This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Disappointment for Veronica"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from frerejoe
There was so much to treasure in this chapter -- the bright scenes of the churchyard and the family enjoying themselves in the evening, the dialogue that felt real and lifelike, the mystery at the heart of the story and the attempts to unravel it leading only further into riddles and questions. The characters were likable and make me want to follow along to see what might happen next.
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There was so much to treasure in this chapter -- the bright scenes of the churchyard and the family enjoying themselves in the evening, the dialogue that felt real and lifelike, the mystery at the heart of the story and the attempts to unravel it leading only further into riddles and questions. The characters were likable and make me want to follow along to see what might happen next.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments on this part. I really appreciate them. I'm so pleased you liked it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So my so a clue came through her son. They died in a fire. How horrible, but how wonderful for Veronica to be given a clue. Love the story.
James looked down at his drowsy son, and smiled tenderly (You can omit the comma)
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So my so a clue came through her son. They died in a fire. How horrible, but how wonderful for Veronica to be given a clue. Love the story.
James looked down at his drowsy son, and smiled tenderly (You can omit the comma)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Barbara, yes, now to find out how Michael knew! Thanks for finding that comma, goodness knows where that came from! LOL. It's gone now, thanks for that, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Aught oh, looks like both children have powers
and Michael seems to like a little nip now and then,
now which ancestor would that be.
So maybe those butterflies are the famous whispering ones
butterflies that tell secrets (maybe Lady Anne and Peter or Lady Gwendolyne,
maybe the grandparents or the Powers. Too many maybe butterflies in the ointment)
Another surprise ending, though fires were quite common in the old days,
but how did it start? That may be the question.
And where is Joe? He's either down at the pub or out flapping his wings.
Excellent writing.
RS
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Aught oh, looks like both children have powers
and Michael seems to like a little nip now and then,
now which ancestor would that be.
So maybe those butterflies are the famous whispering ones
butterflies that tell secrets (maybe Lady Anne and Peter or Lady Gwendolyne,
maybe the grandparents or the Powers. Too many maybe butterflies in the ointment)
Another surprise ending, though fires were quite common in the old days,
but how did it start? That may be the question.
And where is Joe? He's either down at the pub or out flapping his wings.
Excellent writing.
RS
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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LOL, it will all start to become clear in the next part, Robert, well, a little clearer at least! It's amazing how many relate to the butterflies, I Googled it, and it's a common notion that they do carry the spirit of a loved one and if they land on you, it's to tell you they are watching over you. But, why would they land on Michael? Hmm. Thank you for another wonderful, fun review, my dear friend, and for all the shiny stars! Big hugs! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely image.
-A very intriguing chapter, Sandra.
-Interesting attraction of the blue
butterflies to Michael.
-I like the family time you are
including for Ver., James, and the children.
-I guess Michael stirred things up a bit
by taking a "huge swig" of James's drink.
-Fortunately the warm milk seemed to calm
him down and he was ready for bed.
-You are leaving us with very good endings-
there is info. about the deaths of Daveth's grandparents,
and then Michael speaking in an unrecognizable
voice,giving info. about the grandparents.
-That was quite a twist!
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-Lovely image.
-A very intriguing chapter, Sandra.
-Interesting attraction of the blue
butterflies to Michael.
-I like the family time you are
including for Ver., James, and the children.
-I guess Michael stirred things up a bit
by taking a "huge swig" of James's drink.
-Fortunately the warm milk seemed to calm
him down and he was ready for bed.
-You are leaving us with very good endings-
there is info. about the deaths of Daveth's grandparents,
and then Michael speaking in an unrecognizable
voice,giving info. about the grandparents.
-That was quite a twist!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I remembered my son taking his dad's wine at my brother's wedding we when he was just two years old. LOL. Thank you so much, my friend, for this lovely review, and all those stars. I hope you will enjoy the next part, coming soon. Much love, and a big hug as always. :) Sandra xxx
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You are welcome for the review and all the stars, Sandra. I am sure I will enjoy the next chapter; you are full of surprises🙂
Comment from aryr
This was another great chapter Sandra. The two ladies definitely did an in depth search of the cemetery. I really enjoy the butterfly touch, it was a very positive reflection of the connection with the past. It was also a fitting finish that Michael not only gulped down some alcohol but then woke briefly from a state of slumber to comment on Daveth's grandparents death and the affect was great. Very well done, very enjoyable, thanks.
