Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "summer love on beach (haiku)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
85 total reviews
Comment from Dan-C
I always enjoy your writing, this haiku is no exception. Living I Florida, I know from personal experience many years ago.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I always enjoy your writing, this haiku is no exception. Living I Florida, I know from personal experience many years ago.
Thank you for sharing,
Dan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dan, for your review of my haiku. Many Floridians have also shared similar personal experiences. Thanks.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This has some great summer visuals. They are so powerful that I just feel the shifting sand, hear the waves and can picture the couple on the beach.
You did a great job with the three lines given.
I enjoyed reading this, and you have a delightful presentation.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This has some great summer visuals. They are so powerful that I just feel the shifting sand, hear the waves and can picture the couple on the beach.
You did a great job with the three lines given.
I enjoyed reading this, and you have a delightful presentation.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Yelena, for your review and compliments. I appreciate them.
Comment from bhogg
I don't know if you'll win your contest. Sort of more like a Senryu. Hey though, you won a smile from me. Age myself, but I remember the dark movie, From Here to Eternity. For the time the scene on the beach was thought risque.
Good luck. Bill
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I don't know if you'll win your contest. Sort of more like a Senryu. Hey though, you won a smile from me. Age myself, but I remember the dark movie, From Here to Eternity. For the time the scene on the beach was thought risque.
Good luck. Bill
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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You' are right, Bill, this is more a senryu. Given that the Haiku Club published an anthology of our nature haiku, we are now turning our attention to human haiku. It is not a contest but it is in a sense. The first anthology published five of my haiku. I want to increase my accepted haiku in the sequel. Thank you for wishing me the best.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
The fact that you have Sinatra singing "I've got you under my skin" after I have read that the sand is "where the sun don't shine" is hilarious. This is a great poem and we need humor.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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The fact that you have Sinatra singing "I've got you under my skin" after I have read that the sand is "where the sun don't shine" is hilarious. This is a great poem and we need humor.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Nancy, for your cheering review. I'm glad you found my combination of poem and song hilarious.
Comment from Ulla
Hahahah, I loved this haiku about a summer affair. Wonderful Satori. Yeah it would do all that and much more. A really good entry. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hahahah, I loved this haiku about a summer affair. Wonderful Satori. Yeah it would do all that and much more. A really good entry. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Ulla, for your review of my Ha-ha poem and for wishing me the best. The same to you, too.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This was very humorous indeed and yes sand gets in places we don't want it to get.
Great summer love haiku:)
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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This was very humorous indeed and yes sand gets in places we don't want it to get.
Great summer love haiku:)
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Teresa, I am glad you found my summer love haiku humorous.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hahaha. That's funny. I wrote a nonet a long time ago about this same thing. How a passionate rendezvous on the beach ended with butt-crack sand, lol. Thank you for the chuckle. Great write.
Ron
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Hahaha. That's funny. I wrote a nonet a long time ago about this same thing. How a passionate rendezvous on the beach ended with butt-crack sand, lol. Thank you for the chuckle. Great write.
Ron
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Ron, for your review of my haiku about butt-crack sand. I am glad you found this chuckling poem funny.
Comment from hari anand
I liked your creative haiku with a summary touch of water and sand. picture's a perfect match. Loved the satori part ouch.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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I liked your creative haiku with a summary touch of water and sand. picture's a perfect match. Loved the satori part ouch.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, hargunanand, for your review of my creative haiku. I appreciate it.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. That's the problem with just swimming in the ocean whether in love or not. I like the delicate way you express it as where "the sun don't shine" and the repeated "ch" sounds that show us the effect on the skin.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Lol. That's the problem with just swimming in the ocean whether in love or not. I like the delicate way you express it as where "the sun don't shine" and the repeated "ch" sounds that show us the effect on the skin.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, lyenochka, for your review of my LOL poem. I am glad you like my delicate handling of a gritty situation.
Comment from thonnigford09
Sis Cat, This was a very humorous poem. I love the artwork. Flows well and I would recommend this. This was a great poem in so few words. Thanks, Theresa.
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Sis Cat, This was a very humorous poem. I love the artwork. Flows well and I would recommend this. This was a great poem in so few words. Thanks, Theresa.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Oh, thank you, Teresa, for your generous, six star review of my very humorous poem. I am glad you recommend my poem if not summer loving on the beach. Thanks again.
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LOL Thanks:):):)
