Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku (on my knees I pray)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
24 total reviews
Comment from Grasshopper2
GBR,
I like the image of praying bathed in the light of the harvest moon. Your choice of words is precise and flow nicely. Fanstory software glitches in some of the names of club members. You'd think they would fix these issues.
Michael
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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GBR,
I like the image of praying bathed in the light of the harvest moon. Your choice of words is precise and flow nicely. Fanstory software glitches in some of the names of club members. You'd think they would fix these issues.
Michael
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review and kind words, my friend. I edited the FSG six times and they kept coming back so I gave up. I think part of the problem is that I was not using Microsoft Word but I just bought it so hopefully it won't happen in the future.
gypsy hugs
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's been said in the Bible that we reap what we sow.
We are never more humble in life than when we are down on our knees in prayer.
It has also been said that life is a lot like an echo. What you send out will eventually come back to you.
Your 5/7/3 syllable count is well within the required seventeen syllables or less required by haiku.
Your haiku is a moment in time that pertains to nature and written in present tense.
The kigo, harvest moon, harkens back to what I stated earlier...
We reap what we sow...
Beautifully rendered haiku, dearest Gypsy.
Bravo...
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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It's been said in the Bible that we reap what we sow.
We are never more humble in life than when we are down on our knees in prayer.
It has also been said that life is a lot like an echo. What you send out will eventually come back to you.
Your 5/7/3 syllable count is well within the required seventeen syllables or less required by haiku.
Your haiku is a moment in time that pertains to nature and written in present tense.
The kigo, harvest moon, harkens back to what I stated earlier...
We reap what we sow...
Beautifully rendered haiku, dearest Gypsy.
Bravo...
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review and six stars, my dearest friend.
gypsy hugs
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Horror hugs right back at yer Gypsy hugs, Gypsy.
Did that even make the least bit of sense?
You're very welcome.~Dean
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yup, it made perfect sense, thank you, sweetie pie :)
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah, very good satori Gypsy. It took me a second to get it, but when I did. We do indeed reap what we sow, at least in the fields.
Great job sweetie.
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Ah, very good satori Gypsy. It took me a second to get it, but when I did. We do indeed reap what we sow, at least in the fields.
Great job sweetie.
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review and kind words, my friend.
gypsy hugs
Comment from BOO ghost
Astounding looking presentation. Nice word combination. Harvest moon clinches it. Can see the rosary beads. Kind of spiritual in nature. Prayer is the challenge. Good luck in the challenge! Looks like a contender. BOO-tastic!
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Astounding looking presentation. Nice word combination. Harvest moon clinches it. Can see the rosary beads. Kind of spiritual in nature. Prayer is the challenge. Good luck in the challenge! Looks like a contender. BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
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Is a pleasure, gypsy queen. BOO!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles Gypsy,
I like that serene feeling you gave me with your haiku by being on knees with the harvest moon shining upon the praying lady in your picture
Very nice
Gert
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Smiles Gypsy,
I like that serene feeling you gave me with your haiku by being on knees with the harvest moon shining upon the praying lady in your picture
Very nice
Gert
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your spiritual haiku and your capturing the mood and the scene. Your picture selection and colored text reinforce the sensibility. Hugs- Joan
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I admired your spiritual haiku and your capturing the mood and the scene. Your picture selection and colored text reinforce the sensibility. Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
An excellent haiku Gypsy, as an ekphrastic short form poem,
it works so well with the narrative,
reflective, resonant and so perfect,
with the satori line so good.
Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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An excellent haiku Gypsy, as an ekphrastic short form poem,
it works so well with the narrative,
reflective, resonant and so perfect,
with the satori line so good.
Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Most welcome
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing your haiku about prayer. I liked the image created by the words and it was complimented by your presentation. This was a great use of the limited syllable count,
~patty~
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Hi Gypsy; thank you for sharing your haiku about prayer. I liked the image created by the words and it was complimented by your presentation. This was a great use of the limited syllable count,
~patty~
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Thank you, my friend :)
gypsy
Comment from RodG
I like the simplicity of this haiku, Gypsy, in that:
(1) you suggest the setting is somewhere OUTSIDE where the speaker prays, not the conventional chapel. In other words, the Speaker finds God in His natural world.
(2) In addition to "harvest," the "amber" light suggests the season--autumn, as well as the time of day (early morning or sunset).
Rod
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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I like the simplicity of this haiku, Gypsy, in that:
(1) you suggest the setting is somewhere OUTSIDE where the speaker prays, not the conventional chapel. In other words, the Speaker finds God in His natural world.
(2) In addition to "harvest," the "amber" light suggests the season--autumn, as well as the time of day (early morning or sunset).
Rod
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Thank you, my friend :)
gypsy
Comment from Ric Myworld
On our knees is where we belong to repent and pray. Then, know that our prayers aren't selfish ones, as we trust they will be answered as our Lord sees fit. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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On our knees is where we belong to repent and pray. Then, know that our prayers aren't selfish ones, as we trust they will be answered as our Lord sees fit. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Thank you, my friend :)
gypsy
