthy is its end - ..."Joe?"
Laudable!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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What a lovely review, RP! Thank you so much for your complimentary words and all those lovely stars, I really appreciate them. Big hugs, :) Sandra xxx
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Sandra, Most Welcome!
~ RP
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Glad to hear your brother-in-law is doing okay. Hopefully, he is not a smoker.
It gives me the collywobbles just thinking about those bimbos from the future.
Collywobbles - sounds like a great word for a poem.
Good old Mildred, what would Veronica do without Mildred?
Maybe you should send Mildred back into the past, she straighten things out in no time.
She'd be a regular Miss Marple, Miss Mildred Marple, that is.
But, it is good to see Veronica back in the past, where the heart of the story lies.
So, apparently Joe is back, as well. Oh, the questions he must have.
The albino in the missionary church, it seems there is more to him than has been told
and with Frances an albino, it seems there will be much more of both of them.
Excellent chapter, my friend
Welcome back
RS
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Hello Sandra,
Glad to hear your brother-in-law is doing okay. Hopefully, he is not a smoker.
It gives me the collywobbles just thinking about those bimbos from the future.
Collywobbles - sounds like a great word for a poem.
Good old Mildred, what would Veronica do without Mildred?
Maybe you should send Mildred back into the past, she straighten things out in no time.
She'd be a regular Miss Marple, Miss Mildred Marple, that is.
But, it is good to see Veronica back in the past, where the heart of the story lies.
So, apparently Joe is back, as well. Oh, the questions he must have.
The albino in the missionary church, it seems there is more to him than has been told
and with Frances an albino, it seems there will be much more of both of them.
Excellent chapter, my friend
Welcome back
RS
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Robert, no. he's not a smoker, but he does enjoy the Spanish red wine! It's much too heavy a drink for me, after just one glass I have a job not falling to sleep!
Collywobbles, I always have them when I'm nervous, lol! Mildred and I are a lot alike. :))
I would love to send Mildred back with Veronica, but then it would sound really made-up, and, of course, you know this is a true story!!! But, she will still make appearances as and when Veronica is sent back to her own time to get more info.
Joe is going to have lots of questions, but he'll have to be careful, we can't have his wife thinking he's lost the plot!
Thank you so very much, my friend, for this lovely review. and for the lovely shiny stars! Big hugs! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter, Sandra.
-You give us a lot to think about,
starting with the committee; it is
interesting to see their varied views.
-Then, in the beginning you already
give us a good twist about Ver. being
told about the albino missionary; that
definitely peaks our curiosity.
-The scene with Ann is very good;
I like the involvement of Mildred, as well.
-I really like this line: "Ann's eyes widened like a dustbin with its lid off."
-Then, it's back to research, again with
Mildred helping.
-The ending gives us another twist;
Ver. ends us snuggling with Joe because
she had just time traveled; it is
good to see that part of the story returning.
-The way it happened was priceless!
-One small thing in your author notes, due
to the FS special editing. This happens to me
sometimes, too!
I really apprehttp://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?jmp=1&id=870350ciate your support.
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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-This is a very good chapter, Sandra.
-You give us a lot to think about,
starting with the committee; it is
interesting to see their varied views.
-Then, in the beginning you already
give us a good twist about Ver. being
told about the albino missionary; that
definitely peaks our curiosity.
-The scene with Ann is very good;
I like the involvement of Mildred, as well.
-I really like this line: "Ann's eyes widened like a dustbin with its lid off."
-Then, it's back to research, again with
Mildred helping.
-The ending gives us another twist;
Ver. ends us snuggling with Joe because
she had just time traveled; it is
good to see that part of the story returning.
-The way it happened was priceless!
-One small thing in your author notes, due
to the FS special editing. This happens to me
sometimes, too!
I really apprehttp://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?jmp=1&id=870350ciate your support.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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That has happened to me lots of times, Pam, I don't know why FSs editing changes the words into loads of symbols.