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This was another great chapter Sandra. The two ladies definitely did an in depth search of the cemetery. I really enjoy the butterfly touch, it was a very positive reflection of the connection with the past. It was also a fitting finish that Michael not only gulped down some alcohol but then woke briefly from a state of slumber to comment on Daveth's grandparents death and the affect was great. Very well done, very enjoyable, thanks.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
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Thank you so very much for another of your lovely reviews, Alie, I'm glad you liked the butterflies and Michael's antics. ugs next part brings a huge problem for Veronica! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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You are most welcome Sandra.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another of your outstanding chapters that keep me so entertained. I've always been a sucker for time travels. And of course, I must admit that, I would have been worse than a scallywag had I been blessed with those abilities. At least in my younger years. Great job. :-)
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Thanks for sharing another of your outstanding chapters that keep me so entertained. I've always been a sucker for time travels. And of course, I must admit that, I would have been worse than a scallywag had I been blessed with those abilities. At least in my younger years. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
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I can quite believe you'd be more than a 'scallywag' Ric, LOL! I would too if I had the powers. Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
You really know how to build up the elements of mystery, stringing out clues, then deftly discounting them (I'm sure until later), then you end with the mystery of Michael's words. Brilliant work!
"Well, that was a waste of time." I grumbled as we left the church [I'm just curious if you intended "I grumbled" as a speech tag. If so, you need a comma, not a period after "time." Personally, if it is not a speech tag, I get an odd sensation "I" grumbled because of the time it took for your eyes to adjust to the brilliant sunshine outside.]
"The one on the gravestone was the same shade of blue. Aren't they lovely?" [Excellent foreshadowing, I think. All based on whether there is a supernatural connection there.]
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You really know how to build up the elements of mystery, stringing out clues, then deftly discounting them (I'm sure until later), then you end with the mystery of Michael's words. Brilliant work!
"Well, that was a waste of time." I grumbled as we left the church [I'm just curious if you intended "I grumbled" as a speech tag. If so, you need a comma, not a period after "time." Personally, if it is not a speech tag, I get an odd sensation "I" grumbled because of the time it took for your eyes to adjust to the brilliant sunshine outside.]
"The one on the gravestone was the same shade of blue. Aren't they lovely?" [Excellent foreshadowing, I think. All based on whether there is a supernatural connection there.]
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
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Hi Jay, Thank you so much for your lovely review and spotting that full stop/period, it should have been a comma. I've put it right now! :)) Yes, things are definitely happening in Veronica's 'other' world. She won't be too happy with them, either! I'm really pleased you are spotting the little clues I keep dropping, lol, I love doing that! Big hugs, my friend!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Someone or something possessed Michael to tell you "It were the fire" Another clue from a very unexpected place. The butterfly's were trying to tell you something as well I believe. Were they an omen or what? The plot deepens. Well done Sandra dear. Nancy
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Someone or something possessed Michael to tell you "It were the fire" Another clue from a very unexpected place. The butterfly's were trying to tell you something as well I believe. Were they an omen or what? The plot deepens. Well done Sandra dear. Nancy
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Nancy, for another wonderful review. It's another clue to something else, I would tell you, but I know you want to wait for the next part! LOL. Hope to get it out on Sunday evening. Big hugs, my dear friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Another impressive chapter, Sandra -
Michael is a lovely character. I've an open mind when it comes to a butterfly landing on a person - I've always felt it was a sign from someone we've loved and lost - I don't know where I got that idea from - but somehow I find it a great comfort, so will go on believing it.
Looking forward to the next part, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Another impressive chapter, Sandra -
Michael is a lovely character. I've an open mind when it comes to a butterfly landing on a person - I've always felt it was a sign from someone we've loved and lost - I don't know where I got that idea from - but somehow I find it a great comfort, so will go on believing it.
Looking forward to the next part, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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It is an old belief, Margaret, and one I like to believe in. Veronica will realise this soon. So, you carry on, I find it comforting too. Thank you so much for your lovely review, my friend, I really appreciate it from you. :) Sandra xxxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Oh my goodness, every time you do something like that with the kids, I keep waiting for their little heads to spin and them to chant REDRUM!
Sounds like Daveth making an appearance, possibly?
I know, I know... I have to wait for the next chapter!
Great post today, Sandra. :-)
One correction:
1st paragraph: came out OF the church
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Oh my goodness, every time you do something like that with the kids, I keep waiting for their little heads to spin and them to chant REDRUM!
Sounds like Daveth making an appearance, possibly?
I know, I know... I have to wait for the next chapter!
Great post today, Sandra. :-)
One correction:
1st paragraph: came out OF the church
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Thanks for spotting my error, I've put it right now. :)) Thank you so much for another lovely review, dear Sue. I'm really glad you liked this one!! Possibly, but possibly not! LOL Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx