Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Haiku (on their bed at dawn)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
28 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem. You are very good at writing them. I always look forward to reading them too.
Kat
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
Again you've written a very nice poem. You are very good at writing them. I always look forward to reading them too.
Kat
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you,
Gypsy
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You're welcome. Kat
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-one can take this both ways and that is is just her husband he's got cold hands and she's kind of upset with him because it woke her up or this could be a friendly horror movie and the monster finally came out from underneath the bed or it could be your ex-lover coming back to kill her?
-Either way you look at it it's really well-written and it gets the point across very clearly.
-This would be great for the book.
-Take care and have a good one
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-one can take this both ways and that is is just her husband he's got cold hands and she's kind of upset with him because it woke her up or this could be a friendly horror movie and the monster finally came out from underneath the bed or it could be your ex-lover coming back to kill her?
-Either way you look at it it's really well-written and it gets the point across very clearly.
-This would be great for the book.
-Take care and have a good one
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are very welcome.
Alex
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is certainly about horror and it would certainly be a rude awakening which makes that line a great satori. Very vivid imagery and good interconnected lines.
Teresa
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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This is certainly about horror and it would certainly be a rude awakening which makes that line a great satori. Very vivid imagery and good interconnected lines.
Teresa
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The words of your haiku are truly chilling to me, my friend....
I can relate to this in some ways, altho it was black eyes
and bruises on my arms that betrayed what I was going
through at the time......
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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The words of your haiku are truly chilling to me, my friend....
I can relate to this in some ways, altho it was black eyes
and bruises on my arms that betrayed what I was going
through at the time......
Margaret
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. I'm sorry you had that bad me.
Gypsy
Comment from apky
Well put, Gypsy. The worst rude awakening I've had in this sense was from a close relative who knew my weakest points and aimed at them. Nasty. I'll never forget the icy feeling that grabbed my heart for days on end.
Hugs,
Aki
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Well put, Gypsy. The worst rude awakening I've had in this sense was from a close relative who knew my weakest points and aimed at them. Nasty. I'll never forget the icy feeling that grabbed my heart for days on end.
Hugs,
Aki
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, Gypsy, rude awakening, indeed, to be followed by a rude eternal sleep. Your captures a moment of horror where and when the victim is most vulnerable. You paint a stark picture that grips me, around the neck as it were. Thank you for sharing and scaring.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Yes, Gypsy, rude awakening, indeed, to be followed by a rude eternal sleep. Your captures a moment of horror where and when the victim is most vulnerable. You paint a stark picture that grips me, around the neck as it were. Thank you for sharing and scaring.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a way to wake up, or not to wake up, which seems a definite probability for her. LOL! Thanks for sharing another of your fine poems of possibilities. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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What a way to wake up, or not to wake up, which seems a definite probability for her. LOL! Thanks for sharing another of your fine poems of possibilities. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, MariVal, that they are indeed.
You and I have both been betrayed by someone we loved deeply, and it is not a feeling we would wish on even our worst enemies, I'm sure.
Okay, you wouldn't, but I just might, heh-heh...
Excellent horror haiku, darlin'.
My only regret is that I have no more sixes remaining to award you for your stunning effort.
Well done...like a fine, juicy steak (or a stake through the heart is more like it!).
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Yes, MariVal, that they are indeed.
You and I have both been betrayed by someone we loved deeply, and it is not a feeling we would wish on even our worst enemies, I'm sure.
Okay, you wouldn't, but I just might, heh-heh...
Excellent horror haiku, darlin'.
My only regret is that I have no more sixes remaining to award you for your stunning effort.
Well done...like a fine, juicy steak (or a stake through the heart is more like it!).
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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LoL thank you, honey, your words are my six. You are funny .... I needed that. I am on the train and bored to tears......sigh.....
Gypsy hugs
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I hope you have a fantastic trip and a nice visit, darlin'.
~Me...
Comment from Ricky1024
"A Haiku based on Deception.'
"I don't usually write in 'Short Form."
{Can't see the sense in it}
"Even though I have a whole book from...
"A Vancouver Poet that I met at a competition in DC.
"Filled and explaining the birth of 'Haiku.'
Ricky...
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"A Haiku based on Deception.'
"I don't usually write in 'Short Form."
{Can't see the sense in it}
"Even though I have a whole book from...
"A Vancouver Poet that I met at a competition in DC.
"Filled and explaining the birth of 'Haiku.'
Ricky...
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you
Comment from lyenochka
Scary. What's scarier is that we don't know "whose cold grip." Is it a personification of Fear or Death? Or is it some real being that likes choking people in their sleep? Suspenseful.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Scary. What's scarier is that we don't know "whose cold grip." Is it a personification of Fear or Death? Or is it some real being that likes choking people in their sleep? Suspenseful.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Is her husband this the betrayal I mentioned in my notes.
Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