I love all those glittery extra stars!!!! Bless your heart.
knew you would be pleased we were going back into the past again, the earlier parts were necessary for all the research Veronica and Mildred had to do. Now armed with all her information, she's ready to go. But.... :))
Thank you for another of your wonderful reviews. I do enjoy yours, because you always say something that I can use, even when you don't realise it, lol. I'm delighted you liked the ending, now Veronica has some real work to do!
Biggest hugs, my wonderful friend. xxxx Sandra xxxx
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I don't know why FS editor does that either! You are very welcome for the special stars and review, Sandra. It was nice getting back to the past, but Ver. had a very interesting way of getting there:) Thanks, also, for telling me I say certain things you can use. That means a lot. I guess Ver. has a lot to do, like getting Joe back, and her precious Michael back to himself, too. Have a great day, my friend.
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You have a nice day too, my friend. I'm just sorting out Veronica and Joe now. :)) xxxx
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Thanks, Sandra. Sounds like quite a project!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, first of all I want to say that I'm so pleased that your brother-in-law is doing ok.
This is a wonderful new chapter to the book. The Powers want for Joe to go back to his own time, but now Veronica is brought right back as well. Wow. I wonder what is to happen next. This is a great Chapter. I'm leaving for France on Tuesday morning. Hugs. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Hi Sandra, first of all I want to say that I'm so pleased that your brother-in-law is doing ok.
This is a wonderful new chapter to the book. The Powers want for Joe to go back to his own time, but now Veronica is brought right back as well. Wow. I wonder what is to happen next. This is a great Chapter. I'm leaving for France on Tuesday morning. Hugs. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Aww, bless your lovely heart, Ulla, thank you so very much for the 6 stars and the lovely review. I was just talking to Alexis, she's really looking forward to your visit. We can see each other on Skype if you both have a moment to spare in your chatting!!! LOL. How long are you staying with her? Thanks again. my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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Hi Sandra, I'm sure there will be time for us all to chat on skype. It would be lovely to speaking with you. I reckon I stay up to a week if Alexis will put up with me for that long. I love your story as you well know. xxx
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She's so looking forward to you staying, I think you'll have a riotous week! It will be nice to chat to both of you at the same time. :) xxxxx
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So it will!! xxxxx
Comment from rwilliam
WHOA! What an ending to this chapter! LOVED it!
I so enjoy the way you take me from one place and jerk me into another. So delicious! :-)
Wonderful chapter.
My only comment would be the 'beings' that are watching over this whole situation. I don't 'see' them. I wonder if you could make them more real/ clear. What exactly are they. Where are they? What do they look like? It's been vague from the start ( for me) so I just thought I'd mention it. I'm sorry if you did and I just missed it. :-)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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WHOA! What an ending to this chapter! LOVED it!
I so enjoy the way you take me from one place and jerk me into another. So delicious! :-)
Wonderful chapter.
My only comment would be the 'beings' that are watching over this whole situation. I don't 'see' them. I wonder if you could make them more real/ clear. What exactly are they. Where are they? What do they look like? It's been vague from the start ( for me) so I just thought I'd mention it. I'm sorry if you did and I just missed it. :-)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, Rebecca, for another of your lovely reviews and for the shiny 6 stars!!!
I'm also extremely pleased that you brought the 'powers that be' to my attention, I haven't given them much of an intro, and that will be sorted straight away. I'll have to go back and do some editing in the previous chapters, but I can add a bit now and continue in their future appearances. This is one of the nicest things about Fanstory, you do get some incredible input from very helpful reviewers. Yours is one of them. Thank you!! :) Sandra xxxx
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Oh I'm happy to help. I should have said something sooner but I wasn't sure if that was intentional or not. Happy to help. I Loe the help this sight gives too! I'm truly enjoying your story and I get excited when I see your name in my mailbox. :-D
Comment from pbomar1115
There is no rest for Veronica. Striving to get Joe back to his on time and not having control over time travel can be irritating. I know it would be for me. Having no control over my coming and going back and forth in time would probably trouble me to the point of not doing a good job in finding Joe. But she solves her little girl's problem while keeping a cool head about her unstable existence.
