The Hideaway
Flash Fiction20 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
I think this is a good read.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
I see ABSOLUTELY NO need for improvement.
Nice artwork: The image shown goes well with the story.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Sudden Flash Fiction.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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I think this is a good read.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
I see ABSOLUTELY NO need for improvement.
Nice artwork: The image shown goes well with the story.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Sudden Flash Fiction.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 10-May-2017
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and the thoughtful review!
Comment from MizKat
Hi frogbook,
It was interesting to read. I couldn't figure out if it was about one man and one dog or what. Regardless I still enjoyed it.
Kat
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hi frogbook,
It was interesting to read. I couldn't figure out if it was about one man and one dog or what. Regardless I still enjoyed it.
Kat
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Yes the man was a scientist and the dog his experiment. Thanks for reading.
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It thought it was about the man and his dog. I felt bad that they both died. Kat
Comment from apky
I think it's really good: dialogue, imagery, a sad-happy ending:
Plan B worked. By the time the men came next morning, the medicine had long sent the two to their final sleep. The fire consumed anything they might want to study.
What more could a reader ask for?
Apky
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I think it's really good: dialogue, imagery, a sad-happy ending:
Plan B worked. By the time the men came next morning, the medicine had long sent the two to their final sleep. The fire consumed anything they might want to study.
What more could a reader ask for?
Apky
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thanks so much for you lind review.
Comment from lyenochka
This is really well done for the limited number of words. I found it completely engaging as to what would happen next. The only thing is I'd hoped for something completely extraordinary for Plan B like a hidden rocket under the house or something outrageous and unexpected. But it probably is more realistic. Sad for these very lovable characters.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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This is really well done for the limited number of words. I found it completely engaging as to what would happen next. The only thing is I'd hoped for something completely extraordinary for Plan B like a hidden rocket under the house or something outrageous and unexpected. But it probably is more realistic. Sad for these very lovable characters.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thanks so much. I did like the characters too. At least they had a full life. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, JoAnn. This is another mfine story. well written from start to finish.
A few bumps along the way, but easily fixed, like: " hung up their coats and took down the two cans of soup left. (bad grammatically, I'm afraid. Try. "hung up their coats and reached for the two remaining cans of soup."
And: "there was a knock at the door, startling them. Try: (a knock on the door startled them.)
Clever story and I wish you the best of luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hi, JoAnn. This is another mfine story. well written from start to finish.
A few bumps along the way, but easily fixed, like: " hung up their coats and took down the two cans of soup left. (bad grammatically, I'm afraid. Try. "hung up their coats and reached for the two remaining cans of soup."
And: "there was a knock at the door, startling them. Try: (a knock on the door startled them.)
Clever story and I wish you the best of luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thanks much for reading and the great suggestions too. Much appreciated. Will have to work out as I can't add any words.
Comment from frierajac
I thought that this piece is well written, as I enjoyed reading. Not everyone shares
the sentiments regarding dogs, and other sentient beings. In fact, there is the notion
that speaking with animals maybe is an indication of mental unbalance. Perhaps
this opinion is another sign of the decadence of culture?
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I thought that this piece is well written, as I enjoyed reading. Not everyone shares
the sentiments regarding dogs, and other sentient beings. In fact, there is the notion
that speaking with animals maybe is an indication of mental unbalance. Perhaps
this opinion is another sign of the decadence of culture?
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I talk to my dogs every minute-LOL. But, then again, I am a little crazy! Thanks for your thoughts and review.
Comment from pbomar1115
I'm not sure but I think two scientist share living as dogs. They have a son who keeps their secret until he is has to be put on ice. After the warning for their lives from the son's girl, the scientists go to plan B which is committing suicide. Very nice story and writing as well.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I'm not sure but I think two scientist share living as dogs. They have a son who keeps their secret until he is has to be put on ice. After the warning for their lives from the son's girl, the scientists go to plan B which is committing suicide. Very nice story and writing as well.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thanks much for reading!
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You're welcome.
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You're welcome.
Comment from RodG
It is surprising how sympathetic Dr. Ravens & Bella become in only 750 words. We quickly understand why they would lead reclusive lives. They have one devoted friend who sacrificed his life for them. Good commentary on a society where everything extraordinary (like Bella) becomes a military weapon. Plan B, though heartbreaking, is their only option.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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It is surprising how sympathetic Dr. Ravens & Bella become in only 750 words. We quickly understand why they would lead reclusive lives. They have one devoted friend who sacrificed his life for them. Good commentary on a society where everything extraordinary (like Bella) becomes a military weapon. Plan B, though heartbreaking, is their only option.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi, my friend! Where did this come from??? It's brilliant. I can imagine this as a novel, you could really go to town on this plot, I don't think anyone has come up with such a fantastic idea as this. I loved it. It might not have many words, but the story unfolded smoothly, it was tense and sweet, horrid in that Steven was shot, and the ending was the only way it could have been. They were old and in pain anyway, so had lived a good long life before plan B had to be implemented. Very well done, and good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Hi, my friend! Where did this come from??? It's brilliant. I can imagine this as a novel, you could really go to town on this plot, I don't think anyone has come up with such a fantastic idea as this. I loved it. It might not have many words, but the story unfolded smoothly, it was tense and sweet, horrid in that Steven was shot, and the ending was the only way it could have been. They were old and in pain anyway, so had lived a good long life before plan B had to be implemented. Very well done, and good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thanks so much, my friend for this wonderful rating!! I'm not sure where this came to mind, it was one of those I just wanted to write the flash fiction and out it came-haha.
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I wish my flashes would come like that! I'll watch out for the voting. xxx
Comment from emptypage
Oh, man. Timely story. Scary, but very realistic. Sad as all get out. I have a feeling I'll be thinking about this one for today and beyond. We'll see.
Good luck.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, man. Timely story. Scary, but very realistic. Sad as all get out. I have a feeling I'll be thinking about this one for today and beyond. We'll see.
Good luck.
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Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thanks much. That is the greatest compliment if a story sticks with someone, so truly appreciate hearing that.
