Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (rolling green hills)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
25 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Marival,
I can't upgrade this month but will be back soon. I miss not being able to get member cents, etc. I hope I didn't lose all my earned member dollars, but I have a feeling I did. :( I had like 60 of them because I was going to submit another Flower up. I have so many written. ;p
Hey, good haiku! Love the satori -- really sums it up nicely. Nice profile pic!
Have a great week.
Nome
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Marival,
I can't upgrade this month but will be back soon. I miss not being able to get member cents, etc. I hope I didn't lose all my earned member dollars, but I have a feeling I did. :( I had like 60 of them because I was going to submit another Flower up. I have so many written. ;p
Hey, good haiku! Love the satori -- really sums it up nicely. Nice profile pic!
Have a great week.
Nome
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-Oh, how I remember playing Frisbee in that old park of Sacramento.
-Your haiku is full of visual imagery that is so distinctively expressive and vividly descriptive by describing the green rolling hills and then making the inference in your satroi of where life has its ups and downs in relation to the rolling hills going up and down. A perfect assimilation of the two.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-Oh, how I remember playing Frisbee in that old park of Sacramento.
-Your haiku is full of visual imagery that is so distinctively expressive and vividly descriptive by describing the green rolling hills and then making the inference in your satroi of where life has its ups and downs in relation to the rolling hills going up and down. A perfect assimilation of the two.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You're very welcome.
Alex
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Welcome, Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written again and indeed very original I liked the closing line Leif's ups and down we all have these from time to time well done again regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Yes my friend this is well written again and indeed very original I liked the closing line Leif's ups and down we all have these from time to time well done again regards Jill
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ric Myworld
A day at any park with rolling green hills is a delight. A place for the pets and the children to run in play, makes an old dude a little jealous, but none the less it puts a smile on my face as I sit and watch. Thanks for sharing. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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A day at any park with rolling green hills is a delight. A place for the pets and the children to run in play, makes an old dude a little jealous, but none the less it puts a smile on my face as I sit and watch. Thanks for sharing. :-)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I don't know what the park looks like but with your interconnecting imagery of rolling hills I can put it with the satori of life's ups and downs. Very nice
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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I don't know what the park looks like but with your interconnecting imagery of rolling hills I can put it with the satori of life's ups and downs. Very nice
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from DR DIP
I love the punchline poetry of the haiku sometimes its obvious other times you have to think about the cryptic line. Old Sacramento park I assume is very hilly.
Well done Gypsy do you ever tire of writing Haiku? you do so well but I do like you early other stuff before it immersed you. then again I am guilty of writing rhyming verse so I know what addiction's like lol
dip
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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I love the punchline poetry of the haiku sometimes its obvious other times you have to think about the cryptic line. Old Sacramento park I assume is very hilly.
Well done Gypsy do you ever tire of writing Haiku? you do so well but I do like you early other stuff before it immersed you. then again I am guilty of writing rhyming verse so I know what addiction's like lol
dip
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. At this time I will continue writing haiku. Rhyme poetry is not my thing.
gypsy
Comment from royowen
Another beautifully written haiku, obviously old Sacramento Park is a hilly locality, so it's lost a little on me Gypsy. But the ambiguity hasn't, so well done, a very good satori, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Another beautifully written haiku, obviously old Sacramento Park is a hilly locality, so it's lost a little on me Gypsy. But the ambiguity hasn't, so well done, a very good satori, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. Thank you, Roy.
gypsy
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Most welcome Gypsy,
Comment from Hitcher
Nice! Being originally from England I can very much appreciate your rolling hills visual, we got loads of them over there : ) Life of course has many ups and downs, the trick is to enjoy the ups as much as possible because we all know what goes up must at some point come down : ) always a pleasure Gypsy !
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Nice! Being originally from England I can very much appreciate your rolling hills visual, we got loads of them over there : ) Life of course has many ups and downs, the trick is to enjoy the ups as much as possible because we all know what goes up must at some point come down : ) always a pleasure Gypsy !
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. Thank you, Hitch. :)
gypsy hugs
Comment from Sis Cat
A fine Haiku, Gypsy. I love that it is specific to a place. Are you talking about Old Town Sacramento on the River bear the Railroad Museum? I know the rolling green hills and can imagine them since I live among them in Hercules on San Pablo Bay. Life's ups and downs refers not only to the hills but to life in general. I imagine homeless at this old park.
Thank you for sharing your fine Haiku.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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A fine Haiku, Gypsy. I love that it is specific to a place. Are you talking about Old Town Sacramento on the River bear the Railroad Museum? I know the rolling green hills and can imagine them since I live among them in Hercules on San Pablo Bay. Life's ups and downs refers not only to the hills but to life in general. I imagine homeless at this old park.
Thank you for sharing your fine Haiku.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. Thank you, Andre.
gypsy hugs
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a nice poem. I always look forward to reading them.
You are always wonderful at writing them.
Kat
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a nice poem. I always look forward to reading them.
You are always wonderful at writing them.
Kat
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
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Hi Gypsy, It was very nice to read your wonderful poem. Kat