Philip
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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There is no rest for Veronica. Striving to get Joe back to his on time and not having control over time travel can be irritating. I know it would be for me. Having no control over my coming and going back and forth in time would probably trouble me to the point of not doing a good job in finding Joe. But she solves her little girl's problem while keeping a cool head about her unstable existence.
Philip
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Veronica certainly has her fair share of drama, lol. Thank you so much, Phillip, for another of your lovely reviews. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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You're welcome, Sandra.
Phillip
Comment from apky
This is excellent and still moves at a fast pace, Sandra.
I enjoyed it and found it entertaining. No spags that I could detect. The plot continued to race and is sprinkled with a variety of intriguing situations.
The pace of the story - which is what impresses me most in it - is still great. And that air of mystery remains intact too. I find myself eager to find out what will happen next, if not what is happening anyway.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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This is excellent and still moves at a fast pace, Sandra.
I enjoyed it and found it entertaining. No spags that I could detect. The plot continued to race and is sprinkled with a variety of intriguing situations.
The pace of the story - which is what impresses me most in it - is still great. And that air of mystery remains intact too. I find myself eager to find out what will happen next, if not what is happening anyway.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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What a lovely review, Apky, thank you so very much. I really appreciate your lovely comments and am delighted you enjoy my story. :) Sandra xxxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I was wondering what had happened to you. Glad to hear he is okay!
Well, the powers that be really messed up that time. Kraid, Leif, Jowell and Petro were cleaver additions to the story.
Hope I didn't leave anyone out! LOL
They sent Joe back, but Veronica was caught up in the tranport as well. At least he is back where he belongs and Michael is free of him. That's a good thing. Maybe it is a good thing they are in the past together. She can be of more help there than at home. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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I was wondering what had happened to you. Glad to hear he is okay!
Well, the powers that be really messed up that time. Kraid, Leif, Jowell and Petro were cleaver additions to the story.
Hope I didn't leave anyone out! LOL
They sent Joe back, but Veronica was caught up in the tranport as well. At least he is back where he belongs and Michael is free of him. That's a good thing. Maybe it is a good thing they are in the past together. She can be of more help there than at home. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Thanks,, Nancy. Yes, he is getting better all the time, but he must learn to listen to what his doctor tells him though.
Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars and the wonderful review, my dear friend. Veronica will be a great help to Joe and Daveth. Things will start to happen now!!! Big hugs. my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from estory
It was a bit difficult to walk in on this in mid sequence, and I had some trouble making sense of the first part, when these time travelers are talking about the events happening in the real world, from their own perspective. The story seemed to take off in the dialogue between mother and child, and we get a good sense of the emotions going on there, the anxieties of the child, and the mother trying to allay them. then there is a nice suspenseful shocker at the end that hooks us for the next installment, so nice suspense writing there. Overall, interesting. estory
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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It was a bit difficult to walk in on this in mid sequence, and I had some trouble making sense of the first part, when these time travelers are talking about the events happening in the real world, from their own perspective. The story seemed to take off in the dialogue between mother and child, and we get a good sense of the emotions going on there, the anxieties of the child, and the mother trying to allay them. then there is a nice suspenseful shocker at the end that hooks us for the next installment, so nice suspense writing there. Overall, interesting. estory
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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Yes, it would be hard, this story is the second book in a trilogy, so it would be difficult. I'll PM you a short synopsis in the hope that it will help make the story more understandable. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it, I do appreciate that. :) Sandra xxxx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'm relieved to hear your Brother-in-law's recovering from his heart-attack.
I've had some strange happenings since mine.
This is such an intriguing story, Sandra.
I love the twist at the end - what a surprise - never a dull moment in your story.
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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I'm relieved to hear your Brother-in-law's recovering from his heart-attack.
I've had some strange happenings since mine.
This is such an intriguing story, Sandra.
I love the twist at the end - what a surprise - never a dull moment in your story.
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017
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I'm hoping he will do what the doctors tell him this time. You can't mess about with your heart. What has been happening with yours? From what you say, it's not good. I do hope you continue to improve, Margaret, you have too many books still to write.
Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend. I'm delighted you are still enjoying it. :) Sandra. xxx
