Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "haiku (silver waves)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
26 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
A little gem friend, the visuals conjured up in the mind's eye are too cool for school, they come alive and surf their way to shore. Just checked, I do have a six left. it's yours : )
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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A little gem friend, the visuals conjured up in the mind's eye are too cool for school, they come alive and surf their way to shore. Just checked, I do have a six left. it's yours : )
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. Thank you for the six stars!
gypsy hugs
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
the satori does indeed make a great finish line to the imagery. I have seen the reflection shimmering across the waves and this is just that.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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the satori does indeed make a great finish line to the imagery. I have seen the reflection shimmering across the waves and this is just that.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend the imagery in this haiku is beautiful it closes so well sun surfing love that closing well done my friend very original and enjoyable ............. regards Jill
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Oh yes my friend the imagery in this haiku is beautiful it closes so well sun surfing love that closing well done my friend very original and enjoyable ............. regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Jill, you are very kind and I appreciate your review and excellent rating.
gypsy
Comment from krys123
Howdy, Gypsy;
-this is a perfect visual anatomy of the sun shining on the tips of the waves of a river. You have captured the essence of how the sun shines directly on the tips of a wave that rolls along the river in Sacramento.
-Two very grammatically connected lines with an imagery that is and definitively expressive and demonstratively descriptive.
-A wonderful satori that gives an aha moment and a specific spontaneity of excitement which is relative to the conceptual theme.
-I truly enjoyed this one. I have not read and haiku that was that definitively expressive in a long time because I live in Sacramento and I remember witnessing those silver tips on the river of the South American fork.
-Take care and have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Howdy, Gypsy;
-this is a perfect visual anatomy of the sun shining on the tips of the waves of a river. You have captured the essence of how the sun shines directly on the tips of a wave that rolls along the river in Sacramento.
-Two very grammatically connected lines with an imagery that is and definitively expressive and demonstratively descriptive.
-A wonderful satori that gives an aha moment and a specific spontaneity of excitement which is relative to the conceptual theme.
-I truly enjoyed this one. I have not read and haiku that was that definitively expressive in a long time because I live in Sacramento and I remember witnessing those silver tips on the river of the South American fork.
-Take care and have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Alex, you are very kind and I appreciate your review and excellent rating.
gypsy
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You are very welcome, Gypsy, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Gypsy,
This one felt like heat waves flowing over a river and then the sun surfing image left me feeling like there is this golden boy riding the waves ... A strange one for me. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hello Gypsy,
This one felt like heat waves flowing over a river and then the sun surfing image left me feeling like there is this golden boy riding the waves ... A strange one for me. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Kiwi, you are very kind :)
gypsy
Comment from BOO ghost
Haiku Club Challenges, Book II. Lets explore and give this a peep. 24-Boo Ghost. Hey, that is me, i promise next work wil be a haiku with some prose. Forget what fancy acronym you give it. Now, lets look. Nice blend of S letter alliterations. Nice word choices, I like. Good imagination and flow. presentation looks grand. this is unusual for sun theme. BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II. Lets explore and give this a peep. 24-Boo Ghost. Hey, that is me, i promise next work wil be a haiku with some prose. Forget what fancy acronym you give it. Now, lets look. Nice blend of S letter alliterations. Nice word choices, I like. Good imagination and flow. presentation looks grand. this is unusual for sun theme. BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Boo, you are very kind and I appreciate your review and excellent rating.
gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Ah, Gypsy, this is a beautiful Haiku. I love how you made it specific to Sacramento rather than describe a generic river which could be anywhere. Poem remind me of classic Haiku poets who wrote about specific mountains and rivers. You have an effective use of S alliteration and consonance. I also love your imagery of silver waves on the Sacramento representing the sun surfing. Dip would love this Haiku!
Thank you for sharing your talent again.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Ah, Gypsy, this is a beautiful Haiku. I love how you made it specific to Sacramento rather than describe a generic river which could be anywhere. Poem remind me of classic Haiku poets who wrote about specific mountains and rivers. You have an effective use of S alliteration and consonance. I also love your imagery of silver waves on the Sacramento representing the sun surfing. Dip would love this Haiku!
Thank you for sharing your talent again.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Andre, you are very kind and I appreciate your review and excellent rating.
gypsy
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy Blue Rose,
I always like to read your poetry as you are so wonderful at writing them. Thank you for sharing this one. I enjoyed reading it very much and will be looking forward to reading more of your work.
Kat
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hi Gypsy Blue Rose,
I always like to read your poetry as you are so wonderful at writing them. Thank you for sharing this one. I enjoyed reading it very much and will be looking forward to reading more of your work.
Kat
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
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I'll try to have a nice day. It's been raining a lot in this part of Minnesota.
Kat
Comment from Ric Myworld
Oh, the sun adds a sparkle to brighten up every day, and I bet it was a beautiful sight glistening on the Sacramento, sun surfing. It's sure creates a picture for an old hang-ten or wave-hugging cat who used to roam Huntington and Newport beaches to catch a breaker. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Oh, the sun adds a sparkle to brighten up every day, and I bet it was a beautiful sight glistening on the Sacramento, sun surfing. It's sure creates a picture for an old hang-ten or wave-hugging cat who used to roam Huntington and Newport beaches to catch a breaker. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
Comment from Thal1959
Very nicely done, Gypsy. The silvery light on the ripples in a river often look like they are riding, or surfing, on the top of the waters. The Satori is simple yet quite effective and true.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Very nicely done, Gypsy. The silvery light on the ripples in a river often look like they are riding, or surfing, on the top of the waters. The Satori is simple yet quite effective and true.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
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You're welcome, Gypsy.
